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  1. Are you looking to reach an Ivy League or your dream school? I can help with the process. Not too long ago, I was in your shoes. I thought that attending a great university or an Ivy League meant that you had to be at the top of your class or be really rich. I was neither. In fact, I was the first person in my immediate and extended family to go to college! Needless to say, I had no clue about the college/grad school application process, but I was motivated to change my destiny and willing to learn. I received a full-tuition, four-year leadership scholarship to attend a top private university for undergrad and received my masters from the Harvard Graduate School of Education, specializing in international education. I have gained 10+ years of experience in educating and coaching others and 8+ years of professional writing. I enjoy helping others achieve their goals and believe that anything is possible with a proper PLAN. If you are interested in learning how to prepare the strongest grad school application possible for an Ivy League or your dream school, I am happy to help. My services include help with the following: personal statement writing, admissions strategy, interview prep, and admissions application review. Feel free to message me with any queries.
  2. Hi. I'm planning to apply to clinical psychology PhD programs soon for Fall 2018 and I've decided to start on my personal statements. However, UC Berkeley's prompt (or rather multiple prompts) has me confused. On the psychology department's Application Instructions page and Berkeley's general Writing a Personal Statement page, it says to write a personal statement about... How you have overcome barriers to access in higher education. Evidence of how you have come to understand the barriers faced by others. Evidence of your academic service to advance equitable access to higher education for women, racial minorities, and individuals from other groups that have been historically underrepresented in higher education. Evidence of your research focusing on underserved populations or related issues of inequality. Evidence of your leadership among underserved populations. However, the psychology department also has the FAQ - General Admissions page, which says... The personal history statement should discuss how your personal background influences your decision to pursue a graduate degree in psychology. For example, please include information on how you have overcome barriers; evidence of your academic service to advance equitable access to higher education for women, racial minorities, and individuals from other groups that have been historically under represented in higher education; evidence of your research focusing on underserved populations or related issues of inequality, or evidence of your leadership among such groups. Some questions to consider are: What hardships have you overcome? What have been your successes? What obstacles came up? Show how you persevered. How did you become interested in psychology? Were you in some way different from the majority of students in your class? Was your family supportive in your decision to choose psychology as a career field? Were you influenced by your parents’ education and career? Were you in a single parent family? Was much of your time spent taking care of your siblings? Did you work while going to school? Is psychology a common career field for people of your cultural background? Question 1: Which prompt do I write about? I will admit that I am a white, privileged person whose life has been financially stable. I have ideas about what I would write about if I chose the first prompt (working in a hospital + growing up in a racially diverse area), but they will pale in comparison with the statements of other applicants who have essays that are closer to home. I feel like I could write a better essay if I chose the second prompt (enduring and overcoming the consequences of a natural disaster), but I feel like that's a cop-out. I know Berkeley wants diverse applicants and I shouldn't beat around the bush. Also, when they say "What hardships have you overcome?", do they mean hardships exclusively concerning diversity/underrepresented groups, or would it be inappropriate to write about a natural disaster? Question 2: Where do I put my interest in psychology: the PS or the SoP? If you look at the FAQ - General Admissions page, it says to answer "What sparked your interest in psychology?" in your Statement of Purpose and to answer "How did you become interested in psychology?" I have a good story to tell about how I got interested in psychology, but I don't want to repeat myself. Do I answer in both statements? Maybe give a more lengthy answer in my SoP and briefly mention it in my PS? Can I assume that the AdComm will read one statement before the other so I could treat the two statements like two pieces of a longer work? Thank you for getting this far and reading my wall of text
  3. Hello All, I hope everyone has been getting the results they want in regards to getting accepted into the school they desire. As for me, I'm still hoping. I'm on the waiting list (Western Carolina) and then I need to submit my application for South Carolina State Uni. I'm looking for other options in case I don't get into grad school...for the 2nd time. I wanted to get ya'lls opinion on something. I want to include in my personal essay the reason why I am pursuing this career is because I know how it feels to be insecure about not speaking correctly or not being able to get one's thoughts out. It's frustrating and I'm in that shoes. I'd like to help those who are going through that. However, I haven't been to a Speech Therapist and been diagnosed, I just know it because I'm going through it. How can I relay that in my paper. I know I had someone tell me they don't recommend putting something like that in a paper if it's not diagnosed professionally. What's all of your recommendations? Thank you in advance,
  4. Hi all, Does anyone have any advice on writing personal statements for grad school apps? Applying this fall and wanted to try to get ahead. I've looked at some school's websites to see what they're looking for, but I wanted to see if anyone had specific tips. Thanks ahead of time!
  5. I can share a link to a google doc if you would like to give me writing feedback on the personal statement.
  6. Hey everyone, Currently working on my application for Fall 2017 fiction MFA programs. I'm wondering if y'all have any insight into how formal MFA personal statements ought to be. My reflex is to write something conversational. Would particularly like to hear from those who have been accepted in years past - what worked for you? Thanks, Justin
  7. Hi, I need some help regarding self-introduction letter and statement of purpose. I have written my self introduction letter and sop. If someone could give a review how is it written and what could be done to improve ? If anyone is interested I could PM. Thanks in Advance
  8. Hello, I am applying to a Master of Historic Preservation program. I am trying to reduce the length of my statement from 900 words to a word count close to 500, and receive more general feedback on the structure and content of my statement. Would anyone be willing to peer review my text? Thank you!
  9. I just found a typo in my SoP after I submitted it. I omitted an 'am' after 'I'. Should have not completely relied on MSWord to check grammar for me.... Will this significantly affect my chance of admission?
  10. Hey guys! Sorry if this is a stupid question, but in the APA 6th edition (which is what I'm required to use for my submission), a title page is used, as well as an abstract. I know for a personal statement for grad school, an abstract sounds kind of insane, so I figured that's not necessary. However do we need a title page? Do we need info on the headers?? I just want everything to be perfect and I know I'm overthinking everything. Thank you!
  11. Something along the lines of "I appreciate your consideration for reviewing my application... etc" ?
  12. A bit confused regarding how detailed I should be at certain places. Took feedback from a couple of people, but still need some more. Let me know if anyone's up for it! Thanks,
  13. Hi guys, I'm applying for a Ph.D. program in oceanography / Earth sciences. And I need some suggestions on the content and reading fluency of my SOP. I'd appreciate your generous help!! The essay is posted as below: To maximize my academic potential in physical oceanography, I made up my mind to pursue a doctoral degree at ESS. This is a natural outcome after my deep reflections on life experience. Exercising diligence to give full play of my intelligence, I finished my secondary education under a special State Financial-aid. And yet the admission letter from Xiamen University has brought me to a new evaluation of life. Here is the college, then what's the future I want indeed? I spent 2 years seeking the answer until I took Dr. Pettigrew's class on physical oceanography (graduate level). This was probably the trigger of something which was simmering deeper down. I’d often be enchanted by fluid phenomena like river flows or swirls. Nothing conscious, it would just happen. Only when I combined them with dynamic equations did I realize that those ubiquitous phenomena are actually something governed by rigorous physics. But the fluid mechanics class I took at the University of Maine was geared towards engineering applications, and somehow that did not resonate with my initial thoughts. Until I started reading books on ocean dynamics like The Turbulent Ocean (Thorpe, 2005), Atmosphere-Ocean Dynamics (Gill, 1982), did I realize there are more appealing complexities lying behind. The Earth’s rotation, sphericity and the variable density distribution throughout the ocean would introduce physics unlike anything I had ever heard of and the diversity of geophysical fluid dynamics phenomena was just like a bottomless well where I could find inspiration. Later on, especially after participating in the IPCC report conference in 2015, I gradually got to understand the role ocean plays in the climate system, which also resonated with my general concerns as an ordinary citizen. Now I feel like it’s the right time for me to explore the even more amazing side of physical oceanography in graduate school and to prepare myself for careers in teaching and research in academia. And all the effort I made to come to this point has built a solid background for my professional growth. During the last 3 years of my study involved with oceanography, I have set an extensive knowledge basis in mathematics, physics, chemistry, biology and geology. Out of the desire to share ideas, I organized a seminar group among my peers to discuss some novel topics like ocean acidification, climate change, carbon circulation, etc. Sometimes we even mentored each other to disabuse ourselves of the confusion in different fields. To get exposed to a research environment, I joined a wave observation project for Taiwan Strait as a freshman. I focused on the statistical and characteristic analysis of significant wave height, period and wind speed to reveal their spatiotemporal variabilities and interrelation, thus built a database for future wave forecast, especially during hurricanes and storm surges. This project gave me a basic idea of the research processes, from proposal, implementation to conclusion, discussion, and my interest in oceanography got developed further. In a later course project on performing harmonic analysis for one-month water level data, I wrote a MATLAB function to calculate harmonic constants for considered tidal constituents using a least square method. Incorporating with my partner’s work, we designed a script to dissect the tidal characteristics of a gridded area, and the reverse forecast also showed good congruency with original data. This programming experience was proved to be beneficial in my subsequent dissertation project, which focuses on a reverse method regarding isoneutral and dianeutral mixing proposed by Dr. McDougall. He developed the conservation equations under a neutral surface framework to show that the very small dianeutral velocities can contribute significantly to the lateral advection of scalers. Based on these, I implemented a combination of conservation equations in divergence form, thus formed a method to obtain parameterization for the isoneutral and dianeutral mixing via applying the hydrographic data to a least squares solution. Still, encouraged by Dr. Zhiyu, I'm trying to estimate the general currents pattern and distribution of tracers across the ocean by applying some canonical diffusivities. This may generate an inspiration for rectification of numerical models in future. At present, my general research interests center on fluid dynamics of the ocean and climate, especially on ocean circulation and multiscale mixing processes. Moving toward graduate school, I prefer to extend my study to the statistical and dynamic analysis of mixing processes (e.g. eddies, turbulence). They play a vital role in the ocean by affecting material transport, vertical stratification, large scale currents, and air-sea interaction. From my former research, I learned that parameterization was not enough to fully explain their functions coupled with energy transfer and dispersion. I'm looking forward to exploring the mechanisms governing their genesis, propagation, interaction and dissipation through theory, models and observations. This could be challenging and I think Dr. Thomas, whose research focuses on dynamics of fronts and eddies, would be an ideal advisor for me. I’m especially interested in his project on mode water formation and he is the main reason why I decided to apply for this program. Besides, I’m excited with the excellent computational resources from the High Performance Computing Center at Stanford, which would to some extent, facilitate my work in operating mathematical tools and data assimilation. Furthermore, regarding the direction after the Ph.D. program, my synoptic view at this stage is to go deeper and wider in these areas, like involving simulations of several types of these processes to develop stochastic and deterministic models for practical application in large-scale circulation, biogeochemical process or environmental problems like oil spilling. Moreover, I’d also like to dedicate myself to the outreach education of Earth science with a desire to promote environmental learning among the public, particularly under the growing concerns on climate change. With an integrated multidisciplinary research context in ESS, and the cultural diversity around Bay area, the education from Stanford will provide invaluable experiences and unusual perspectives that help me to achieve my research goal. Therefore, I assume it would be a suitable place for me to start the academic career.
  14. So I am seeing on a couple applications that I can describe "are there any other unique factors that we should consider when evaluating your application" What do you guys think they are meaning by this? Is this an opportunity for people who may have low GPA/GRE/No research experience to explain why they are still a competitive applicant? My GRE scores (quant mostly) aren't stellar but I would hate to mention how I'm just not a good standardized test taker if that is not what the question is implying. Any advice is welcome! Oh and good luck to all my fellow applicants who have applications due this week!
  15. The UCLA graduate application requires a personal history statement where you have to talk about how your life experiences and how they led to the decision to pursue the graduate field of interest. It specifically says that "this statement should not duplicate the statement of purpose". In my SoP, I am already writing about how my experiences, both personal and academic, made me apply to XXX programs so I am not sure how this personal history statement is different from the statement of purpose.
  16. Hello all, I’ve read much of the excellent advice given to others and hope that someone here can help me out as well! I am a recent graduate from EDHEC Business School in France (double degree Master's in Financial Economics and Financial Markets) and I have a BS in Chemistry from Christian Brothers University (CBU). Looking to study a MS Applied Statistics or Joint MS Applied Statistics/Computer Science Programs in order to extend my computing and modeling skills en route to a career as a quantitative researcher/trader. Ethnicity: African American (male) Maths at CBU: Calculus 1 (B) 2 (B) 3 (A) , Differential Equations (A), Statistics (A) ---- Overall GPA 3.5/4 Relevant courses at EDHEC: Econometrics, Empirical Methods in Finance, MATLAB, Visual Basic for Applications, Continuous Time Finance ---- Overall GPA: 14/20 (good for French grading scale - equivalent to ~3.5) GRE General: Maths 161, Verbal 155 Research Experience: Master's thesis (Financial Markets), EDHEC projects (Statistical Arbitrage, Monte Carlo (+ with stochastic volatility), Summer Undergraduate Research Fellowship (Chemistry, USA), Minority Health International Research Training program (Chemistry, Brazil) Pertinent Activities or Jobs: Varsity Basketball at CBU, Intern at UBS Wealth Asset Management (Monaco), Intern at Amundi Asset Management (Paris) Letters of Recommendation: 2 math professors (Calculus 3/DiffEQ, Stats) , Dean of Chemistry department (CBU) - all know me well - strong performance in their courses, 2 professors from Master's degree - both know me well - performed well in their courses. All referees have Phds (4 from top programs). What do you guys think about my prospects of getting into the following schools and any suggestions on others not listed? (CV attached as profile_info) U Chicago, Purdue (MS AS and MS Joint AS/CS), U Washington, U Minnesota, U Michigan, Penn State, U Penn, Boston U, UC San Diego, Pitt, Rutgers Also, your opinions on and any advice you could provide on how to strengthen my personal statement would be greatly appreciated. I feel that it may be lacking in motivation..any suggestions on how I can better express that given my atypical background?? (PS attached as statement) Thanks in advance for your honesty! profile_info.pdf statement.pdf
  17. Hi, are there any friendly folks out there who could review/critique my SOP and Personal Statement? They are less than two pages each. I'm applying to UC Berkeley's ESPM PhD Program (basically their equivalent of a Conservation Biology program). I've been tempted to use an online SOP critique service, but don't know if those can be trusted. And I haven't found anyone (professors, career advisors, etc.) at my alma mater who would critique this for me in time for the deadline... am getting a bit anxious, but not loosing hope that help can be found somewhere Thanks in advance!!!
  18. I'm ready to submit one of my applications to a life science phd program. The personal statement instructions consist of four questions with a length cutoff for each i.e. 200-300 words, 400 max, 300-500, etc. I've written it all and when I copy and paste it into the application form I'm not sure if I should leave it in question and answer format or if I should put it all together into essay format. The form says to make sure the personal statement is a cohesive essay but that part of the instructions is the same for every program and most don't ask specific numbered questions. What format do you think I should submit it in? Also, the form allows for a lot of extra room and one of my responses is a bit long. Do you think it's important to trim it down by a few sentences or that maybe they won't notice because form accepts it anyway? Thanks in advance!
  19. Hey all, Some of you may recall that I had a bit of a crisis over writing samples a couple of months ago, which truly defined which direction I would go when submitting applications (I was basically caught in a tug-of-war between professors who loved one potential paper over the other...and vice versa). Fortunately I was able to hone in on one a month ago, and have put that sample through a top-to-bottom revision, and am waiting on feedback from several professors. Assuming all goes well with that, I'm now having to figure out positioning. The problem is that all of my program research etc. was based on using the other writing sample and going in a different direction (not markedly different, but different enough). All of this is a preamble to saying that while I am very happy with the direction I have chosen to go in (a philological / historicist approach to Shakespeare's Sonnets), I'm having difficulty expressing my position in my SoP in a way that is neither too broad or too limiting. There are surprisingly few Sonnets scholars across U.S. institutions, and almost none of those take a philological approach. My own interests are not limited to the Sonnets, but I do feel the need to speak at length about my research in that regard. I recognize that rehashing what is in one's writing sample is a major no-no, but based on feedback I have received on early drafts of my SoP, and based on my own personal history, speaking at length about my specific interest in the Sonnets is probably quite important. Of course, given the paucity of scholars working in this area, I always want to be sure that I am not sounding TOO limited in my research interests. I haven't done a lot of philological / historicist work on other material as yet, though I very much want to (I am doing some research on Coriolanus in that regard, but am not sure how much I can play that up). And since there are more early modern philologists and historicists than there are Sonnets scholars, I suspect that I need to put a lot of weight on those methodologies. Ultimately, this is a question of balance, and I would greatly appreciate any advice that you have. Most of the programs I am applying to have the kind of scholars I really want to work with, but since only a few work on the Sonnets...how do I demonstrate that it is interesting and important research that falls within the wheelhouses of the non-Sonnets folks? I think that this nuance is absolutely vital to the success of my SoP, yet I am having a very difficult time with judging how much weight to put on the Sonnets and how much weight to put on the philological methodology. Thoughts?
  20. I guess I'll just launch right into this... So, long story short(ish), my dad died from cancer in the fall of my freshman year. After wanting to be a doctor for as long as I can remember, this finally made me realize that it was just not the right thing. Unfortunately, I'd never thought about a back-up plan, so I spent my first couple of years in majors unrelated to my current one, trying to figure out what to do with my life. I was depressed (never diagnosed; that would have required actually getting help...) and suicidal and, all in all, a complete mess, though I don't think I'll be mentioning any of those things in my applications. My GPA wasn't awful, certainly (I think a 3.45 one semester was the lowest), but it has not exactly done me any favors. In addition to all of that, my mom was diagnosed with a treatable cancer, though one with an awful and drawn-out treatment, this past spring. Again, my GPA didn't suffer terribly, but it was a noticeable drop. Currently, I'm applying to environmental chemistry PhD programs, plus the GRFP and other fellowships. My GPA is at a 3.64, my GRE is average for the programs to which I'm applying, I have no publications (though that may change), but good LORS, good research experience, and good connections. So not a stellar applicant, but not a terrible one either. I realize that explaining my circumstances won't magically make me a top applicant, but I do not want them dragging me down, as usual, and so I think I will explain either way. So, how do I go about this? Is it just a detached, one sentence explanation in my SOPs/personal statements? My experiences did not consciously influence me to choose my current field (and that explanation would probably be too sentimental for a hard science application essay, anyway), but they certainly influenced my trajectory, so do I frame it in that way? I've seen advice about having someone mention it in a LOR, but I don't think I'll ever have the guts to tell any of them.
  21. I took some time off after finishing undergrad in 2015, working as an ABA para in a public school and volunteering in a veteran's home. I began applying to grad school last fall, but I found that my mental state made this quite a daunting task, and I never completed my applications. Fast forward one year, and I am in a much better place, thanks to counseling (which I didn't have before) and time. I have started applying to schools again. but I feel like I need to explain what I did while not in school, and explain why I didn't apply before. My worry in that admissions committees will look down upon a sentence or two about mental illness. TL;DR: Would (briefly) mentioning mental health issues in my SOP be a bad idea?
  22. Hi, I wrote my first essay for grad school admissions and I don't think it's very good. Please critique and help me out with some feedback. I don't really have anyone around to read it for me so any advice helps. Also, I just want to say that I pretty much wrote as much as I could in one session so this is very rough. I included the instructions they gave me as well. MSF Essays Your essay should be single-spaced using 12 point font. Essays may be up to two-pages. Please follow the instructions on length and label each page with your name. Personal Statement In your personal statement, you should consider addressing the following: Why you want to enroll in the Georgetown MSF Program? Why do you want to attend Georgetown University? Why should the Admissions Committee accept you? What are your career aspirations and expectations upon receiving your MSF degree? Personal Statement I do not remember much about my time in high school, even though it did not happen that long ago. There is one thing though that I will never forget. My guidance counselor asked me what I wanted to be when I grew up and instead of saying “I don’t know” like most kids, 16-year-old me only said one word: Happy. And amongst all the adolescent angst and what I considered to be life or death problems, I had one thing straight that most adults have yet to figure out: being happy is the goal, not having a house or a car, but being truly content with yourself. I find it almost derisory how easy it was for me to lose track of what’s important in life in just a couple of years. I forgot to put myself first and to make the choices that were right for me and not for others around me. In my eagerness to please the people that I looked up to, I struggled through a major I disliked which resulted in less than favorable grades at the beginning of university. I finally woke up and changed my major from Chemistry to Psychology and things got better. Not long after, I was so involved in the department that I didn’t have time for myself. Now, this isn’t necessarily a bad thing, but as I was doing research and peer advising for multiple professors on top of having two demanding jobs I didn’t give myself the chance to breathe and think. I never considered these things weaknesses because I felt satisfied with my life. The problem was that it wasn’t until the academic year ended that I realized that where I was going professionally was merely the natural progression of events rather than what I wanted. At the beginning of the Summer, I was in a special place. I had just graduated from college and, like most people, I was terrified of what was ahead. My last year of college I worked harder than I had in a long time, but still I did not feel fulfilled with my accomplishments. I realized that something was missing. While everyone around me was so proud and excited for the future, I felt like I had gotten to a dead end. I had my diploma, but now what? I spent the next couple of months researching other career paths for myself and I was drawn to finance. There was an unmistakable interest in the subject that I could not ignore. I found myself reading articles and watching videos about finance and I always had more and more questions. A sort of thirst to know more and it was so strong that I began to explore graduate programs. I quickly realized that the Georgetown MSF Program was the best fit for me because I am the type of student the program is looking for. Although I have no academic background in Finance, I am driven by a genuine desire to learn the most difficult finance topics and apply them to the real world. I want to enroll in the Georgetown MSF Program because it is flexible without compromising the things that I value most in learning: student-teacher interaction and the possibility of having classroom discussions on the topics being presented. I tend to be an active participant in a classroom and I always ask questions and participate in the conversation. This program is appealing to me because the distance learning option doesn’t take away from the interpersonal aspect and it doesn’t hinder the possibility of establishing relationships with professors and other students. This is very important to me because, even though, if accepted, I am planning to relocate to Washington, D. C. there is the possibility that I may have a job or other responsibilities that would make it easier for me to stay here in Florida at the moment the program starts and I wouldn’t want to miss out on the opportunity to learn what you have to teach me merely because of distance. I’m also looking forward to participating in the residency programs. I think it’s really exciting to have the opportunity of working on a global consulting project with a real firm. This kind of experiences will prepare me for the career that I want. Just looking at the curriculum and all the challenging opportunities for growth make me feel confident in the quality of education that I would be getting. This plays a major role on why I want to go to Georgetown. I want to be a part of that community. The resources available to students are superb. Even as a prospective student, I have received tremendous support from the school and that shows me the degree of dedication to your students’ success. The fact that Georgetown is in an amazing location with lots of activities and career opportunities is also a major bonus. I aspire to work in Financial Services once I receive my MSF degree. By the time I graduate I will, hopefully, have 2-3 years of experience working in the field which will help me get a CFP certification and work as a Financial Advisor. Ideally, I would work for an established firm for a couple of years and once I have made a name for myself and built a client base I will open my own fee-only financial advising firm. I also think it’s important to give back to your community so I would like to establish an educational program for adolescents. I’ve always considered that young people don’t get enough exposure to basic personal finance principles so, in time, I would like to provide that service to my community.
  23. I'm international applicants from Korea and planning to apply for BMS for an immunology study. I just have completed my SOP and i would like to get some help from you. I'd be glad to have any comments on my writting. .. ps. I'm looking for immunology programs that are more likely to accept me As an international applicants I get less confident of my preparation. I would like to know which graduate school suit to me. GRE : 160/167/4.0 Toefl : 107 GPA : 3.38/4 GGPA : 4.0/4.3 publication : one 1st author paper being peer reviewed <<SOP>> For quite some time, my keen observation skills and strong interest in causality have been my core strengths, and this is due in large part to my medical history. I have poorly understood autoimmune disease, atopic dermatitis, that causes severe chronic skin inflammation often accompanied by unbearable pruritus. To deal with the constantly changing symptoms properly, I have always kept an eye on slight alterations of my body condition. Furthermore, I eagerly look for environmental or behavioral factors that affect the symptoms, attempting to control them to maintain my skin condition. As a result, I have become adept at correlating multiple causal relationships within biological phenomena, and not surprisingly, I enjoyed my biology classes in school a great deal, because it was exciting to understand the beauty of stabilized complexity in our body. When I was studying in the U.S., one of my teachers highly appreciated my aptitude and encouraged me to continue studying the biological sciences, gifting me a cell biology textbook. Deeply inspired, I went to ----- University with a merit-based scholarship for two years and majored in molecular biotechnology. During my first two years of undergraduate school, I came face-to-face with the vastness of the biological sciences and was overwhelmed by it. While I was strongly intrigued by subjects such as cell biology, immunology, and neurobiology, my interests were not specific enough to figure out my desired field of study for graduate school. Thus, I decided to participate in a research internship program at several laboratories to understand how biological research is conducted. I joined the research internship program at Seoul National University, working for a lab focused on a TRPC channel study. Under the direction of Prof. --- Kim, I helped define the roles of TRPC channels in crystalline lens cells during cataract development. It was a great opportunity for me to learn various basic cell biology techniques and unleashed my desire to study diverse diseases at the cellular level. My second internship took place at the neuroscience laboratory at Korea Institute of Science and Technology. Curious about the relationship between stress and the immune system, I joined Prof. --- Im’s lab, studying the molecular pathology of depression and drug addictions from the aspect of miRNA using various mouse models. Besides analysis of miRNA expression in mouse brain tissue, I primarily participated in the establishment of a stress-induced depression mouse model, and a self-administered drug addiction mouse model. Since the latter model required intravenous injections, I had to perform surgery to insert the catheters into the jugular veins of the mice, and then I trained them to administer cocaine by themselves. While building these multiple mouse models, I became familiar with mouse handling techniques, and I gained mastery of several surgical skills. After finishing college, I enrolled in graduate school at Seoul National University, where I was eager to pursue advanced studies in molecular cell biology. In Prof. -----, I investigated the role of C-termini of Transmembrane 4 L Six Family members. I chose it because the amino acid sequence diversity was the highest in C-termini among all domains, and this provided a strong indication that they each have distinct cellular roles. To begin with, I generated various mutant DNA constructs using TM4SF members by deleting C-terminal regions or exchanging them with each other. After establishing stable cell lines using mutant DNA constructs and colorectal cancer cell lines, I carefully observed their behavior in both flat culture dish and 3D collagen environments to identify any differences between them using live cell microscopy. As a result, I found that the C-terminus region of ----, a member of Transmembrane 4 L Six Family, plays pro-migratory roles in both the 2D and 3D co llagen environments by activating c-Src. This research has been submitted to a journal and is now being peer reviewed. 633단어 After completing my master’s degree, I joined a structural biology lab at Korea University, where I am working to identify the partial structure of ----- including its C-terminus. I am currently optimizing experimental conditions for the expression of ------ in the Cell Free system and planning to analyze the protein structure via NMR. I volunteered myself for this research because this peptide structure study has the potential to reveal the mechanisms for how the C-terminus of ----- interacts with c-Src. Moreover, I believe this experience will be beneficial in preparing me for more complex collaborative research in the future. During graduate school, I had many opportunities to learn about how the human immune system can be leveraged to help treat cancer. One of our lab research topics was to define how lysine tRNA synthetase expression in colon cancer cells induces an immune cell recruiting response, and multiple seminars regarding cancer immunotherapy inspired my interest in immunology – the notion of treating various diseases by utilizing the human immune system was astonishing to me, especially in light of my personal health condition. I began paying more attention to treating autoimmune diseases such as rheumatoid arthritis and multiple sclerosis by modulating other immune responses. I believe the biomedical science program at __________ University is the best match for my research interest. Particularly, I am interested in the work of Dr.______ that__________. In addition, the state-of-the-art facilities, __________’s distinction in biomedical research, and collaboration strongly appeal to me as well. At your esteemed institution, I would build a strong foundation for my future research and have the unmatched opportunity to research alternative ways to help solve human problems and clinical needs. Upon completing your graduate program, I will pursue a post-doctoral position at a diverse research institution where autoimmune diseases are actively studied, such as the Johns Hopkins Autoimmune Disease Research Center or MD Anderson Cancer Center. I then hope to obtain a faculty position at a research university to continue my studies of autoimmunity. In addition, it is my long-term desire to teach future generations of students and train them to be excellent researchers.
  24. Hi, I have three specific questions I'd like to get some feedback on regarding including the following information in my SOP. To provide some context, I am an international student who completed my Bachelors in a US institution and a Masters in the UK. Post-Masters, I returned to my home country (neither the US/UK) where I have been working in a research associate position at a national research institute for 2 years. 1. It is very likely that I will be talking about the research I've done in my country of citizenship as I have 2-3 publications during my time here. I understand international students are at somewhat of a disadvantage as PIs outside of the US or UK may not be as internationally renowned or may have limited connections with those in the US. However, my PI has working relationships with a couple of researchers in the US and I am listed as a co-author on a manuscript where we have collaborated with 2-3 of them, however I did not work intimately with them. Would it be perceived negatively (i.e. trying to namedrop) if I were to mention their names in my SOP when writing about that particular project (one of them works in the NIH)? The publication is listed on my CV but I don't know if I should draw more focus to it in my SOP, just in case people are not familiar with the PI I work with (in addition, he is a clinician-scientist). Is this a good move or does it seem like I'm trying too hard? 2. For a particular top school/program in my area, I had pretty extensive conversations with a recent PhD alumni as well as a current grad student who works in the same lab I am intending to join. Do you think it is a good idea to briefly mention this in my SOP? Again, I'm on the fence because I don't know if it will make me seem like I'm name-dropping/trying too hard vs. actually impressing the committee/POI that I have taken great efforts to speak with past and current students in the program. 3. Would it be wise to mention that my previous research supervisor was on maternity leave for a rather extensive period of time (this happened during my Masters)? I ended up acing my masters thesis despite it being quite a challenge. I don't know if this will come across as me being negative about my experience or if it may be positively perceived as being independent, able to overcome obstacles etc. My advisor did mention after reading my thesis that he was impressed that I was able to do a good job despite these circumstances. Thanks very much and I appreciate any advice anyone can offer!
  25. Some of the fundamental questions constantly asked by engineers include how do things work, why do they do what they do, and how to make things better. Ever since I can remember, I have always enjoyed making things, interacting with people and learning about the world. As I have grown older, I have realised I am constantly asking myself the same questions, and this is one of the reasons I have decided to study towards a chemical engineering degree at the University of AAA. To realise my life-long goal of becoming a professional petroleum engineer, I hope to be considered for a place on the MSc Petroleum Engineering Programme at the University of xxxx. My interest in this area was first aroused during my undergraduate studies where I sought out every opportunity that I could lay my hands on to learn about the role of chemical engineers in the oil and gas industry. Studying Introduction to petroleum engineering module gave me a strong foundation of the field of petroleum production and a systemic understanding of the surface operations. Furthermore, Refinery and Petrochemical Production module has given me a comprehensive understanding of steps, technologies and economics that comprise a modern refinery and the immediate downstream petrochemical processing complex. In both of these modules, I have managed to maintain very high marks (90% and 70% respectively) and earned the respect of my professors and colleagues. My initial interest was further propelled after visiting Offshore Europe 2015 in Aberdeen where the theme of the conference was: inspiring and encouraging next generation of talent into the industry to secure future success. Together with the sheer amount of innovations and technologies displayed in the exhibition, have both reinforced my intense interest for the industry. Nothing excites me more than the thought of focusing my energy on topics like Reservoir Simulation, Well Testing and Completion Technologies and Enhanced Oil Recovery which will all broaden my knowledge and understanding of the topic as a whole. I am particularly keen to study at the school of engineering in the University of xxxx because it is the only School of General Engineering in USA, making it a unique place for postgraduate student to gain insight across the whole range of oil and gas industry. The university’s enviable international reputation across it is research portfolio together with its strong tradition of success attracts such a variety of students and I believe it will be a stimulating environment in which to study at master’s level. XXXX University also provides excellent working and recreational facilities for graduate students which demonstrates your commitment to the graduate student body. My fascination with the richness in the field of petroleum engineering has encouraged me to join the Society of Petroleum Engineers and IChemE’s special interest group for oil and gas to learn more about the technical knowledge concerning the exploration, development and production of oil and gas resources. I want to be part of new age where petroleum engineers are at the forefront constantly pushing boundaries of technology to solve today’s toughest operational and commercial challenges. And joining your highly-esteemed programme and working with the guidance of your devoted faculty will give me the necessary tools to realise my life-long of becoming a professional petroleum engineer.