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Hi My complete profile is as follows: UG : 74.3% (Topper 81%) (Intrumentation & Control Engineering, Netaji Subhas Institute of Technology, University Of Delhi)GRE: 327 (Q-170, V-157, AWA-4) TOEFL- 107 (R-28, L-30, S-23, W-26) Work Experience: 2 Years ( Instrumentation (Operations & Maintenance) engineer at Indraprastha Gas Limited) Responsibilities include: Gas reconciliation, optimizing spares and inventory expenses, execution of safety & statutory compliances and MIS generation Bachelor Thesis Project: Performance enhancement of an accelerometer using Intelligent Techniques - Mathematical modeling followed by simulation of capacitive MEMS accelerometer - Comparative study of performance parameters like linear range, sensitivity and ITAE (Integral of the Time-weighted Absolute Error) in open loop, closed loop with PID (tuned using Ziegler Nichols), closed loop with PID (tuned using Genetic Algorithm) and closed loop Fuzzy PI + Fuzzy PD (tuned using Genetic Algorithm) modes. Merit Scholarship for all 4 years of BE at NSIT, University of Delhi Internships: 1. NTPC: 1 month internship at a Thermal Power Plant 2. GAIL: 2 months internship on Turbine & Orifice Flowmeter (based on AGA reports) 3. BHEL: 2 months internship on speed, current and voltage sensors used in Rotating machines. LORs: One from Professor with which I did my Bachelor Thesis Project (ICE, NSIT), One from Chief Manager,GAIL (Summer Internship) & the last from Additional Manager (Supervisor) at IGL. What are my chances of getting a seat in MS in IE with a specialization in Operations Research in the following Universities: 1. Cornell University (M Eng. OR)2. Georgiatech (MSOR)3. Texas A&M University (MS/M Eng IE)4. University of Texas, Austin (MS OR)5. University of Wisconsin, Madison (MS IE)6. North Carolina State University (MOR/MSOR) RegardsSanmks

Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. The author's claim of questioning the unique ability of the prehistoric Palean people to produce the distinctive woven baskets is based on dubious assumptions and requires further evidence to support such claim. Only when a concrete evidence is established correlating the baskets to any one civilisation can such remarks be made. The Brim river has been described as being very deep and broad . But no timeline is attached to this fact. Maybe during the prehistoric times there was no river at all. The requirement of boats by the Palean people is thus nullified by considering such line of reasoning. The archaeological expeditions are a time bound process, with time new discoveries are made that challenge the previous one. Failure of finding a boat doesn't undermine the fact that there can be boats. Maybe boats will be found later in further excavations just as the woven baskets were found recently near Lithos. The assumption of transfer of baskets by only Palean boats is not acceptable. If there was trade between people of Palea & Lithos, it could have take place with the help of Lithos people's boat also. So requirement of Palean people's boat is unnecessary. Also trade could be a factor responsible for the finding of the baskets near Lithos. When further evidence such as finding the same intricate pattern as found on woven baskets is found on other items of Palean people can we make a claim that they were unique to them. If these patterns for example are also found on the houses of Palean people we can confirm it's uniqueness to people of Palea. The author should take into consideration all these before mentioned evidences in order to make to a better decision regarding the source of the woven baskets.

Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position. Nowadays students have variety of disciplines from which to choose their major when applying to a university. In the engineering sciences alone there are a lot of new streams like Nanotechnology & Biotechnology, which were absent from the scene a few decades ago. But to force or make it mandatory for a student to choose a variety of courses outside his or her field of study is not a welcomed move. Such thought would do more harm than good and would be detrimental for society. Forcing a student to take a variety of courses outside his or her field of study is bad. Universities can’t dictate their own terms on matters related to students choice of subjects. Every student has the right or the freedom to choose what subjects they would like to study. They are no more children; they are adults now and can make choices on their own best that best serve their interests. When universities will force students to take a variety of courses outside their field of study not everyone will accept this with open arms. There will never be whole hearted support for such thought. Students will only takes these courses for the sake of taking a course. They would just try to achieve the passing marks in these subjects as they would have no interest in them. Though variety kills the humdrum of life and bring the diverse experiences to oneself simply forcing students to take a variety of courses outside their field of study would be bad. Students should instead be encouraged to look into the benefits of taking few courses outside their field of study. Taking few courses outside their field of study can lead to more holistic growth of these students. Sometimes knowing a few other things than your major can help one in life. Variety in itself is good, but forcing it is bad. Students have the right to choose their own subjects by their own free will. Subjecting them to force would produce a half-hearted result that would not serve the purpose of introducing the variety.

Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position. Nowadays students have variety of disciplines from which to choose their major when applying to a university. In the engineering sciences alone there are a lot of new streams like Nanotechnology & Biotechnology, which were absent from the scene a few decades ago. But to force or make it mandatory for a student to choose a variety of courses outside his or her field of study is not a welcomed move. Such thought would do more harm than good and would be detrimental for society. Forcing a student to take a variety of courses outside his or her field of study is bad. Universities can’t dictate their own terms on matters related to students choice of subjects. Every student has the right or the freedom to choose what subjects they would like to study. They are no more children; they are adults now and can make choices on their own best that best serve their interests. When universities will force students to take a variety of courses outside their field of study not everyone will accept this with open arms. There will never be whole hearted support for such thought. Students will only takes these courses for the sake of taking a course. They would just try to achieve the passing marks in these subjects as they would have no interest in them. Though variety kills the humdrum of life and bring the diverse experiences to oneself simply forcing students to take a variety of courses outside their field of study would be bad. Students should instead be encouraged to look into the benefits of taking few courses outside their field of study. Taking few courses outside their field of study can lead to more holistic growth of these students. Sometimes knowing a few other things than your major can help one in life. Variety in itself is good, but forcing it is bad. Students have the right to choose their own subjects by their own free will. Subjecting them to force would produce a half-hearted result that would not serve the purpose of introducing the variety.

Thanks for the detailed review. It feels great to hear that my writing has improved but still a lot needs to be done on subjects like conclusion and grammar.

How do I fare on this one? Another review by firewitch would be greatly appreciated. Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition. Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position. Government should help meritorious students lacking economic capital by funding their college education. There should be no economic hindrances which the students should face and the access to college education should be independent of matters related to money. Such unprecedented policy of free college education for economically weaker section will have a huge positive impact on the nation. Universities accept students on a merit basis. Therefore all those students who have been granted admission are sure to have educational competence to join the said university. They have passed the threshold required for admission and should not be prevented from joining the educational elite based on their economic status alone. Governments should help them by funding their college education such that they face no economic barrier in joining the colleges of their choice. Government by passing the free college education for economically weak but meritorious students would help reduce the income inequality gap. The gini coefficient (income inequality index; directly proportional to income inequality) would surely reduce when the economically weak students after completing college would get well-paying jobs. Their exposure to well-paying jobs would not be hindered by their economic status. This would surely reduce the income inequality gap and therefore the gini coefficient. Even the economically weak students would prosper on the same level as their affluent counterparts. Though the capitalists would point out that such policy is purely socialist and there is no space for such policies in a capitalist society, in which every person should fend for themselves. But education is an important part of the society which should not be accessible only to the lucky few with the means. Governments have the responsibility to provide equal opportunity to all students in joining colleges independent of their economic status. But the important point to note is that though education plays an important role in the society, government has other goals as well. It has only a limited capital with which to achieve all its goals. So there has to be a limit to the government funding of college education. The fund value is to have an upper cap beyond which funds cannot be allocated for college education. Also the college funding should be done in an unbiased manner not favoring any ethnic group or race. Based on above claims one is able to see the importance of government funding of college education for economically weak meritorious students. The benefits of such policy have been discussed and its limitation as well. So a somewhat clear understanding on the impacts of the passing such policy is achieved which points out the necessity of such policy in any governmental framework around the world.

Thanks for the elaborate review. This is very detailed and clearly pin points my mistakes. I knew the points were hastily put forward and the sense of flow was missing. I would surely ponder over these remarks and try to improve my essay skills.

Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain. Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position. Every year national governments around the world introduce bills in their parliaments after deliberating over the various agendas it has in its mind for the growth and prosperity of the nations. When these bills are passed they become laws and help the nations in governance. These laws should not only be concerned about the nation’s inhabitants who are humans but also of animals. Nations should therefore pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain. Human beings have the moral and social responsibility to preserve the habitat of its fellow animals in its natural pristine form. The animals have the fundamental right to occupy the wilderness to which they belong. Non-interference in the matter of animals will help them live a peaceful life in isolation. The natural biological cycle or the food chain is also preserved when we leave the wild creatures to themselves. Human interference can lead to changes in the food chain which will be detrimental to the well-being of animals. Already we have lost innumerable species due to our own neglect. These species of flora and fauna cannot be replicated or brought back to life again. This is a huge loss to our society. We must preserve the remaining wilderness with utmost care and make legislations to protect such habitats. The legislations should be effective in preserving the right of wild animals and plants. Even if we have to give up economic benefits that could have been achieved if the wilderness was put for another purpose we should preserve as much as we can. Sometimes in the wilderness there are not only animals and plants but also humans in the form of tribals who get affected by the interference of the modern man. So the concept of wilderness is not only pertaining to flora and fauna but also primitive humans as such whose rights must be protected. When a policy of preservation of the remaining wilderness in their natural state will be passed as law it would be a big win for all those environmentalists who have put all their lives for the cause of wildlife. Such laws will help in the sustainable development of humans along with animals. But these laws should never serve to hamper economic development of the nations by killing every other economic that can be realized without having a negative effect on the wilderness itself. We have seen the positive impacts of the opening up of wildlife sanctuaries which preserve the habitats in their natural state and help prevent hunting of animals or smuggling of various important wildlife products like sandalwood. This sanctuaries are the consequences of the laws serving the cause of wildlife preservation. Everyone must have reverence for such laws.

Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years. Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based. In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years because the surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. The previous statement is flawed as can be seen by analysing it from various viewpoints which only not only challenge its time period defined for success but also its path to achieve success. Defining a time period of five years for changing the staus quo is bad as it will disincentivise the incumbent to perform well as he or she will think that even if they perform extraordinarily their term would not be extended. How the claim came up with the magical figure of 5 years to change the incumbents should also be questioned. Sometimes even the governments allot 15 years as time period to achieve certain goals like the United Nation's Millenium Development Goals and the soon to be signed Sustainable Development Goals. Staus quo should be upheld when things are going well for an organisation. Only when there are problems with the current incumbent they should be relieved from their duty and new persons be put into their positions. Sometimes those in power rule for decades without any problem and sometimes they only last a few months even. It depends on the qualities of the person holding the seat, the time they will remain on their seats without degradation in quality of their governance. It is okay to have elections for the posts of governance every five years to check the public perception, but to not allow the incumbent to run again for the office is unacceptable. Even in the US a person can run for President again after completing his or her term of 4 years, so why should one change the incumbent after 5 years. Revitalization through change can be brought by introducing new reforms by the incumbent rather than changing the person in power itself. Changing the incumbents every five years does not serve the purpose of achieving success through revitalization of leadership it only serves as a disincentive for the incumbent. It will not serve any purpose and this should not be exercised. Even without changing the incumbents new reforms can be introduced which can serve the organisation better.

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Could someone help me on how to write a good intro for an essay which has a flow rather than just few sentences put together. How I can bring the different sentences into one cohesive intro paragraph.

Sorry for the incomplete essay. The problem I'm facing these days is I'm getting either stuck on the intro or to be able to complete the body paras. I'm not even able to reach the conclusion.

Please review my first incomplete essay on the following topic Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive. Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based. Will financially supporting the major cities help in the preservation of a nation's cultural tradition is a question one needs to ask these days. Is it only in the cities that a nation's culture prospers is another question which should be on everyone's mind. The nation not only contains cities but it is an amalgamation of cities, towns, villages & forests. Throught the inclusive growth of both the rural & urban areas can one nation really prosper. As compared to cities which are exposed to the globalisation of all sorts in terms of fashion and culture, the villages or the rural areas are where the true national cultures prosper. In the villages the national culture face no opposition from the external global cultures and enjoys a monopoly of sort. The cosmopolitan nature of city folks takes them further away from their own national culture sometimes. The village folk on the other hand being parochial seem to hold on to their beliefs more strongly. Though the village folks can sometimes be orthodox and hidebound they are are better protectors of the national culture than their contemporary urban folks.