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  1. QUESTION: The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station. "Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level." Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. (MY) ANSWER: While it may seem like the right thing to do after a cursory evaluation, the idea of retraction from national news and paying more attention to local and weather news has its pros and cons. The memorandum does not offer a solution by being in tone dismissive of the existing operations of the station. The two disadvantages in the current scenario which the manager notes are complaints from viewers and cancellation of contracts with local business owners. However, firstly he fails to produce any hardcore data as evidence, indicating lack of effort to examine the trend. A better way to deal with it would have been to conduct surveys and note the data obtained. Secondly, losses that the manager seems to be bothered by do not need to be of magnitude or consequence. National news by its very nature could glue the greater section of viewers on to screen (while too many local advertisements may have at an earlier stage caused resentment in them). The businesses that have backed out might have other reasons. Equally, things might be actually going against the station because of its own complacency, such as hiring a narrow set of journalists and not hiring designers (for weather reports) and marketers (for advertising). A regular performance and quality check might be missing. Admitting to such loopholes is what can make the whole argument trustworthy in the end. Although the comment made seems to be failing to make an impact in a business meeting, if properly supported with facts by the manager, it can drive the executives to take a call on the issue, encouraging the shift away from national news. All in all, there needs to be further elaboration in the memorandum. WHAT SCORE DO YOU THINK THIS WOULD DESERVE?
  2. jcoleiscooliguess

    Argument Essay for GRE pt. 1

    Hey, guys! I hope you're doing awesome today. I wanted to know if you guys were willing to grade my essay for the GREs. I would appreciate it! To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Societies allowed for growth in many areas of human knowledge and technology. Many agree that in our globalized world, societies must understand one another through interactions, academic or otherwise. Because new ideas tend to be efficiently explored in the academic system, the academic has a priority in studying these cultures. To do so, academics should look take time to look beyond major cities to study the most important characteristics of a society. Many cultures are highlighted in major cities but many major cities are a mixture of different cultures combining traditions. In fact, the greater the population, the more fused cultures come about, limiting the representation of the culture that experts know of the society. Cities that hold a high population (e.g. New York) generally hold “Koreatowns” or “Chinatowns” which represent nothing of the W.A.S.P. culture in rural America. Many of these Chinatowns and Koreatowns are almost like you’re residing in their society. While one may argue that represents the culture of the area, towns with large populations of minorities tend to display the culture of the local area, not the general society of the nation. The nation itself can also hold societies that are nomadic in nature, making it impossible to find a major city of that society. Nomads are not keen on building infrastructure the same way non-nomadic nations aren’t keen on constantly moving to find food. These nomadic people tend to be very difficult to study because of their constant movement within the nation. A small representation of that society may appear in major cities, but these people are not permanent residents of these cities. In order to effectively study them, experts would have to follow their interactions while living with the tribe. The study of culture is very important to not only the society itself, but to other cultures so interactions are not harmful or deleterious to progress. Nevertheless, one will not find every aspect of a society in a small group of locations versus multiple locations.
  3. Hello, may I have some help with having my practice essays reviewed? Thank you for your availability and help. ISSUE People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Human beings are very complex creatures, reacting and responding in a myriad of ways to our surroundings, thoughts, emotions, and others. Although, humans have an astounding ability to adapt, physically, emotionally and mentally. This allows humans to behave in such a manner that is not entirely subject to forces not of their own making. Firstly, there is a mind-bending lens called perspective. Perspective is one of the abstract advantages that humans over any other species. One of the characteristics about perspective that allows us to overcome external forces is that it is largely conceived in the mind. The things that are seen are not always as they wholly are. If all behavioral judgement is founded on what people see, we miss the profound elements of the human experience. Much of the potency that external forces carry, find their strength in the human mind. For instance, if I had a negative experience with dogs all throughout my childhood, I could grow up thinking all dogs are vicious – unless I came to understand that dogs are used to aid the blind. Furthermore, this point gives credence to the power of choice. Attitude, a sister of behavior, is a choice. Because of this, people have another arm to battle external forces with. The power to choose behavior is what drives the focus of military officials and soldiers through moments of extreme distress, and fuels their humility in serving their beloved country when these soldiers are viewed as heroes. The human mind is a powerful component of human being that can channel external forces for its own advantage. Although, this is not to say that environments and upbringing do not play some role in a person’s behavior. A child may very well take on the behavior of a father or mother in moments of much stress or joy. These complex, influential relationships in the home are the birthplace of phrases like “a chip off of the old block”. The yet-present weakness of this position although is that the child may move to a college education later on in life and adopt many different habits and perspectives. The issue at hand remains that our behavior does not have to largely be determined by forces not of our own making. While external forces are a part of the human experience, our brains are constantly responding to them, the human’s behavior does not have to be subject to them because of the power of perspective and choice. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ARGUMENT The following appeared in a memo from a budget planner for the city of Grandview. "Our citizens are well aware of the fact that while the Grandview Symphony Orchestra was struggling to succeed, our city government promised annual funding to help support its programs. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent, and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. The symphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year. Such developments indicate that the symphony can now succeed without funding from city government and we can eliminate that expense from next year's budget. Therefore, we recommend that the city of Grandview eliminate its funding for the Grandview Symphony from next year's budget. By doing so, we can prevent a city budget deficit without threatening the success of the symphony." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. The recommendation presented in the budget planner for the City of Grandview possesses some assumptions that deem it questionable. To begin with, there is a claim made that the citizens are aware of the want the Grandview Symphony Orchestra is suffering in its success. These terms of success are not defined. What does make for a successful Grandview Symphony Orchestra? Is there a lack of ticket sales? Involvement? Promotion? These are vital questions to ask, in order to determine what the city deems as a successful Orchestra. The orchestra may be very popular amongst student musicians, but have its position in a conference center next to a basketball arena. Likewise, the recommendation assumes that having attendance doubled at the concerts-in-the-park series, is a weighty factor for an increase in popularity. This too, can be considered fallacious because the higher attendance may have been due to the fact that the concert was providing free food. Many of the local students may have joined the orchestra as well. It is difficult to justly conclude that there would be a rise in lasting popularity for the orchestra. Lastly, to remove government spending because of an influx in private contributions is a weak force in the argument as well. In the last year, private contributions may be defined as the soup can-sized container next to the ticket window. In a whole year, contributions could barely exceed $200. If the government provided the orchestra with $20,000 while the private contributions hit a ceiling of $600, a 200% increase. Then, this would still only leave a proportion of 100:3, the government being a very vital contributor over the private contributions. The orchestra may very well need to raise the prices of their tickets, to hold larger events and have more support. While the recommendation does strive to present some knowledge to support it’s argument, the judgment is not wise. There are assumptions made out of ambiguity in the citizen’s awareness, private contributions, and doubled attendance at the concert.
  4. shubhrika

    GRE ARGUMENT ESSAY

    The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of Movies Galore, a chain of video rental stores. “In order to reverse the recent decline in our profits, we must reduce operating expenses at Movies Galore’s ten video rental stores. Since we are famous for our special bargains, raising our rental prices is not a viable way to improve profits. Last month our store in downtown Marston significantly decreased its operating expenses by closing at 6:00 P.M. rather than 9:00 P.M. and by reducing its stock by eliminating all movies released more than five years ago. Therefore, in order to increase profits without jeopardizing our reputation for offering great movies at low prices, we recommend implementing similar changes in our other nine Movies Galore stores.” Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. The recommendation provided cannot lead to the similar result which were achieved in Marston before the analysis and feasibility of the solution in different stores. As it may be true that by reducing the operating hours may not have affect in downtown but it might have a major impact on sales in town or other store locations. Furthermore, it is also required to analysis the interest of customer at different stores. The main question which need a valid answer is whether the populace living near other stores are similar to the populace living near Marston. As it is said the store, Marston, is in downtime, the main high time for the store’s operation is before 6 pm but store in city may have high rush in the store between 6pm to 9pm as in cities most the customers are corporate people and buys after working hours. The nightlife of the store’s location may vary depending on the customers. The customer in Marston where able to adapt to the change in operating hours as time is not constrain for the people in Marston whereas in some other downtown stores people may not be able to go to store due to time constraint. If the answer to the question that the all stores have a rush time before 6 pm then reduction in operating expense may not be increase profit if the reason for the decline in profit is independent of the operating hours. Another question which need a justified answer is that whether the interest of the people in all stores are alike, if not then the elimination of all movies released more than five years ago can not only help in increase of profit but may lead to decline in the profit for the stores. The customer of the store where the recommendation has been executed are more interested in the movies which are latest but it might be a possibility that the interest of the customer at other store may be more incline towards old movies. Nonetheless, a particular area might have more sales owing to a specific movie genes which have been released before 5 years. If this can be verified from the records that the sale of movies released in last 5 years is greater than earlier, it may be the case that the main reason for the decline profit is not dependent on the stock at all. The recommendation has assumed that the reason for decline all 9 Movies Galore’s store is same as the one in Marston. Different stores can have different reason for the decline in profit. Operating hours and excessive store may not be a reason for decline in profit in other stores. There are many other factors needed to be considered. One integral factor is the quality of the product, may be the company to known for the great movies at cheap price but the quality of the movies is not satisfactory for the customer. Moreover, Quality is imperative then expense. Additionally, factor for decline in the profit is stock availability of a movies. Furthermore, location is an important factor. Nonetheless, the people are less interested in renting the movies than buying them. Moreover, the customers are more inclined towards the online rental where less equipment is required than cd or dvd of the movies. The recommendation can considered to be achieve the predicated result if all these questions are answered and it may be answered if we analyses the last records of sales in the stores individually and also feedback from the people in the area where store is located as well as of the customer will help to achieve the goal.
  5. The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position. Positive and negative aspects are two sides of coin. It is never a good practice to focus on one side and neglect the other sides. Teaching is the basic fundamental of our life. Negligence is the foundation of the life’s study cannot be accepted. As a result, it is never a best way to teach by praising for positive actions and ignoring the negative ones. Teaching, means to learn from our actions and we cannot ignore the actions which are not right as there are the most imperative learning of our life. Let’s exemplify, if you have cooked a dish which is cooked perfectly but the salt is in excess. You can never ignore the fact that the next time you have to decrease the quantity of salt. Ignorance is bliss. Learning from the mistakes make a recipe perfect. Negative result are as integral as the positive result to learn for the future. As praise for the good indeed motivates us but only praise won’t push the person to learn from it. Before the invention of the blub, Thomas Edison failed thousands of times. If he had ignored the failure and would have settled with a short achievement, we would never have lights in our home. Furthermore, he said the failure taught him 3000 things that cannot be used in the light bulb. As a result learning from the hard way is the best way. Teaching is the most pristine and difficult jobs of all. As we don’t have to make the person learn it but remember it for rest of the life and sometimes abrasive punishment teaches us the most imperative lesson of the life. The great warrior always learnt from the failure and from the deaths of their dear one, the lessons of their life. Teaching can never ignore any side of the result whether positive or negative. The best way to teach is to go hand in hand with praising for good actions and learning from the negative ones. Neither of the two aspects can be ignored in life. The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist. “Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.” Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the assumption that time doesn’t play any role the research. Furthermore, it is also considered that the rearing and talking about parents is equivalent. Thus making the weak argument that Tertian village culture as well as the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid. The argument is mainly invalid owing to the reason that it doesn’t considered the fact that Dr. Field’s research was carried out twenty years ago. As the time changes the tradition also changes in the villages. The children who were observed by Dr Field are now adults and hence may be they were reared by the whole village but as the two decades have passed the parents are more protective towards the children and therefore tertian village culture is obsoleted. Dr Karp should have also interviewed the adults who were children at the time Dr Field study was executed. Though this would have given a much strong reason to extrapolate that the Tertain village culture was invalid yet this argument this fails to validate that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid. The argument also fails to give strong evidence that the children of Tertain are not reared by the whole village. The argument that the talk more about their biological parents only give any strong proof that they are reared by their biological parents. May be the children are not good in communicating or maybe they are repeating the things that the children of the other islands are answering. This can also be considered that they are reared by the whole village but they have more affection towards their parents. As a result, we can say that besides interviewing the children, observing the children’s lifestyle is an integral aspect to validate that Tertain village culture is not practiced. Therefore concluding that interview based approach is better approach that observation centered is inaccurate. As the argument has left many unanswered question as well as many factors has been ignored in the argument. Thus it fails to make convincing case that interview based approach is much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions.
  6. Argument Q. Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. A. The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that Palean baskets were imported from Lithos, an ancient village situated across the river and not the other way around. The argument is based on the assumption that since palean boats have not been found, the people from lithos might have exported it using their boats. The argument fails to take into consideration that there is a consummate chance that the people from lithos might have used the boats to import it to their city.Had the argument provided the information of the place where palean baskets first found, then it would have strengthened the argument. Again, the argument states that since both the ancient cities are separated by river, wide and deep, it is assumed that lithos people had boats. Since, there is no mention of boats found in lithos, there might be a tertiary village;the actual source of palean baskets; connected to both the villages. If this is true, it would weaken the argument to a greater extent. Because the argument makes unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Issue Writing Q.To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. A.In order to understand the major characteristics of a society, one must study the major bucolic cities where the roots of art and culture are deep. The people in the major cities, with parochial mindset, have easily amenable characteristics which are inspired by the characteristics trending in other foreign places. The pure rustic characteristics are made obscure in the eyes of younger generations living in the major cities. Some part of the characteristics may be derived from the major cities, but the remaining part is a derivation of the culture adopted in the village areas. Since cities are made from development of villages, to know the important characteristics, one must study the latter part.
  7. Argument Task: The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of Movies Galore, a chain of video rental stores. “In order to reverse the recent decline in our profits, we must reduce operating expenses at Movies Galore’s ten video rental stores. Since we are famous for our special bargains, raising our rental prices is not a viable way to improve profits. Last month our store in downtown Marston significantly decreased its operating expenses by closing at 6:00 P.M. rather than 9:00 P.M. and by reducing its stock by eliminating all movies released more than five years ago. Therefore, in order to increase profits without jeopardizing our reputation for offering great movies at low prices, we recommend implementing similar changes in our other nine Movies Galore stores.” Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. Essay: The argument claims that Movies Galore is being in loss and to regain profit, they must reduce operating cost by limiting store hours and remove 5 years old stock from the stores. Stated in this way the argument reveals examples of leap of faith, poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology. The conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is weak and has several flaws. First, the argument readily assumes that they are famous of offering movies at low prices and increasing rates doesn't look like viable solution. This statement is a stretch with no evidence supporting whether increasing rates would have caused any issues so far. And it does not provide idea of market analysis which would have made them stay with low rates. For example, if company offers good quality with low cost makes it obvious for them to gain from it. If they plan not to increase rates and check whether it generates money or not. Clearly, store won't get to know whether prices they offer is very low with respect to operating expenses which would have been damaging revenue since long time. The argument could have been much clearer if it explicitly stated that it was tested before which did not end well. Second, the argument claims that only way to make profit is by reducing operating store expenses with no information from the store where it is already applied whether it was profitable or not. This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between operating cost decrease and profit from it. To illustrate, The store where they changed closing time to 6:00 PM instead of 9:00 could lose customers renting movies after 6:00 PM which is actually usual time when people think of renting movie for spending evening hours with their home theatre. While, Removing 5 year old stock also undermines argument as people always tend to watch movies which is high in recommendation and that could be more than 10 years old. In fact, it is not at all clear if there was profit with new methods rather planning to start same logic in other stores. If the argument had provided evidence that the store has gained then the argument would have been a lot more convincing. Finally, owner's plan could be invisible and based on his experience and instinct by decreasing availability of stock and daily schedule timing which could push fear of loss for customers and reign back on movie rental market. Still, was it owners deliberate plan? How would reducing operating cost marks profit? Do we have solid ground to make use of new plan? Without convincing answers to these questions, one is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence. In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts about new method stats and customers feedback and if there is deliberate plan which is not discussed. In order to assess the merits of a certain decision, it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors. In this particular case profitable plan is based on mere weak assumption with no proof. Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.
  8. themacattack

    GRE Practice Essays

    Hi! I'm new to the GradCafe and I'm not sure if this is where I should post this, but I thought I'd give it a shot. I'm currently studying for the GRE (taking it Aug 24th), and I wrote my first practice Issue and Argument Essays. I'm looking for someone to go over, critique, and score them. They are very rough, as this was my first go at it. I stuck to the 30 minute time limit. I would appreciate any feedback! Thank you! Mac Argument 1.docx Issue 1.docx
  9. priyankarythem3

    Please GRADE my ARGUEMENT ESSAY

    A1.txt
  10. Hello everyone, I hope all is well. I was wondering if you guys please grade both my GRE AWA essays. I would like an expert to take a look at them for me, someone who has a very good knowledge of GRE testing. I would also like your constructive feedback. It will be helpful. I have attached the essays to this post. They are in the uploaded file. Thank you! Argument Task Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. The following passage contains a weaken argument that is based off of assumptions of a village. These are the reason I believe the argument is incoherent. The archeologists were exclusively studying Palea, which has ancient baskets. But they found the baskets in Lithos, so they conclude those baskets are not Palean. Plus there were no boats in Paelea. The argument is faulty. There could be interminable possibilities why both villages have similar archaeological artifacts. I wonder if archaeologists consider that maybe the people of Lithos and Palea are from the same culture or from the same ethnic group. People from similar cultures tend to have similar ways of life, even from a geographical distance. The river might have divided the groups, but it may not have divided their similarities. Archaeologists claim that there are no boats present in Palea but at the same time the Brim River is present. It is possible that migration took place among the villages. The river boating used to be one of the main transportation in early human history. It is likely that the village dwellers migrated upstream or down stream, left their belongings and resettled to different areas. If two villages are present across from each other and there is a river between the two, then river boating must have taken place. The archeologists did not mention any boats present in the village of Lithos. They might want to consider that the villagers of Palea may have migrated to the village of Lithos and took their belongings along. The passage states that Palea was found before Lithos. I wonder in which time period were the villages established. The question is whether one of them is more ancient than the other. There is no reservation in my mind that during the prehistoric times, there were geographic alterations. Sometimes geographical changes do have an impact on the lifestyle of early human beings. The woven baskets represent the lifestyles of the people of Palea and the people of Lithos. Since the river is present, I would not disregard the possibility that flooding took place between the two locations. The following passage is incoherent because it fails to analyze the evidence and the setting revolving the prehistoric village of Palea. The dots do not seem to be connected which makes the argument faulty. Issue Task To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. An individual must study the foundations of all types of societies in order to understand the characteristics of a society. Only evaluating major cities will give the individual a parochial view of society. To gauge the characteristics of society, an individual must study the foundation of civilizations. The history of civilizations paved a way for the many characteristics of societies, which includes law, science, arts and a variety of more. Societies were based off of how human beings should supposedly function in the natural world. A good paradigm would be the roles between men and women. The roles of women and men became distinguishable since the dawn of men. In most countries, men are viewed as the breadwinners and women are viewed as the caretakers. Even though the roles have become more blurred due to the promotion of equal rights for both sexes, this distinction is reflected across the globe. This illustration demonstrates that societies across the globe are intertwined when it comes to the roles of both sexes. To have a common idea of the roles of men and women in the world, an individual must include all the parts of the world to get a good inkling of where this social construct was derived from. Studying major cities only will give the individual a one-sided story. Exclusively studying major cities will give the individual a narrow-scope of the characteristics of a society. Major cities that have an urban setting such as London and New York have a more diverse population where anything is plausible. They are both the melting pot of different cultures, ethnicities and backgrounds. The characteristics of each group within the city are variable and are not consistent with one another. If an individual is going to exclusively study major cities, then that individual is using the characteristics of a major city to define every society in this world, which I believe is impossible. The characteristics of one location should not mirror the characteristics of all locations across the globe. The characteristic of a major city in California does not mirror the characteristics of a village in Papua New Guinea. I would understand why a person would want to solely study a major city. Major cities that have an urban setting are often more dynamic and more enhanced because they have a higher population density. Major cities that are well known tend to have a lot of history. Their history is what shaped them up to this day. Their evolution to become major cities does give an individual us an insight on how societies developed over time and it gives us an insight on what characteristics helped those societies to become more prosperous. Plus, studying cities or areas across the globe can be a challenge. I believe in order to study the characteristics of a society an individual must acknowledge the foundation of civilization. I believe the characteristics were part of that foundation and have reflected the prosperity and development of a society.
  11. Gabriela Nolivos

    Help with scoring AW essays for the GRE

    Hey guys I really need your help indicating me what score should my essays receive. I need an indicator to see how is mi development in his section. Thanks a lot! Argument task Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method. Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. The paragraph above is flawed for numerous reasons and some additional information is required if the conclusions of dr Karl are considered valid. The questions which could be elaborated in order to validate the claims of dr Karp vary from contrasting the situation and costumes of tertia island inhabitants and ways of raising their children 20 years ago and the changes made in that area. The scope of the investigation should also be asked and the population included in the method used by dr karp for his study. A question that could be asked in order to determine the Veracity of dr karp affirmation about dr field investigation is which changes have occurred during the last twenty years in tertia island. Analyzing the situation or drastic changes in lifestyle could explain why nowadays dr karp found a different way of rising children. A lot of events could have happened during that period so to confirm or reject dr karp claim it would be necessary to ask to a representative a mount of tertia inhabitants what have happened during those 20 years and which events could have modified the rearing practices of their infants. Another questionable point of dr karp conclusions that pretend to invalidate dr field results is the place where the new studies were developed. In the study carried out by the first investigator only the island of tertia is mentioned but in the description of the second study carried out by dr kArp it mentions that he visited and studied the group of island that includes the island of tertia. That difference could certainly invalidate the conclusion of dr karp because the two studies were not carried out to population of the same place because in the second one more islands were studied and it is not determined in the study which percent of the interviews were carried out in the specific island of Tertia so the representation of the results found in this place is imponderable. The third important question to make is to determine which was the population included in the method developed by dr karp. As the paragraph indicates he visited various islands and tertia was one of them but it doesn't indicate if the research was focused on tertia island or in any other island, it also lacks of precision because it doesn't indicate what percentage of the population was interviewed in order to make conclusions, it neither indicates which were the characteristics of the population interviewed so information about this study is vague and can not be considered reliable. Referring to the first study it doesn't mention the duration of the observation or which variables were considered in the study made. So to prove the affirmation of dr karp it would be necessary to ask him which was the method used to determine the population of study and the sample and how can he correlate it to the population observed by dr field. Because the argument of dr karp lacks of validity the three questions mentioned above which are related with changes in time, place where the studies were developed and sample considered in the study are necessary and could certainly evaluate the relevance of his affirmation.
  12. bh_alpana

    GRE Writing Task

    ARGUMENT The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette. "On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. Reducing the number of mopeds in Balmer island won’t decrease number of accidents involving pedestrians and mopeds because it is not clear what were the primary reasons for accidents in Balmer Island. A number of reasons vary the number and type of accident such as road conditions, time of day, year, driving under influence, etc. The argument compares accidents in Balmer Island to that of accidents in Seaville island last year. The argument fails to substantiate this data with population in each town and residents in the city. We don’t know if there was similar population increase in Seaville, or mopeds are the preferred means of transportation in Seaville. Thus, what worked in Seaville doesn’t necessarily work for Balmer Island. The argument recommends limiting the moped rental by half in Balmer Island. However, we don’t have enough data to support how many accidents occurred involving mopeds and pedestrians in the overall accident statistics of Seaville. It is possible that most residents relied on cars and there were few pedestrian areas. If the argument had stated the population in Seaville, popular choice of vehicle, etc. then we could compare Seaville to Balmer Island. The argument fails to provide that information. It is also not clear what time the accidents were occurring in Balmer Island. Most of the statistics might account for accidents in the night due to poor vision, condition of roads or if the car drivers were driving under influence. In such cases, it is less likely that pedestrians or mopeds for that matter were involved in the accidents. In lack of supporting data, the argument is invalid. Thus, it cannot be estimated that accidents will reduce by half in Balmer Island by reducing the number of mopeds by half. It cannot be assumed that what worked for Seaville will work for Balmer Island because of difference in residents, their choice of commute and time of accidents. ISSUE Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain. Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position. Nations should definitely pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state because these wilderness are home to indigenous flora and fauna, and bases for natural resources vital for survival such as water and air. Preservation of wilderness is also gaining global attention and this will help countries attend necessary attention. The world is urbanizing at a fast pace and green belts are quickly converting to concrete jungles. Wilderness areas should be preserved so that urbanizing them doesn’t endanger existence of animals and birds. Several species of animals and birds have become extinct and a few are on the verge of extinction. This is a potential threat to natural ecosystem. The habitation of plants and animals should prolong to conserve animals and plants. Growing conversion of wilderness is also contributing to global warming. Preserving and promoting wilderness, apart from housing indigenous birds and animals, also maintains the microclimate. The rapid change in microclimate pose threat for disasters such as flooding during monsoon, landslides, wildfires, rise in local temperature, etc. These disasters are costly, in terms of lives and resources. Therefore, preservation of wilderness help maintain the local temperature and contribute in control of flooding and landslides. At present, all the countries in the world are focusing their economic activities on controlling global warming, reduction of carbon production etc. Therefore, all the countries are joining their hands together to promote wilderness and establish protected zones. Many countries have gained global attention due to diversity attained by preservation of wilderness. This also increases recreational and research-focused tourism in particular places. Therefore, preservation of wilderness also contributed to economic opportunities through tourism. Converting wilderness for economic gain might be short term, however, this depletes the sources of water and threat existence of indigenous flora and fauna. If wilderness is preserved, it will benefit economically via tourism.
  13. kez.ewuraadjoa

    GRE AWA Writing

    Hello everyone, I hope all is well. I was wondering if you guys please grade both my GRE AWA essays. I would like an expert to take a look at them for me, someone who has a very good knowledge of GRE testing. I would also like your constructive feedback. It will be helpful. I have attached the essays to this post. They are in the uploaded file. Thank you! GRE - AWA Tasks June 5, 2017.docx
  14. I completed these timed essays as practice and would love some feedback! I've never take the GRE before and am open to any advice. I know that my sentence maturity could improve and if I had more time I would have definitely worked more on that. GRE ARGUMENT TASK.docx GRE ISSUE TASK.docx
  15. I have taken the GRE once before, and am now studying for my second try. I have written my first practice Issue and Argument Task essays and am looking for an expert to critique my work. If you are familiar with the Official Guide assessment criteria, please also include your estimated holistic score for each. Thank you! W1D6 Issue Task.docx W1D6 Argument Task.docx
  16. zhichaolitju

    GRE Argument review for rookies

    Hi, Guys Please help me review this argument. Any feedback is more than welcome. Thanks The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement. "Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average." Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. The article is trying to advertising Clearview as the best candidate for all retire people, but it’s vague and inconsistent argument causing its conclusion to be not persuasive. It first brings up one of the reason as considering for top choice to be its natural beauty and climate, but the premise is all people, who are seeking retirement, is prefer that. There will be cases that people enjoy changing climate to feel the heat of summer and snow of winter. Thus, if majority of the people consider change weather as their preference, this is not the place to be. Some comparison on house cost and taxes are also provided in the article, but without base number to quantify, the full picture is not provided. House cost can fall significantly but still high since initial price can be much higher. Also, in terms of tax, only mentioning nearly towns is also incomplete, since the whole area may have terrifying tax rate overall. Physicians are also mentioned in the article, but the premise it is assuming is larger number of physicians leads to higher health care quality. Without considering the qualification as well as the scope of each physician, the conclusion cannot be made. Overall the argument is trying to advertising Clearview but those assumptions as well as missing link render the conclusion disbelief.
  17. Danyal Zafar

    Request for Review - GRE ARGUMENT

    Please be kind enough to give you valuable feedback on my attempt. Argument - 1 The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country. "The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangerous potholes. In another part of the state, a section of Route 40, paved by Appian Roadways more than four years ago, is still in good condition. In a demonstration of their continuing commitment to quality, Appian Roadways recently purchased state-of-the-art paving machinery and hired a new quality-control manager. Therefore, I recommend hiring Appian Roadways to construct the access roads for all our new shopping malls. I predict that our Appian access roads will not have to be repaired for at least four years." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. ============================================================================================================ The argument presented by the vice president has a number of logical flaws. These flaws give birth to numerous questions that have to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation will have the predicted result or not. A major flaw in the vice president's reasoning that raises questions is the flawed comparison between Good Intentions Roadways and Appian Roadways. To begin, the first question that needs to be answered is whether the traffic on Route 101 is similar to Route 40 or not. If, for instance, Route 101 caters to heavy traffic whilst only light traffic is allowed on Route 40, the presence of potholes on Route 101 can be explained. Therefore, it is not necessary that the deterioration of Route 101 is because of poor quality. The superior quality of Appian's work can only be accepted if the routes cater to the same traffic. Even then other circumstances on the two routes may also explain the difference in their conditions. The fact that the two routes are present in different parts of the state begs the question: are the weather conditions similar or different on the two routes? If, for example, the region where Route 101 runs through experiences torrential rainfall whilst the area where Route 40 passes from has a mild climate, the differences in the road conditions can be attributed to weather as well. This means that it is not necessary that the condition of Route 40 is better because of higher quality work by Appian Roadways. The better road condition can be attributed to favourable weather conditions. Therefore, it is imperative that the above question is answered as it can render the basis of the recommendation illogical. In addition to the differences (or similarities) in weather conditions, it is also important to ask if there are any other alternative companies available than Good Intentions and Appian Roadways. The above argument assumes that there are only two companies available in the market. However, it is important to see if other companies can be approached or not and how Appian Roadways fares against them. It can be possible that Appian performs poorly in comparison to other competitors. Another interesting question that needs to be answered is about the credentials of the new quality control manager of Appian Roadways. The argument assumes that the new manager will perform better than the previous manager and therefore improve the quality of work. It could very well be the case that the new manager was hired on the basis of nepotism and not on the basis of performance. As a result, the quality of the work deliviered could deteriorate. Therefore, it weakens the preditiction that the roads will not have to be repaired for four years, thus, weakening the recommendation. The answers to the questions above would provide a better picture of the comparision between Appian Roadways and its competitiors. For the recommendation to be valid, it is important that Appian and its competitors deliver in similar conditions.
  18. colourlesslight

    Would anyone like to grade my essays?

    Here are my two writing section samples. This is the first time I've tried a timed writing section. If you have a moment and would like to provide some feedback, I thank you in advance Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years. Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based. Oftentimes, our society is lead to believe that change always implies something good. However, change that occurs too often, and without direction, may lead to disasterous results. I argue that those in power, whether it be in business, education, politics or government, should not have to step down after five years. First of all, leadership does not always need to be renewed in order for an institution to be successful. Although the renewal of leadership may lead to some systematic changes that result in an overall positive outcome for an institution, oftentimes there is no method to prove that these results will occur. However, there is one conclusion that usually can be agreed upon: with new leadership comes new rules, or at least a slightly different ones than with the previous leader. New rules do not automatically entail a successful paradigm. The rules of the new leadership might lead a company, university, or whole country into complete chaos. Although changing the leadership might give a fresh start to an organization, choosing a new leader is not always the most reliable way to create positive change within a system. Secondly, a leader that is in power for longer than five years isn’t always past his or her prime. The current person of power might actually be in the process of instigating change within a system and that change would be stunted or even completely destroyed due to the new leadership. Having a policy which forces the leadership to change every five years would mean that each leader, no matter the situation, would have to fit their plan for a system into a mere five years; this is absurd. Understandably, five years is too short for many leaders, especially those who prove to be competent at their job. However, there are some cases in which having the leadership change every five years might prove effective. In the United States, the president changes every four years; this allows for other political parties and, perhaps, minority positions, to have a chance at a position of power, rather than having one ruling party. The same goes for some businesses: in growing fields, such as IT or any other technology-related area, there is always a massive growth rate. Having a veteren within a technology-related field wouldn’t be as useful as in other more stable categories, such as at a University. However, even in these fast-growing field cases, having a limit of five years seems too short – if a person of power is doing well in their position, they should have the ability to continue their leadership. Taken from the example given above – even the president of the United States is allowed a second term. In conclusion, I have aruged that those in a position of power – whether is be in business, education, politics, or government – should not have a five-year cap on their leadership. A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings. Firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations (such as the return of a parent after an absence). The study also found that during pregnancy, first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than did those who had had several offspring."" Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument. The argument that an experiment with eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual’s levels of stimulation is flawed for numerous reasons. First, the argument makes the assumption that rhesus monkeys and humans have almost identical physiologies. Also, the argument uses confusing language that could lead to equivocation of terms, as well as unreliable numbers. Finally, the argument assumes a causal relationship between cortisol and stimulation within the mother and the child, when we have little or no reason to believe this claim. The main problem with this experiment is the fact that humans and rhesus monkeys do not have identicial physiologies. Small physiological differences can take a huge toll on a body; cortisol, although present, might have a different effect on the human physiological system than on the monkeys. The argument mentions that there is a relationship between stimulating situations, which “primes the body for increased activity levels” but does not clarify if this also applies to the human body. If the argument were to include information on the effect of cortisol on the human body, the study would have a stronger argument but not quite solid since monkeys and humans are innately different. Another problem with the argument this study makes is about the vagueness of the language, as well as the statistics. The report of the study relies on the term “stimulating situations.” However, the study does not provide a through account of the meaning of the term. In such cases, if the definition were to be too broad (i.e. simulating situations could be seeing a new object, or watching the death of ones mother), then the results of the experiment would be much less significant. If the argument were to clarify narrow and precisify the unclear terms, then the thesis would be much better supported – perhaps a better comparison between the stimulation in the mother and child. As for the statistics, there is an issue with the number of participant monkeys – only 18! This small sample wouldn’t be representative of any results within scientific literature; furthermore, there were no statistics taken from humans. The argument would be stronger if the statistics were taken from a much larger sample group, as well as a human sample group. The last issue with this argument which I will address is related to the casual assumption between cortisol in mothers and children. Although the argument provides examples of when cortisol and stimulation are connected (i.e. an encounter with an unfamilar money; return of a parent) there isn’t a strong connection established between the levels of cortisol present within the mother and the effect on the infant, as the first-born. Perhaps the high levels of cortisol were not caused by the fact that the infant was first-born, but that the mother was experiencing a new situation for the first time. If the argument were to make clear that there are no other factors causing the change in cortisol, as well as some more experimental evidence which supports the relationship between cortisol present in the mother on the child, then the argument would be much stronger. In conclusion, the argument that an experiment with eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual’s levels of stimulation is flawed for numerous reasons, and should be investiaged further before making any strong claims.
  19. Prompt: In 2003, the city of London instituted a Congestion Zone Charge, a substantial fee levied on vehicles traveling into central London on Mondays through Fridays between 7 A.M. and 6 P.M. (Taxis, ambulances, buses, bicycles and alternative fuel vehicles, among others, are exempt from the charge.) This successful and ongoing program, which is already in effect in other large cities of the world and has been considered for both San Francisco and New York, should be instituted immediately in the ten most significantly congested and polluted cities in the United States. Results will include cleaner air, safer streets, happier citizens and a dramatic increase in revenue. Directions: Write an essay that frames the questions that require answers before both this argument and the prediction that accompanies it can be reasonably evaluated. Discuss how the answers to the questions are fundamental to a thoughtful evaluation of the argument and the prediction. Answer: The author of this essay explains that vehicles must pay a substantial fee in order to travel in central London on Mondays through Fridays between 7 A.M and 6 P.M. This fee is assumed to result in cleaner air, safer streets, happier citizens and a dramatic increase in revenue. If these are the goals of this fee, however, there are many questions that should be raised and evaluated in order to asses these assumptions.To begin, it's vital to ask how much pollutants and toxic emissions have been released into the atmosphere VIA standard vehicles. Assuming that taxis and ambulances, and other alternative fuel vehicles are exempt, to what extent are these vehicles releasing toxins into the atmosphere. Hence, will making owners, who drive standard vehicles, really reduce emissions and increase cleaner air? Or are emissions more likely to be emitted from the vehicles that are exempt from the fee? Also, if those who drive standard vehicles at the aforementioned times, wouldn't these people then flood the vehicles that are exempt from these fees? Therefore, these individuals will have to utilize alternative vehicles, ultimately making the desire for clean air futile? This essay also assumes that there will be a dramatic increase in revenue. However, the essay fails to account for those who are driving these standard vehicles. Who is truly benefiting from these fees? Finally, this essay assumes that this fee will result in safer streets. However, many people, without the use of standard vehicles, may have to walk longer distances in order to get to their destination. Specifically, young people who need to go to school while their parents are taking other alternative methods of transportation to make it to work. Is it still safer for these young people to walk to school alone rather than driving in congested areas? How many people have been car accidents before this fee? How can we truly assess whether or not the streets will be safer with this fee, if there is no comparative basis of analysis? Finally, the essay assumes that this fee will also make citizens happier. However, how will these people be happier if they have to reschedule their lives around these alternative modes of transportation? Also, why isn't there any specific evidence that this will increase happiness based off of the other cities who have already adopted this program? It is also important to understand that every city is different in terms of infrastructure. How do we know that this fee will work in central London? Where have fees, such as the one described above,been implemented?
  20. I've been working really hard to better my score in the other sections, but haven't hit the essay portion of the test as well as I would've like...Thanks in advance for taking a look at this. Everything you need is below. Here is an official scoring guide as well for ya: https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/argument/scoring_guide Prompt: The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. My response: In the argument stating Super Screen should spend more money on advertising movies, the author makes several unwarrated assumptions. First of all, the author states that the marketing department reported increased positive reviews, but only on specific movies. It is unclear at this point what types of movies the survey reported satisfaction ratings on. For example, the survey could have just asked those who took the survey how they felt about the good movies that Super Screen produced, and left the bad movies out. It is possible that Super Screen produced bad movies that no one wanted to see, and this may be the reason for the lack of people attending the movies, but we are not told what these "specific Super Screen movies" are and, thus, can not assume that all the movies are "good" ones. To make this a fair report, the marketing department could attempt sharing with the audience proof that Super Screen movies that recieved a satisfaction rating were random. Donig so would ensure the audience that the satisfaction rating of those movies were fair. Also, provides faulty reasoning that these surveys reached the same pool as all the other mentioned years. Perhaps, these surveys were given ot a remote population that were unfamiliar with Super Screen movies. The author even neglects to share with the audience that the survey questions were even the same as last year. Therefore, the audience has no reason to believe that these surveys were not biased in some way. Another obvious fallacy in this argument is that the only thing that could bring people to watch Super Screen movies is the advertisement. Since the author does not tell us where these movies can be watched, we are left not knowing that maybe customer service, price, or even acessability could be a potetntial problem as well. All these problems could prevent people from watching their movies also. In sum, to make the author's argument more sound, the author would need to define what specific movies the reviewers reported on, and provide information about what methods the marketing department gained this report. Without more information, the reader of this argument has no way to conclude if spending more of the budget really is the best choice in this case.
  21. Moderator note: Merged two essay scoring requests into single thread. Please read both posts to see both essays. Prompt/Instruction: "The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position." My response: Today's society is plagued by a sense of fierce competition that sets citizens against one another in an environment of animosity. The strive to be the best can often bring out the worst in people; a paradox that can be seen in today's politics, sports, and even businesses. While some may feel the need to embrace competition as an excelling force towards success, a more efficient way to ensure success is for young people to embrace cooperation as the driving force for their success in society. Cooperation is necessary for a person to excel in today's modern age. The elements of collaboration are a key component in developing a successful product, gaining a lead in an election, or performing groundbreaking research. A person who learns to be a team member will benefit from the interaction of other like-minded individuals, and as well being exposed to more beneficial ideas. In the current controversial presidential election, there is obviously a bitter sense of competition present between the remaining candidates. However, the success that has engendered these two campaigns is a result of collaboration between many different individuals with different professions and specialties who have all brought valuable ideas to the table. This teamwork practice has enabled for more success than if those in the campaign were blinded by the competition. The ability to minimize inner competitive urges to work alongside others in an efficient manner proves beneficial in more than one way. Marketing oneself to other professionals in and beyond a particular industry or field as a cooperative individual will intrigue attract other key players in that particular field. This approach to a career as a collaborator prioritized over a competitor will likely be construed as having positive personality traits, which can help individuals gain an upper hand in time. Mark Zuckerberg, the creator of Facebook, was in competition with other social media platforms during the time of Facebook's rise, His charismatic nature and openness to collaboration and cooperation shown a positive light on his strategies, and many were attracted to the Facebook team for this reason. As we see the success of Facebook today, we realize the effects of the cooperation can have when chosen over competition. Needless to say, competition is still a critical factor regarding motivation of individuals to reach a goal. In a sense, if it were not for competition, some of today's greatest contributors to society may have never been pushed to their limits in order to achieve their full potential. This is evident in the case of Steve Jobs and his development of the Mac computer. However, cooperation should still be instilled as a more valuable trait to have than competitiveness. After all, the Mac computer was not created by the genius of Steve Jobs himself, but by the collaboration of many individuals working towards a common goal. In essence, while the sense of competition can be considered a benefit, the elements of collaboration and cooperation are undoubtedly a necessity. Across all industries and fields, alike, no great successes ever come from a single competitor alone, but result from a process of cooperation among many. For this reason it is essential for the young people of today's society to embrace cooperation over competition.
  22. Issue Task: "A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college" School curriculum should be designed to equip the students with required skills and knowledge that will help them gain confidence to enter college and eventually, see success in college. Having single national curriculum across the country helps students from different schools attempt the preliminary exam, conducted by the government, in order to enter college, in a fair manner. A student or a teacher, wishing to move to a different city within the country, can do it, without worrying about the curriculum which is going to be the same across the country. Sometimes, students spend time learning some field that they have no interest in and they would be passionate to study a totally different field in college. Students from different schools with different curriculum could result in, getting challenged with different levels of difficulty to complete senior high school before entering college. This could lower quality of students because they were exposed to an easy curriculum and not letting their explore their full potential or help them grow their ability to learn to solve medium to complex problems. Therefore,a nation should require all of its students to study single effective national curriculum that is designed to equip the students with required skills and knowledge that will help them gain confidence to enter college and eventually, see success in college. Argument Task: The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station. "Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level." This argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the unwarrented assumption that the complaints from the viewers concerned with station's coverage of weather and local news is about the late-night news program which mostly concentrates on national news. The argument fails to provide any justification that local businesses reason for cancellation of advertising contracts with the television station in the argument presented is only due to their late-night news program that has devoted increased time to national news. It is possible that economy is down that the local businesses are executing cost cutting strategies or simply that local businesses were introduced some efficient low cost alternatives for advertisement.Had the argument provided additional information that could prove the cancellation of advertising contracts by the local businesses is due to late-night news program it could strengthen the argument. The argument also leaves many other unanswered questions. The argument vaguely mentions about the complaints regarding the station's coverage of weather and local news. Because it doesn't indicate whether the coverage of weather and local news, should be increased or reduced. The argument also assumes to attract more viewers by restoring the time devoted to weather and local news. It is possible that number of people watching the television could simply be reduced due to numerous other factors that doesn't have anything to do with the content broadcasted. Because the argument makes several unwarrented assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that by restoring the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level could attract more viewers to the program and could improve the advertising revenues. Thanks a lot in advance for your time helping with your valuable feedback.
  23. I realize its a little wordy but it was my first time practicing with a timer! See attached word doc. I left errors as is since that's how they'll be graded on test day. Thanks!!! practice essays 1.docx
  24. Pranjal_Srivastava1

    Essay Evaluation

    Hi! I need someone to evaluate my essays please. I'd really appreciate your help. Here are my questions. As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Issue task.docx
  25. Dear Sir/Madam, I shall be thankful if anybody could evaluate my argument essay sample, which I prepared within the stipulated time of 30 minutes on the topic of discussion - Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. Thanking you, Rittik kumar Ghosh. Argument 1.docx
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