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  1. Hello, I am from Brazil. These are my second's GRE essays, I wrote them in the 30 min limite. If someone could read them and give me a feedback I will appreciate. Technology, while apparently aimed to simplify our lives, only makes our lives more complicated. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. For the past years, the techonlogy is in expasion, with new inventions coming out really fast, we can see it in every person house, in the industry, in the supermarket, in the stores, everywhere. So, the technology is one of the greatest invetions made by the humanity and althought it have a down side it make peoples live easier and better. In the past, if a person wants to study or do a research he could only count with books, articles and magazines that he could get from the library, book store or another source that he could get his hands on. In other hand, the internet bring a whole new word of research and study, making possible to study on things that would be harder to find without it. The computer revolution also transformed the way people work. Instead of writing all in papers, they now use computers in their jobs, this is also true about the stores and industry, while in the past all the production and sales were registered in paper, now it's all in the computers, with the facility of the communication with the clients over the internet. Communication that by the way, were raise to a new level after the internet became popular. Now, every person with a cellphone or a computer with internet acess can read the news in real time. But, perhaps, the most accomplishiment about communcation that the internet created, was the possibility of video conferences with other persons. With this feature, a person who lives in the other side of the world can talk and see his family in real time. Also, the technology servers as entertainment to its users, with movies, series, games, and so on. With videogames, computers, televsions, smartphones, people are rounded by technology and it's unlike to see a house without it. In the other hand, people can became alienated to the technology, making impossible to do things without it, and that is the most down side about technology. Once you started using it, it became more natural and if you have to be without techonolgy for a while, you may not remember how to do things in the old way. For example, a student that always does his tests with a calculator may not remember how to do the math without it. A person who is always chating and texting others in the social networks may not do the same on the real life. In conclusion, the technology is an important thing in the twenty first century. Aimed to make peoples life easier and better, the technology is accomplishing that, with the down side of making people alienated to it.SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters. Moreover, Middleburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision. Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted. The argument is formed on some assumptions that if proved wrong could make the Supercorp decision to move from Middlesburg to Corporateville a bad decision. First, they assume that the incresce in homeowner in Corporateville proves that it is a superior place to live compared to Middlesburg. But, in fact, they do not know why this incresce happen. It could be because a new industry is starting in Corporateville, or because the houses in this area are cheaper then in the other areas. But it does not make clear that Corporateville is superior to Middlesburg. Second, they did a survery with their employees to determinate if they prefer to live on the urban area or not. Surveys are not always precise and the result that all the employees prefer to live on a not urban area is relied on this survey, witch could be that fifty one percent prefer and forty nine do not, so, if they move to the new area, they will make almost half of their employees unhappy. Third, they stated that Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, but it's not mentioned in the argument how this information was obtained. It was troughtout a survey? Did they looked all the products? Did they checked all the taxes an compare them? So, this assumption could easily be proved wrong. Fourth, stating that Corporateville is a safer place, they do not mentioned how they reached this conclusion. Perhaps it's concluded by the surge on homeowners, or that it's not a urban area, but they do not say why it's a safer place, and, this can not be stated as true. In conclusion, with these four assumptions, the decision to move to Corporateville is unlike to be prove warranted, and so, the SuperCorp made a bad decision after all.Thanks!
  2. Thanks for the feedback Vince, I appreciate it. I'll work on your suggestions and do another essays.
  3. Hello, I started my path to the GRE, I am from Brazil. If someone could do a quick read on the folowing essays and comment on them I apreciate. Issue Essay Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position. The educational institutions the keys to lead the students for the future, and encouraging them to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers seems a good manner to create greater future workers and also improve some students life's. When a future employer is in its studying days, he should receive directions to study the areas that are in most advance, and consequently, lead to lucrative careers. By so, If a student know that the area that he is focusing could bring good profits in the future then the student probably will study harder to accomplish that. After all these work, the lucrative career seem to be a great reward. These encouragement can also be positive to those with a poor family that could not dream with a better life. With the education institution help, these students can choose the fields that they know will make their families wealthy, and it's only on their hands to make that true. Although there's some good ways that encouraging students to choose the areas that seem most lucrative for careers, students must have the right to choose only the ones that they like. Study for a lucrative career could be a good way to make a new professional to the market, however, if the future worker do not like the field that he will work, them he would probably be frustrated. For example, if a student named "Guy" is encouraged to choose the field of science, but he does not like this area and he still study this and become a scientist, chances are that he will be an unhappy employer. Another point that must be considered when encouraging students to choose these fields that could lead to lucrative careers is that these lucrative careers could not be as lucrative as it is in the progress of the student studies. Say for example, if a person study to work as a pc programmer, in the moment of he's studies this is a good careers, but it must be verified at somehow if at the end of the studies it still be a lucrative career. In resume, students must be encourage to choose the fields that will prepare them for lucrative careers if they like the areas that these fields could lead. In other words, the prospect careers should meet the students expectations. Argument Essay The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of Movies Galore, a chain of movie-rental stores. "In order to stop the recent decline in our profits, we must reduce operating expenses at Movies Galore's ten movie-rental stores. Since we are famous for our special bargains, raising our rental prices is not a viable way to improve profits. Last month our store in downtown Marston significantly decreased its operating expenses by closing at 6:00 P.M. rather than 9:00 P.M. and by reducing its stock by eliminating all movies released more than five years ago. By implementing similar changes in our other stores, Movies Galore can increase profits without jeopardizing our reputation for offering great movies at low prices." The text describes that repeating the same process that the store in downtown Marston did to increase profits will also increase the others store profits. By assuming that the movie preferences of the costumers of the stores are the same of the ones from downtown Marston and that they have the same period to rent and also that they cannot raise their rental prices flawed the sentence. The sentence says that removing all movies released more than five years ago will increase the profits the same way that happen to the store in downtown Marston. This is a unfounded statement, because the people who rent movies at the downtown Marston may not want to rent the same movies in other stores, they may like to rent older movies, or rent one new and some old to re-watch for example. If the text showed surveys that were conducted on the other stores that prove that older movies are not much rented then this assumption could be proved true. In second place, stating that changing the closing time to 6:00 P.M. rather than 9:00 P.M. will raise the income to the others stores is unsustain. We can infer that people do not rent much later than 6:00 P.M. at downtown Marston, but also could be true that in the others stores this is the period that most rents occurs. In other words, the people who rent in the others tem movie-rental stores could possibly rent most at nigh period, and changing the closing time to sooner than that will only decrease the profits instead of increase them. For last, the text says that the movie-rental stores are famous for their special bargains, and increasing their rental prices is not a viable way to improve profits. This statement could be proved wrong, because they could have their special bargains and also increase their rental prices. For example, if the price to rent a movie is four dollars, they could increase to five dollars and make a special bargain to rent five movies for twenty dollars, by doing this, they raise their profits without losing their famous for bargains. In conclusion, the whole sentence is flawed by assuming that the people who shop at one store is the same that shops on the other tens, and that they rent at the same period and also that they cannot raise their rental prices without losing their famous. Thanks!!
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