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  1. Hi guys. This is my first essay. It is a bit short. I have given the prompt and the answer below. Please evaluate and do give your feedback. Prompt: Science and technology will one day be able to solve all of society’s problems. Write a response to the prompt in which you discuss whether or not you agree or disagree. Be certain to fully develop your position and carefully consider ways in which your position could be challenged. Answer: I do agree to an extent with the given statement. Science and Technology have been the solution to many of the problems that society has faced throughout time. For example, take the Plague or any of the diseases that humankind has faced. They have almost eradicated humans. Had it not been for Science, we would not have found a cure for the disease and saved ourselves. Technology has also played a vital role in solving society's problems. Earlier, people used fire signals to communicate over long distances. Any news had to travel for many days before they reached the intended recipient. Due to the growth of technology, we are able to communicate with people halfway across the world within seconds. This demonstrates how powerful technology can be. We have made strides in both fields since then. Now, society is plagued with a new set of problems like global warming, fickle economies, lack of medical treatment. Consider global warming, Science has helped us to find better solutions that are environmentally sustainable and cleaner. Technology has helped us find alternate fuels, new energy sources. It has also helped spread awareness about the alarming state of our planet. It has helped connect people around the world rally for a better solution. Technology has helped take medicine to almost every nook and cranny. Remote medicine is finding its holding and has helped people in inaccessible places, get proper medical treatment. Take Google Brain for example, doctors and engineers have worked together to create a system that analyses diseases with improved accuracy. It has helped cancer patients get an early diagnosis and effective treatment methods. The world may not be an Utopia right now but it can solve the problems that we face, only if Science and Technology go hand-in-hand.
  2. Hello! I am an undergraduate, graduating in May 2020. I am currently looking into PhD programs and just received my GRE scores. I received a V160, Q153, and AW4.0. I was very surprised by my AW score because I had tested much higher on practice tests that had been graded, but overall I suppose it is reasonable. I was very nervous that day, trying not to panic, and was not very familiar with the topic presented. Still, I felt a little disheartened when I read the score. I didn't have my heart set on Ivy's so I am not too concerned about that, but I am concerned about getting into a R1 institution with this lower score. Is it worth trying to retake next month in hopes of it getting back before deadlines? Part of me feels that I should retake, but mostly I am in a place where standardized testing makes me so miserable that I should just go with what I have and hopefully any program worth going to will understand.
  3. Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain. Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position. A country ought to preserve its forest areas because forests are one of the most crucial resources of oxygen, ores and herbs; however, the economic conditions of a country can not be neglected. Many a time, to stabilize the economy, the government has to use some areas of the jungle. Firstly, it is very important to have at least 33% area for the forest in any country to have a stable ecosystem because according to World Health Organization (WHO), 33% forests are enough to replenish the oxygen into the environment. So, the government should make the rules and regulations for the preservation of wilderness areas of the country. Having good control over these areas help in the reduction of the extinction of the species. On the other hand, wilderness areas also provide the raw material for various businesses. For example, cotton for clothes, wood for furniture, and paper. After having such benefits from jungles, the government should work upon the implementation of the laws for saving forests. However, we cannot ignore the fact that without a good economical conditions a government cannot run the country. So in order to improve the economy, the Government has to utilize some areas of the Jungle. Because if there is not a good economical condition of a country then there is no sense of having a rich wilderness area. By doing this, the government is opening doors for various mines and oil refineries because according to ONGC (Oil and Natural Gas Company, India) there are plenty of resources of crude oil in various wilderness area across the globe. But, we can not forget the fact that if we want a healthy life then at least the 33 % area of the land must be preserved for the jungle. So, A government must make a policy for the country in which it should allocate as much as land possible to the forests and if it requires some area for the economic development of the country then they only utilize the area which is needed and which should not decrease the forest area of the country lesser than 33%. If these policies were implemented successfully then there would be an equilibrium in the ecosystem as well as the government can utilize only some portion of the land which will help to leverage its economy. Finally, after analysing each factor the conclusion could be that the government should preserve the remaining forests and in an emergency, if required they should use some forest area.
  4. Issue task A nation require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Response:- Nation's development and future are in the hands of future. Students are the bedrock of nation's strength and its future. Students decide the growth and prospersity of nation. In order to increase nation's growth, the character and behavior of students must be shaped right from the start. Students around the nation should study under one curriculum to develop a more centralised and broaden base. One National curriculum will expose students to a fair peer competition. When all the students study under one umbrella, they tend to deviate less to irrelevent material. If the curriculums are different, students might develop complex due to anomalies in study content. With different curriculums, there is a possibility that teachers tend to get confounded with the different patterns. With unanimuous curriculum, the pedagogy will be more effective and will chaff out the immaterialised content. The one curriculum until college will also help testing agencies to conduct the examinations centrally and develop a more robust system. The institutions can be ranked according to their performances in the centralised system, so that parents can choose between the best platforms. The associated cost of study material, teaching, infrastructute costs etc. will significantly reduce, otherwise spurge with more than one curriculum. If a student performs below par or doesn't able to score and compete as efficiently with its peer, parents will have opportunities to find out the mistakes and rectify them. Students will able to introspect better about the things, as they can easily discussed their shortcomings and strengths. Grasp in power of students will be enhanced under the one curriculum as they prolonged exposure. Under bi or poly curriculums, the examinations may become eccentric which only adds to the costs and misery as a nation. Considering diverse nature of nations, it may difficult for students of different cultures and backgrounds to grasp and prosper under a different system, but till college they will be accustomed to the demands and will help them in long run to contribute to the Nation's growth and future.
  5. However I am aware of the grammatical mistakes, the spelling mistakes and obvious blunders in my essays, I believe mistakes are mistakes and so please consider marking them just how an AWA rater would rate it - no leniency! Thank you very much. ISSUE: To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Response: No matter the amount of time passed by, a deep rooted impact of the original arts and the thoughts can always be found at the places of their origin. Gathering the information is a crucial part of the task - especially when the task is to understand the important characteristics of a society because understanding a society is to understand its people, understand the origin of the activities that are carried out by these people such as the jobs they do, the resources they use on daily basis. Part of gathering this information also includes getting to know the environment the society was "born and brought up" in. Hence, in order to understand all these emminent aspects of the understanding a society, it is important to study its major cities. Naturally, birth place of a new society developes faster and more freely, making it the reflection of the society it brought to life. By studying such major cities surrounded by its culture, one gets the very important experience of seeing the life of its citizens first hand. It is rightly said that "Experience is a bigger teacher than anything else" - realizing what the social elements of a society in the first person is the best experience when it comes to understanding a society. Moreover, due to the not-so-ephemeral impacts left by the growth with time, the major cities usually hold the origins of the rituals and traditions of its society, very closely to itself. Studying the city, will indeed bring one closer to the real meaning and logical reasons behind such - sometimes peculiar - traditions. In addition to this, the major cities that have been central to the growth of their societies usually carry forward an unbiased and uninterrupted set of information, over time. Sometimes, however, the informatoin stored in the major centers of the societies may be corrupted by some foreign elements or may be missing due to drain of knowledge out of the cities. But with proper scientific validation, such lost information can not only be retrieved but also be connected rightly with any other missing pieces in the original story of a society. All in all, if one wants to understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must focus on studying its major cities. ARGUMENT: Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. Response: The given argument has some critical assumptions due to which it is weak in nature. One such and very important assumptions, it has stated is the existence and the size of the Brim river in the ancient times. In no way the argument sufficiently provides the proof to the notion that Brim River existed during the same time from which the woven baskets are found to be. Even if the river existed during the same timeline, the depth and breadth of the Brim river back then are not confirmed to be the same as today's, with any scientific validation. Perhaps the river was shallow or had the both its shores closer, in which case the Paleans could have traveled to the other side of the river easily. If the dating of the river and the impact of its flow over time on its shores were to prove, for a fact, that the river was as healthy as it is currently, the argument would have held more credibility to be true. Secondly, the archaeologists claim to have discovered no Palean boats that may have helped the Paleans to cross the Brim river. However, this does not mean that no bridges over the river existed which may have been built by either the Paleans or the people from Lithos for the purpose of travel and trade across the river. If the assumption that no bridges existed is to be accepted with suffiecient proof, the fact that no boats ferried across the river, is still not proven. Maybe the people from Lithos were capable enough to construct a boat and used it to cross the river, who may have brought the Palean woven baskets to Lithos from Palea. If the history is proof of anything, it's that in ancient times also, people used to hire or buy vehicles for the purpose of trade, if they were not capable of building one on their own. Similarly, people from Lithos and Palea or either, may have bought one such boat that they used to cross the river which made the transfer of such baskets possible. Hence, failing to justify some of the assumptions on the basis of ground truth, the argument is not validated with sufficient proof.
  6. Please help me by grading my essay written for this issue prompt. Please grade it in accordance to the GRE scoring guide .(https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/issue/scoring_guide). Here is the issue -> “The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.” Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Essay Prompt -> Whenever it is required to understand any aspect of a culture, it is essential to underscore the factor which shapes the said culture. This gives us a better understanding of where the culture originates from and what caused the culture be like this today. Therefore, in today’s techno-centric world, the influence of the youth essentially shapes and molds the modern culture. Hence, any facet of the contemporary culture can be effectively understood by analyzing its youth’s trends. It is obvious that what shapes and defines the culture of today, can be a key to comprehend the said culture as well. Today’s youth, benefiting from technology and ease of exchanging ideas and communication, are evidently shaping the contemporary culture. For instance, consider today’s plethora of social media platform. On these platform exists several influencers and experts, many of whom have massive following. It is evident that whatever they’ll preach as a new or cool cultural trend, will be embedded in multitudes of their followers as gospel. The word-of-mouth of these followers will spread around like wildfire and soon enough, this gospel will become an amenable opinion for many people. Case in point, after the unraveling of the “Harvey Weinstein” sexual harassment case, many powerful social media celebrities like Gwenyth Paltrow, Angelina Jolie and more started preaching how toxic power-play can have adverse effects on the nascent artists, and started encouraging all the oppressed sexual harassment victims to break their silence and come forward. This empowered many artists, especially females and other common masses to stand up against sexual harassment. The daring stand fiercely spread all over the media by the youth and it became a trend. But, the instance does not end here. After the surge in the number of sexual harassment victims coming forward, the iconic philanthropist & celebrity Oprah Winfrey was moved to make her famous “Me Too” speech, sympathising with every one of the victims and empowering them to share their stories. This lead to a groundbreaking and trending “#MeToo” culture, which sent out a powerful statement underlining that sexual harassment will no longer be tolerated. Hence, from the aforementioned scenario, one can infer the cause of the the trend and how the trend propagated to the masses, along with how the trend caused the formation of a new and harassment-intolerant culture. Furthermore, it can be inferred that the youths act as a vector for spreading trends and opinion, and just in the way a scientist would better understand the cause of a disease by fully examining the vector of the disease, one can only understand the contemporary culture by studying the people responsible for causing the culture-shaping trend to spread among the masses, i.e. the youth. For instance, if in the city of Los Angeles, wearing casuals to work became popular in the youth, then in no time, there would be several businesses and companies witnessing their employees wearing casuals frequently to work. Hence, casual work-wear would become the crucial part of the Los Angeles work-life and thus, if one wanted to reason as to why casual work-wears are so “hot” in Los Angeles right now, then he/she can trace it to the relation of youth trend and culture. Admittedly, one can argue that not all of the understanding of today’s culture comes solely from the youth’s trend, but this claim only stands in certain instances. For instance, when it comes to expenditure pertaining to a specific culture, it might be true that more than the youth, a family’s trend influences it. In a culture of less to mediocre spending, it can be essentially the case that the families altogether are a little frugal and have lesser incomes, hence the trend of mediocre expenditure. But, it can not be refuted that from cuisine, body wear, luxury and many more to cultural acceptance of LGBTQ+ community and raising voice against workplace harassment; the youth majorly influences all of these trends, even more than any other set of masses. In conclusion, the propagation of the trend plays an important part and shapes the culture pertinently and so, the contemporary culture can be better comprehended if one examine the youth’s trend effectively.
  7. Please help me by grading my essay written for this argument prompt. Please grade it in accordance to the GRE scoring guide .(https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/argument/scoring_guide). Here is the argument -> The following is a recommendation from the business manager of Monarch Books. "Since its opening in Collegeville twenty years ago, Monarch Books has developed a large customer base due to its reader-friendly atmosphere and wide selection of books on all subjects. Last month, Book and Bean, a combination bookstore and coffee shop, announced its intention to open a Collegeville store. Monarch Books should open its own in-store café in the space currently devoted to children's books. Given recent national census data indicating a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten, sales of children's books are likely to decline. By replacing its children's books section with a café, Monarch Books can increase profits and ward off competition from Book and Bean." Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. Essay Response -> The business manager of “Monarch Books” claims that in order to compete with its rival “Book and Bean”, a bookstore cum coffee shop, he/she would have to replace the children’s book section with an in-store café. Stated in this way, this argument fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated and reveals several instances of poor reasoning. In order to justify this recommendation, the manager of “Monarch Books” has reasoned that since the recent national census data points to a significant decline in the percentage of “Under Age 10” children population, closing the Children’s Book section would only help him avoid the “foreseeable” loss on sales of children’s books. However, careful scrutiny of the facts provides little credible support for author’s recommendation. Hence his/her recommendation can be considered unsubstantiated. First of all, the argument readily assumes that closing children’s book section will not harm his/her bookshop sales, but will only help to avoid the likely decrement of the sales in the coming years. This assumption stands on hollow ground as the passage, fails to mention that how much children’s book contribute the overall sales of the bookshop. It can be possible that the children books contributed 53% of the bookshop’s overall sales. Notwithstanding the apparent decrease in children’s population, wouldn’t then the decision of closing down the most profitable section of the bookshop be ludicrous idea ? If only the amount of sales the children’s books incur at the bookshop would have been mentioned, maybe then the assumption of replacing it with a café to incur more profit would have been a tad bit more convincing. Even if the number of sales of children’s books was mentioned , the decision of including a café in the bookshop relies heavily on the manager’s hypothetical assumption that the consumers at the bookshop would indulge in coffee and other café products. It can be possible that many of their customers are just there to read books and not drink coffee. Maybe there’s an even more cheaper and far better coffee place nearer to the bookshop, and many of the bookshop customers would rather drink at that cheaper and better coffee shop outlet. So, in order to be sure that the manager’s recommendation is irrefutable, there needs to be a solid consensus from the bookshop’s ardent customers stating whether they would actually invest in the coffee and other products at the in-shop café or not. Finally, even after considering that the “Monarch Bookshop” customers would positively like to invest in the products at the in-shop café, the manager’s recommendation is weak as it doesn’t factor in the comparison of the prices of the products at their in-house café and their rival’s book-cum-coffee shop. In order to make a more convincing argument, the actual figures of the products at their in-house café and whether they are selling it at a better price than their competition or not, needs to be stated. Only then it can be determined whether it would be successful in warding off the competition or not. In essence, the business manager’s recommendation is flawed as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide more concrete facts and evidences, perhaps through a reliable survey of the consumers and a more thorough analysis of profit & losses involved in the decision of in-shop café vs. children’s book section. Finally, to better assess the argument, it would be impertinent to know more information about how closing children’s book section will not harm the bookshop sales.
  8. Issue Prompts: Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years. Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based. In each field of study and society, those in power are in control of high-level, high-pressure issues. They are experts in their fields and they have spent, sometimes decades, working to get there. The ones who last have gotten where they are have done so on merit, skill, and knowledge. Cycling through those preeminent in their field every five years would lead to a lower level of success overall, constant, chaotic change, and ridding institutions of one of their most valuable keys to continued success: trust in their leader’s abilities and judgement. The adage, “knowledge is power” holds true for many fields, especially ones as prominent as business, politics, and government. Most fields benefit from people in power who have deep knowledge of their area and are experts - scientists who have spent decades researching the same topic, teachers who have specialized in one area of study, and CEOs who have spent their careers with the same company. Having wells of knowledge creates leaders who can draw on their own stores and their personal experience to solve dynamic problems and forge strong entities, such as businesses, governments, and universities. There is also the opposite side of the adage, which says that “power corrupts” - a phrase that looks over a fundamental element of high-powered, high-performing entities and institutions. Namely, if there is corruption (moral, financial, or legal) it will not be tolerated on the scale of CEOs, Presidents, and scholars. Suggesting that those in power should change every five years also cuts out one of the most valuable aspects of having a seasoned, veteran member in a leadership role: losing that much industry-specific or company-specific knowledge, and arguably more important, the trust that is built over 5 years, is tantamount to firing and hiring all new people every five years. The intrinsic knowledge that is gained with experience is not transient from one leader to another, as is not their leadership style or the trust they have built over time. These factors are more crucial to the success of companies, the happiness of employees, and the performance of the leader than anything else they do. Getting rid of someone after so little as five years would certainly add new leadership- whether that new leadership would “revitalize” is unlikely. Five years is not much time when talking about the life cycles of companies, educational institutions, and certainly not governments. Leaders set the culture and the style of their organization, which takes time to do - and undo. Changing leaders so quickly would likely muddle the culture, create backlash among employees, and be slower in reality that many would think. A change in leadership is also not guaranteed to revitalize the company. It would keep things in a state of flux, never allow for the normal flow of things to be establised, and detract from the important work being done. Ultimately, Trying to revitalize an organization is better acheived in strategy than in leadership changes. Talking about central institutions such as government and education, and changing something as important as their leadership is unwise and unreasonable to do so often and five years. Argument Prompts: The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books. "We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. This argument from the Board of Directors leaves many unanswered questions that ultimately lead to flawed logic. Primarily, their comparison that adding a cafe would allow Monarch Books to better compete with Regal Books relies on basic assumptions that the two stores are the exact same. the question that needs to be answered is: what is Monarch’s customer base? They have a well-established customer base that relies on them for their wide selection of books, but we need to know how many of their customers would spend money in their cafe and how many more customers the added cafe would attract. If their customer base is more frugal, the cafe could fail; if their base is a significant portion of the town, can they expect the cafe to attract more customers to their bookshop? If Monarch Books’ does not make much money from their kids’ section, if their customers are affluent, and/or if they have a smaller portion of the town as their customer base, adding the cafe in lieu of the kid’s section could add to their success. Another question needing an answer is how much of their sales/how much of their client base is geared toward kids? If their kids’ section is a large part of their store and their store’s profits, getting rid of the section all together could make them less profitable. If their base is family-oriented, parents and their children may stop patronizing the store wholly. A cost-benefit analysis needs to be done comparing the kids’ section sales to the cafe’s projected sales in order to make an informed decision about whether to install the cafe and get rid of the kids’ section. If Monarch’s customer base is not family oriented and children do not frequent their store, adding the more profitable cafe could help Monarch compete better with Regal. Lastly, we need to answer the question of if Monarch adding a cafe will allow it to more directly compete with Regal books. The assumption made was that Regal Books and Monarch Books are the exact same and the only differentiating factor between them was Regal’s cafe. We need to establish other differences that could account for Monarch’s need to compete with Regal. We need to know the location of the stores - if Regal is closer to a university than Monarch, if they are in a wealthier part of town, if Monarch is outside the city, etc. Knowing the size and selection of their collections would help us see better the difference in clientele and spending habits; finally, we need to know if Regal Books’ success is in large part due to their cafe, or some other factor of their store. If Regal has a large kids’ section and their cafe has been wildly successful, as well as establishing that the two stores are similar, Monarch could let go of their kids’ section and put in a cafe to avoid fighting for sales in both areas. Overall, we need to answer these questions in order to make an informed decision about Monarch’s next business decision. With the forthcoming information, we cannot accurately decide whether or not a cafe is the right choice for Monarch. **I didn't edit at all, so it's very raw
  9. Issue Prompts: Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years. Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based. In each field of study and society, those in power are in control of high-level, high-pressure issues. They are experts in their fields and they have spent, sometimes decades, working to get there. The ones who last have gotten where they are have done so on merit, skill, and knowledge. Cycling through those preeminent in their field every five years would lead to a lower level of success overall, constant, chaotic change, and ridding institutions of one of their most valuable keys to continued success: trust in their leader’s abilities and judgement. The adage, “knowledge is power” holds true for many fields, especially ones as prominent as business, politics, and government. Most fields benefit from people in power who have deep knowledge of their area and are experts - scientists who have spent decades researching the same topic, teachers who have specialized in one area of study, and CEOs who have spent their careers with the same company. Having wells of knowledge creates leaders who can draw on their own stores and their personal experience to solve dynamic problems and forge strong entities, such as businesses, governments, and universities. There is also the opposite side of the adage, which says that “power corrupts” - a phrase that looks over a fundamental element of high-powered, high-performing entities and institutions. Namely, if there is corruption (moral, financial, or legal) it will not be tolerated on the scale of CEOs, Presidents, and scholars. Suggesting that those in power should change every five years also cuts out one of the most valuable aspects of having a seasoned, veteran member in a leadership role: losing that much industry-specific or company-specific knowledge, and arguably more important, the trust that is built over 5 years, is tantamount to firing and hiring all new people every five years. The intrinsic knowledge that is gained with experience is not transient from one leader to another, as is not their leadership style or the trust they have built over time. These factors are more crucial to the success of companies, the happiness of employees, and the performance of the leader than anything else they do. Getting rid of someone after so little as five years would certainly add new leadership- whether that new leadership would “revitalize” is unlikely. Five years is not much time when talking about the life cycles of companies, educational institutions, and certainly not governments. Leaders set the culture and the style of their organization, which takes time to do - and undo. Changing leaders so quickly would likely muddle the culture, create backlash among employees, and be slower in reality that many would think. A change in leadership is also not guaranteed to revitalize the company. It would keep things in a state of flux, never allow for the normal flow of things to be establised, and detract from the important work being done. Ultimately, Trying to revitalize an organization is better acheived in strategy than in leadership changes. Talking about central institutions such as government and education, and changing something as important as their leadership is unwise and unreasonable to do so often and five years. Argument Prompts: The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books. "We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. This argument from the Board of Directors leaves many unanswered questions that ultimately lead to flawed logic. Primarily, their comparison that adding a cafe would allow Monarch Books to better compete with Regal Books relies on basic assumptions that the two stores are the exact same. the question that needs to be answered is: what is Monarch’s customer base? They have a well-established customer base that relies on them for their wide selection of books, but we need to know how many of their customers would spend money in their cafe and how many more customers the added cafe would attract. If their customer base is more frugal, the cafe could fail; if their base is a significant portion of the town, can they expect the cafe to attract more customers to their bookshop? If Monarch Books’ does not make much money from their kids’ section, if their customers are affluent, and/or if they have a smaller portion of the town as their customer base, adding the cafe in lieu of the kid’s section could add to their success. Another question needing an answer is how much of their sales/how much of their client base is geared toward kids? If their kids’ section is a large part of their store and their store’s profits, getting rid of the section all together could make them less profitable. If their base is family-oriented, parents and their children may stop patronizing the store wholly. A cost-benefit analysis needs to be done comparing the kids’ section sales to the cafe’s projected sales in order to make an informed decision about whether to install the cafe and get rid of the kids’ section. If Monarch’s customer base is not family oriented and children do not frequent their store, adding the more profitable cafe could help Monarch compete better with Regal. Lastly, we need to answer the question of if Monarch adding a cafe will allow it to more directly compete with Regal books. The assumption made was that Regal Books and Monarch Books are the exact same and the only differentiating factor between them was Regal’s cafe. We need to establish other differences that could account for Monarch’s need to compete with Regal. We need to know the location of the stores - if Regal is closer to a university than Monarch, if they are in a wealthier part of town, if Monarch is outside the city, etc. Knowing the size and selection of their collections would help us see better the difference in clientele and spending habits; finally, we need to know if Regal Books’ success is in large part due to their cafe, or some other factor of their store. If Regal has a large kids’ section and their cafe has been wildly successful, as well as establishing that the two stores are similar, Monarch could let go of their kids’ section and put in a cafe to avoid fighting for sales in both areas. Overall, we need to answer these questions in order to make an informed decision about Monarch’s next business decision. With the forthcoming information, we cannot accurately decide whether or not a cafe is the right choice for Monarch.
  10. Governments should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position. ======= Research and development are important ascpects for growth of our society. From stepping on the Moon to the quest of habitating Mars, we have achived a lot in terms of technology. Sometimes, research can also be destructive and to keep the same in check, Government should place a few restrictions over how we pursure research. There should not be too many restrictions so as to affect the efficiency of our researchers but a few sothat we do not develop another weapon of mass distruction like nuclear bombs. Too many restrictions lead to delay in progress and slow down the develpoment. Investors and researchers tend to move their comapnies and labs to places where there is minimum goverment restrictions so that they can focus more on there reseach than filing for permits. Pharma companies are granted many patients each year by govt so that there hardworkis not taken away by their competitiors. However, if there were no restrictions imposed on there patients, these companies would keep on rasing the prices of drug so high that people would not be able tobenefit from it. Therefore, restriction on patient tenure and price cap helps to make sure that the research and develpment is actually helping the common people. Restrictions are necessary in areas like military research where their is national security involved. There is fulx of restructions to ensure that no data is leaked and national interest in manitained. Restrictions should be limited so that the efficiency of research is not affected and does not demotiviate our reserachers. ======= Also if possible, please explain the score and some areas where I should improve. Thank you so much!
  11. Hello all! I'm new to TheGradCafe and this is my first post. I wrote these 2 essays within a 30-minute time interval (more or less working on it) each during my preparation for the GRE. It would mean a lot to me if you could critique these essays, based on the criteria for assessing essays according to the Official Guide. It would be helpful if you could also give me an approximate score on 6 for each. Thanks in advance! Here are the essays: Issue Task: Claim: Major policy decisions should always be left to politicians and other government experts. Reason: Politicians and other government experts are more informed and thus have better judgment and perspective than do members of the general public. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based. I disagree with the claim and the reason on which it is based upon because it is not only too generalized but also takes into account the views of only a certain faction, when the policy holds good for all. There is no guarantee that politicians and government experts are the most well read and well informed people out there. There is no minimum education required to stand as a candidate in elections. There is also no resume or interview process as in other professions. The candidates who stand for elections are voted in by the public based on their promises, oratory skills, their Party's reputation and also to some extent what kind of work they have done for the people. They are one among the public, so they are no more like the rest of us in terms of the information they have to make such important decisions. Important policy decisions must take into consideration the views of those it impacts, that is the majority or the public. It makes it a fair decision and will be hence be appreciated more. A given policy or law would affect different strata of people differently. A survey should be conducted with a good representation or fraction from each stratum, which would give the officials useful information on how the law would impact. If there is a negative impact, the policy could also be amended or modified accordingly. After all, who knows the pain points of the public better than the public itself? Hence, the officials cannot take unilateral decisions. There should also proper representatives of the public in the government to represent and convey the needs of the public accurately But, we must consider seasoned politicians and government experts who have analysed the dynamics of the nation and give them due credit. They may have a different perspective on the matter than the common man, but only when put together do they reap the maximum benefit for the nation. Thus, the major policy decisions should not be left in the hands of the politicians and government experts blindly. The public, from which they have been elected and for whom the policies are, must know what is going on and also have a reasonable say in it. This alone would result in the maximum efficiency of the policy. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Argument Task: The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of KNOW radio station. "Several factors indicate that KNOW radio can no longer succeed as a rock-and-roll music station. Consider, for example, that the number of people in our listening area over fifty years of age has increased dramatically, while our total number of listeners has declined. Also, music stores in our area report decreased sales of rock-and-roll music. Finally, continuous news stations in neighboring cities have been very successful. We predict that switching KNOW radio from rock-and-roll music to 24-hour news will allow the station to attract older listeners and make KNOW radio more profitable than ever." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction. There are several assumptions in the statement that haven't been accounted for. This includes assumptions that listeners in the 50 plus age bracket don't enjoy rock music. An direct relation has been portrayed between the increase in the number of older listeners and the decrease in the total number of listeners, without explanation. There is also an unexplained, underlying assumption that the younger crowd does not enjoy Rock music. Rock and Roll music was all the rage back in the fifties, from where we can also trace its origin, with the rise in popularity of legendary bands like The Beatles and Queen. Hence, it is not preposterous to assume that the current 50 plus age bracket would not only have been exposed to Rock and Roll, but may also have loved it. The music when played on KNOW station, would have taken them fondly back down memory lane. They would have, in fact, thoroughly enjoyed the experience. Hence, assumtption that the older generation does not enjoy Rock music is not only presumptuous but also invalid. There is also the assumption that only the older generation even listens to the radio. There would definitely be a significant portion of the younger crowd who would listen to the radio as they travel to work, school or college in the traffic, which cannot be ignored. Among this crowd, there would also be a significant portion who would possess an old bone in them and would enjoy rock music. This is evident in the sheer crowd that appears in Rock concerts these days and there is no dearth of the younger crowd. The Beatles and Queen still continue to be cherished as the most extraordinary bands of all time, which is proof enough. In the statement, a direct relation has been extended between the decrease in the number of older listeners and the decrease in the total number of listeners. The younger listeners may simply have gone out of town due to work or further studies. Due to extreme weather conditions they may even have gone to temporarily stay in a summer home or a hill station on holiday. There are innumerable such reasons why they would have moved away temporarily but the cannot be used as excuses for the failure of KNOW station. The decreased sales in the music stores may be due to the decrease in the quality of Rock music these days. It may also have been due to the high cost of the records which may not be affordable to the majority of the working class. These days, with the rise of platforms such as Spotify and Apple Music, there is little need for people to buy physical copies of records from music stores. This could also have been a probable cause for decline in sales. It could not have been directly related to the decrease in popularity of the KNOW station. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
  12. Question To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Response Societies are often measured by the development of its major cities. But on second thought it seems that the idea in itself is quite wrong. It is not the city that makes up society, but the people. We can have a well-developed city, but with unhappy residents. We are also ignoring the fact that rural areas don't contribute to the culture, economy etc of a society. By defining the characteristics of society by just studying its major cities handicaps the whole argument as it is simply ignoring the rural part of society. The rural part can have a major population, for example, in a country like India nearly 70% of the population dwell in villages. This case is true for the major of the developing countries. In fact, the rural parts contribute to society in a lot of ways, be it economy through farming, animal husbandry etc, culture by their local traditions, beliefs, festivals etc. By simply measuring a society by cities will be incomplete and wrong. Even if we assume that the major part of the society consists of cities, then by simply studying it won't tell us the true color of the society. It is quite possible that majority of wealth is distributed among a small percentage of the population, and most of the people live under the poverty line. On average, it will seem that the city is doing great, but is it correct to say that when most of the population is struggling to even get two square meals? This inequality in the division of wealth is often the case in a lot of cities, which lead to the development of slum areas, and the condition of those areas are quite petty. It is also possible that on average the people of the city are doing quite good, but still living in the city is problematic. The city can be quite polluted, which is often the cost of development by setting up factories and industries. A lot of cities in China is facing this issue, where people have enough wealth, but they lack pure air to breathe. Should wealth be the only criteria for defining a society? Even a city can be small and underdeveloped, but people living there could be happy and content with their life. Friendly neighbors, helpful people, good environment these factors affect the people on a day-to-day basis and should not be ignored. To conclude, I would like to state that by just studying the cities for knowing the characteristics of a society, we are not doing justice to the conclusion of the study. As we are ignoring a major part of the population which reside in rural areas, and also by just studying a city we can't know the conditions of the residents.
  13. Question Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. Response The argument does not provide enough evidence to solidly reach the conclusion that Lithos' baskets were not of Palean origin, by ignoring the facts like changing geography, the presence of alternate routes etc. The argument simply believes that the geography of a region remains constant over the course of years, but that is not the case as proved by a lot of studies. For example, Sahara, the largest desert of the world, used to be green and lush. Movement of tectonic plates, climatic variance, volcanic eruptions etc can change the geography of any region. So if the Brim River is very deep and broad currently, that may not be the case centuries ago. It is even possible that it may not have existed during that period. Have the argument given us some proof regarding the condition of Brim river in pre-historic time, even then we can't be sure that baskets found in Lithos is not of Palean origin. It is quite possible that the idea of Palean baskets could have traveled across any land route by some tribes who keep traveling constantly. There could have been existence of some trade routes between the city of Palea and Lithos. History is full of examples of trade between the various region which lead to exchange of items, ideas, and even culture. If the argument has shed some light over this that it would have been clearer and easier to reach any conclusion. Even if we assume that the idea of Palean baskets could not have traveled through land. Then also we can't be sure of the fact that baskets were not of Palean origin. It is quite possible that by keep searching we may get some source which proves that the city of Palea used to have means of traveling across water bodies. It is often the case in archaeology when some major discoveries are missed. For example, a lot of Egyptian Pyramids were found by chance through the pics of satellites. To conclude, I will like to state that we can't directly come to the conclusion that baskets of Lithos were not of Palean origin. The discoveries related to trade routes, some source which proves of Palean boats etc could sway the direction of the argument.
  14. The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette. "On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answeredin order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. ===== The above argument in wrong on various accounts. Primarily because of many assumptions being made without the underlying supporting facts. The argument assumes that reducing the number of rental mopeds to half would result in all attaining a 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents. This assumption is made without the supporting fact that how each moped directly contributes to accidents. Even if every moped directly contibutes to increase in accidents, the population increases in the summer months and the cap for rental companies will be enforced during the same season. If going by the assuption, this should help reduce the accidents in that summar season only, however the assuption over the annual modep accidents is being made instead of only the summer season. The argument also assumes that what worked for the neighboring island Seaveille will work for the island of Balmer. No details regading the cities population and traffic conditions have been mentioned. It could be possible that the city of Seaville also improved the roads and imposed stricter traffic rules which lead to the decrease in accidents. Even if the two cities are entirely similar and have same traffic structure, there could be a possibility that the city of Seaville had very few visitors last year which in turn lead to 50 perecent reduction in accidents. The limit of 50 per day has been reduced to 25 per day but the arguemntdoes not mention any limits on the number of such different moped retal companies that can operate in the city. Since the limit has been reduced, these rental companies may open a new company under a different name which in turn would again offer another 25 mopeds. This way the number of modeps available for retal might remain the same. The argument could have been improved if no new companies were allowed to give mopeds for rental. Because the argument makes number of unwarranted assumptions, it fails to convience how the recommendation will show the predicted results. ======= Also if possible, please explain the score and some areas where I should improve. Thank you so much!
  15. “Students should fund their education with part-time work that they do while they study.” I agree with the speaker, as anything which is available at free of cost will loose its value. A student who spends his own money might know to value of class hours and he won’t skip a period in purpose. The student will also try to study well and try to get good grades to not waste his hard earned money he paid for education. The part-time job if it is relevant to the student’s field of study will definitely improve his knowledge and also he will get a practical knowledge and it will help in his future career. I is also a fact that spending valuable time in part time jobs rather than studying is not going to improve ones academic scores. Instead of wasting hours in jobs, one can focus in research in his field of study or gain knowledge outside his field of study. Various studies conducted suggest that the relaxation of brain is required for good health and mental ability to learn. Apart from studies and work, we need to allocate a adequate amount of time for our hobbies and entertainment. Also, a person who is living independently may find it difficult to spend his little earned money on education and satisfying his basic needs as-well. Medicine and Education should be free of cost to ensure that all the citizens irrespective of their financial status could get a proper education.
  16. Hello everyone, im planning on taking the GRE this year and would be very thankful if anyone could review my issue task essay. Thank you so much in advance. To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Characteristics of a society: Culture, Religion, Political. Opinion: True but not totally. Reasons: Culture in the rural area of the country. Although it is true that many of a society’s characteristics can be evidenced by studying its major cities, leaving out minor cities or towns might produce a biased result originating a misconception. Some of the most important characteristics of a society are culture, religion and politics. And all three may vary greatly depending on the location of study. A society’s culture can be almost fully understood by studying the major cities since its were people from many parts of the country come together. The only problem is that when so many traditions get mixed, the original essence of culture is lost. People are so lost in a sea of traditions that no one holds a unique identity anymore. This can be evidenced in Colombia, Cali is one of its major cities and serves as home for people from all over the country and abroad. Some may argue that Cali displays the whole cultural spectrum of the country, but the truth is that Salsa is not the most important component of Colombian culture. One would have to travel to Salento or Manizales which are both small towns in order to pickup coffee from the fields or listen to traditional stories since Cali offers neither. Moreover, religion has been shifting greatly in the last few years. Globalization and access to information has made people more critic. This along with news that damage the catholic church reputation has created a wave of skepticism in major cities where studied people live. This is not the case for small towns and minor cities were the church influence might be far too great and people may not be as informed as in major cities. For instance, the religious point of view might be very different in Cali when compared to Buga which is a small town greatly known for its church which is said to hold a religious treasure from times past. Contrary to the statement, the political view of a country is not determined by the political view of the major cities. In Colombia people from the cities wished for a more socialist government which would concentrate its efforts on education and keeping the newly acquired peace. On the other hand, people from the countryside wished for a far right government which would attack rebel groups that constantly produce violence. Therefore, although major cities do hold a large number of people which can provide an idea of a society’s most important characteristics. It is unwise to leave towns and minor cities out of the picture, since it is thanks to the little details given by them that a society’s characteristics can be truly understood.
  17. Statement: To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. My essay: One must have diversifying knowledge to understanding the characteristics of the society. Apparently, major cities contain people from different places which could be an advantage in studying the characteristics of major cities. Recently a person named Ron, my friend who got the job in the Delhi which is a major city in the India, moved to that place.He has not studied anything about the city behaviour and ended up coming back within two months. However, the characteristics of the major cities need not be the same as the minor cities. I strongly believe that one must understand the major cities characteristics to understand the society
  18. Hello! I'm studying for the GRE and have been practicing my writing. If anyone could offer suggestions on how I did, or suggestions to improve, that would be awesome. Thanks in advance. Topic: As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. My Response: Throughout time, the rate of aquring knowledge has increased at an exponential rate. Through the acquisition of more knowledge and research, some of the greatest inventions have been made, leaving a great and lasting impact on society. Overall, as we aquire more knowledge, things become tend to bemore comprehensible. One example of how acquiring knowledge makes something more comprehensible is the invention of the smart watch. The smart watch is a device that a person wears that collects data about a person’s sleep and fitness levels throughout the day. The smart watch presents this data, as well as an analysis of the information, to the user. This knowledge can be helpful because it helps us understand the interworkings of our bodies. A common data element that smart watches capture are our sleep patterns. The watch records how much time per night we are in light, deep, and REM sleep. This knowledge can help us determine if we are getting a good night’s sleep, and how we can change our behaviors to improve our lives. The invention of a smart watch and the resulting comprehension of our body’s sleep system was all triggered by someone who acquired knowledge of technology and decided to invent the device. A second example of how learning more about something leads us to understanding is the field of psychology as a whole. As more research is conducted by psychologists, we learn more about the motivatons of people. This knowledge of psychology can be used in endless contexts, but one example is learning and development. Through understanding the motivations of people and how our brain’s store and access information, we can optimize the presentation of material to students, so that they can learn more efficiently. In turn, when people learn more, they are more productive. The only reason humans understand the best way to teach others is because psychologists gained the knowledge of how a human’s brain works. However, even though knowledge creates understanding of previous questions, it can also produce even more questions based on our new understanding of a subject. For example, in the 1980’s we learned that AIDS was caused by HIV. This was an important discovery that lead to understanding the disease in the medical community. However, this lead to even more questions about the sources of HIV, and what kind of measures we could take as a society to combat the issue as a whole. Sometimes it is true that we simple don’t know what we don’t know. Overall, as humans gain more knowledge, things become more comprehensible. As time has gone on, the human race has learned more about many important topics, which has lead to a society that can invent amazing technologies, help others to learn, and heal disease.
  19. Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position. (I don't know why some are bolded and some arent but heres my response) I think the argument presented above is too much of a blanketed statement in too many ways to hold true. The statement requires us to make an assumption: either the “scandal” is completely related to the problem at hand, or the “scandal” is not related to the problem at hand. The statement is also assuming, if the scandal were related to the problem, that the public would accurately make the connection of said scandal being a direct cause of said problem without any influence from a speaker or reformer. If the reader is assuming that the scandal is not at all related to to the problem at hand, then the scandal would be further distracting from the problem that said reformer or speaker is trying to hone in on. The scandal would have no benefit to a reform. If the reader is assuming that the scandal is related to the problem at hand, then one also has to ask if the general population is connecting “the problem” with the scandal. For example, if the scandal is that border patrol agents are separating families who are illegally crossing the United States border, then we have to ask ourselves if that focuses the public’s attention on a border security problem or an acquisition of citizenship problem. If the scandal is that a high-schooler brought a gun to school and killed students, then we have to ask ourselves if that focuses our attention on a gun control problem or a mental health awareness problem. While the scandal would fuel a conversation, the type of conversation is unpredictable and would cause a fray in the population’s opinion of what problem caused the scandal. The term “problem” is too blanketed to make an accurate opinion on the argument at hand, because the “problem” is up to the individual that is interpreting the scandal. It is far too difficult to predict how a population will interpret a scandal and which “problem” the attention will be focused on. The words “scandal” and “argument” are extremely dependent on the situation at hand. Furthermore, a speaker or reformer could possibly assist the public’s focus by telling them what lead to the scandal - identifying the problem - and how to fix it.
  20. People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. People invetibaly are shaped by external circumstances, as is also said by psychologists. You see every day how one automatically becomes rowdy and energetic at a football stadium, clearly influenced by the thousands of foot-thumping football fans cheering for their teams. On the other hand, one acquires an air of civility when attending a ball or a royal event. These examples clearly show how one is a slave to one’s surroundings. If we look at children and see how they develop, it is often seen that the offspring of educated, white-collar workers, whether they are scientists, businessmen or engineers, will inevitably turn out to be responsible and thoughtful citizens. A child surrounded by logical, thoughtful parents, who focus on building positive traits, will be inclined to exercise his or her mind. On the other hand, if you look at the children of working class people or those from broken families, you will see a distinct pattern emerging, wherein the child will not be too keen on going to school or that he does not value relationships. Why would he when he has never seen his parents valuing theirs. No wonder psychologists emphasise the importance of providing a positive, encouraging environment for children. Our surroundings influence us in myriad ways. Not just individuals but whole societies are impacted by forces not of their own making. For instance, if you live in a fair, free and just society, you would be more prone to treating men and women fairly, but if you have grown up in a patriarchal society, you would tend to sideline women. You would not think twice before judging a woman on what she wears or what she eats, drinks or who she goes out with, a thing for which you would be scorned in the West. Further, it is often seen that people in violent areas, where there is little respect for the law, tend to be less civil than those living in more respectable places. However, one cannot totally assume that this argument is infallible. Clearly, you can do a lot to regulate your behaviour. History is replete with examples of men who have fought against the odds and the circumstances to change the world. Nelson Mandela lived in a country afflicted with aparthied, but he chose to battle this ideology, inspired by the works of nonviolent and fair-minded leaders like Mahatma Gandhi. Even then, it is clear how forces beyond our control heavily influence our behavior. If we recognise this and work towards correcting this bias of ours, we can definitely become better human beings.
  21. The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist. “Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field’s conclusion about Tertain village culture is invalid and thus the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.” Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strenghten the argument. Anthropologist Dr. Karp says that Dr. Field’s conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and so is the observation-centered approach to studying cultures. This argument is flawed as it contains causal, analogical and statistical errors, which once corrected will unravel the argument, thereby proving that its assumptions and implications are incorrect. Firstly, Dr. Karp after interviewing some children living in a group of islands that include Tertia finds that the children spoke more about their parents than other adults in the village. This he says proves that Dr. Field’s conclusion that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents is invalid. Dr. Karp hereby commits a causal error. Just because children spoke more about their biological parents than other adults in the village doesn’t mean they weren’t parented by the whole village. Dr. Karp provides little explanation as to how he reached this particular conclusion. Had he provided more information on who spent how much time on raising the children, his argument would have been stronger. Secondly, Dr. Karp commits the analogical error, saying that since he proved Dr. Field’s conclusion about the village wrong, he has proved the observation-centered approach to studying cultures wrong. This statement does not hold water. The observation-centered approach must be broad-based and could have been used correctly by several anthropologists in the past. In order to make such a strong statement, Dr. Karp should have provided more data and explained how he thinks this approach is wrong, typically taking a systematic approach and studying the technique closely, such as its methodoly. Lastly, Dr. Karp doesn’t say anything about the size of the sample of interviews his team has collected. If the size is too small or not representative enough of the whole village, his findings will prove to be incorrect. Further, the methodology used by his team of graduate students has not been discussed; it could be possible that they asked the wrong questions to the children, not asking them more about the time they spent with their biological parents. This shows that there are plenty of gaps in the argument, which if rectified will illustrate that Dr. Karp’s argument lacks substance and hence is flawed. As pointed out, these errors are serious, which if not corrected can result in one making wrong conclusions. Until and unless, Dr. Karp systematically provides considerably more information, we cannot make any statement about whether or not Dr. Field’s conclusion about children in Tertia being raised by the entire village is false.
  22. The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position. The prompt says that the best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. Now many might say that to spare the rod is to spoil the child, but the fact is that positive reinforcement can result in remarkable improvement in a student. This essay will discuss why the best way to teach is to praise positive actions and give examples in support of this claim. In education, as we all know, if you keep criticizing the student and not praise his or her achievements, it can lead to discouragement and in extreme cases, can cause the student to lose interest in studies. This has been proven time and time again. Therefore, in the developed world, there is heavy emphasis on positive reinforcement and building children’s confidence as in formative years, a negative or traumatic school experience can be detrimental to a person’s mental health. On the other hand, the developing world still seems to be stuck in the past, with teachers sticking to old hectoring tactics even resorting to beating when the child has made mistakes. They believe that if children are complimented for their achievements, they will complacent or that they will become arrogant. One can only witness how detrimental it has been to the developing world’s progress. Moreover, it is evident how the West has implemented this positive reinforcement in the field of sports to its advantage; it is arguably producing the best sportsmen in the world. A coach would typically focus on what the athletes are doing well and help them build on these successes. Most athletes are taught the power of visualisation, wherein they would imagine how well they would play in the game before it begins, thereby helping them get into a positive state of mind and alleviate stress and anxiety. Even in performance art, the teacher would often stress on the artistes’ strengths, accentuating them in order to get the best out of them. For instance, while casting, directors or casting directors would only choose those actors for a particular role, who can naturally play it, as in they will only cast a serious man in a serious role or an artful person in a cunning role. This being said, one can understand how totally ignoring negative actions can be disastrous. So one needs to be cautious in not totally ignoring negative actions, how else will a person learn from his or her mistakes. But at the same time it is a common mistake to lay all the focus on rectifying faults insead of building on strengths or positive actions. Thus as we can see how positive reinforcement can help people realize their potential, the best way, indeed, is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones as much as one can.
  23. Could someone edit my essays and tell me how to improve. These are my first practice essays and would appreciate further guidance. Thanks!! Essay 1 The Argument Quiot plant.docx GRE Essay - Experts.docx
  24. Hi Guys, can someone help me with analyzing and giving a critique on my essays. I wrote these essays when I hadn't started preparing for GRE. These were the first essays I wrote to kick start my GRE prep. Please have a look at it and suggest me how to improve my essay writing skills and how to structure my essays better. If you have any tips and strategies or any study material, please do share. Issue Task: A nation should require all of it's students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. essay_section_1_question_1_2018.txt Argument Task: The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station. “Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station’s coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level.” Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence would be needed in order to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. essay_section_1_question_2_2018.txt
  25. Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. The argument doesn't seem to be coherent, making several assumptions without reasoning through the various questions coming to mind. Firstly, it doesn't make clear as to why the species population fell sharply, merely saying that recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of Madagascan shrimp led to the drop in population. The argument doesn't say whether the fishermen caught shrimp or fishes that the shrimp fed on. We just don't know what caused the population drop. There could be other reasons for this that may not be linked to the fishermen's incursions in the area. For instance, global warming could have caused the water temperature to rise, making the area unsuitable for shrimps or there could have been an environmental catastrophe such as a big oil spill that killed the shrimp. Secondly, the argument says that shrimp population should not return to levels before the fishing boats arrived, adding that this may result in Madagascan shrimp becoming an endangered species. This statement isn't logically sound. Even if we assume that the shrimp's population declined due to the fishermen, what's to say the species will not become extinct if the population doesn't return to its previous levels. The deep-sea fishermen can still catch the remaining shrimp, and thereby reducing their number bit by bit every year until they go extinct. Thirdly, if we assume that the shrimp's number doesn't reach levels before the fishermen had arrived, they can still catch the shrimp and reduce their population drastically. Further, if the shrimps were not to increase in population and the fishermen were not to catch them, how do we know that their numbers will increase, not knowing how many times their breeding season occurs in a year and how much time do they take to muliply. These are all gaping holes in the argument. Unless these things are made clear we can't reach the conclusion that the argument has reached. Also, we are also not told how many times the fishermen come to the area. Do they come once in a year, six months, three months or every month? Before making any more deductions from this argument, we need to be told what is the population of shrimp in the region and how many shrimps have the fishermen supposedly caught. Without these numbers, the argument comes across as vague. Only when we know how fast do the shrimp multiply and how many are caught can we make projections about the extinction of the shrimps. These are some of the assumptions made in the argument and without answering the abovementioned specific questions, we can't reach this conclusion. To be cogent, the author needs to think through the argument.
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