cmhc2017

I would be so grateful if someone could give me feedback on a statement of purpose! It's a little lengthy, but objectively, I think it reads well, so length may be a risk I'm willing to take. I'm pretty proud of it- poured my blood, sweat, and tears into it.

Hey! I am applying to MHC programs as well, and I just read your statement. I've been working hard on mine as well, and I think yours looks good. I have a couple suggestions for you 1) I would maybe say something about how incredible it would to be able to use your passion for social justice, as opposed to "could not bear to forego it." 2) I would suggest not even mentioning your quant score, but if you do, I'd subtly integrate it somewhere else, not at the very end. It seems like the rest of your qualifications really speak for itself; it's very strong with research and practical application! 3) I would add a little more tailoring to the programs you're applying to- how the specific program matches up with your goals, etc. to show that that program would be a great fit for you 4) person-first language: I would replace "a schizophrenic" with "a schizophrenic man" or better yet, "a man with schizophrenia" 5) I'd suggest emphasizing that you were excited to work at COPE or were not sure what to expect, but went into it wanting to grow your resume- you are quite brutally honest with the fact that you only considered it a resume builder A program could consider that honesty respectable, but also may think it undermines your passion.