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  1. Issue Topic : The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.The young people can be taught about leadership in government, industries and other fields through cooperation rather than competition. Young minds are naive and malleable. Hence, they can be taught easily about the needs to become a successful leader.To begin with, instilling the sense of cooperation, the act of doing things together in peace and harmony can be an effective method to build a leader among young people. Any task can be carried out with through discussion, supporting each other ideas and plan. This develops trust and believe among themselves, which helps to conduct work effectively. For instance, various clubs are established in schools, colleges and university to develop teamwork and leadership skills within students. To conduct programs, students need to come up with certain work plan and implement them properly. This builds sense of responsibility in their young minds that can be helpful in future.Given that, competition can also bring out best of oneself. In situation as such, one needs to put best foot forward. When young ones are frequently send to competions, they will understand the need to being the best. In future also they will imbibe the requirement to be the best. When one comes out as the best in bunch of people, they can surely lead others to path of success.All in all, i believe development of cooperation among young people are must for them to develop leadership rather than competion. Leader needs to lead the whole group to success as individual success of a leader does not account for successful leadership.
  2. Hi everyone, I am applying for a PhD at universities in the UK. I have recently finished the first draft of my personal statement. I would like to receive some constructive feedback, so I wonder if there is anyone who could advise me on improving my personal statement. Also, I am happy to swap with someone else to help you improve your personal statement. Hope to hear back from you! Thanks.
  3. Hi all! I am studying for the GRE and was hoping I could get some feedback on my practice essay I wrote for the Issue task. I timed myself and wrote this in 30 minute and I would appreciate any feedback anyone has in order to improve my though-process or earn a higher score on the actual test. Thank you in advance!
  4. Hello! I'm studying for the GRE and have been practicing my writing. If anyone could offer suggestions on how I did, or suggestions to improve, that would be awesome. Thanks in advance. Topic: As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. My Response: Throughout time, the rate of aquring knowledge has increased at an exponential rate. Through the acquisition of more knowledge and research, some of the greatest inventions have been made, leaving a great and lasting impact on society. Overall, as we aquire more knowledge, things become tend to bemore comprehensible. One example of how acquiring knowledge makes something more comprehensible is the invention of the smart watch. The smart watch is a device that a person wears that collects data about a person’s sleep and fitness levels throughout the day. The smart watch presents this data, as well as an analysis of the information, to the user. This knowledge can be helpful because it helps us understand the interworkings of our bodies. A common data element that smart watches capture are our sleep patterns. The watch records how much time per night we are in light, deep, and REM sleep. This knowledge can help us determine if we are getting a good night’s sleep, and how we can change our behaviors to improve our lives. The invention of a smart watch and the resulting comprehension of our body’s sleep system was all triggered by someone who acquired knowledge of technology and decided to invent the device. A second example of how learning more about something leads us to understanding is the field of psychology as a whole. As more research is conducted by psychologists, we learn more about the motivatons of people. This knowledge of psychology can be used in endless contexts, but one example is learning and development. Through understanding the motivations of people and how our brain’s store and access information, we can optimize the presentation of material to students, so that they can learn more efficiently. In turn, when people learn more, they are more productive. The only reason humans understand the best way to teach others is because psychologists gained the knowledge of how a human’s brain works. However, even though knowledge creates understanding of previous questions, it can also produce even more questions based on our new understanding of a subject. For example, in the 1980’s we learned that AIDS was caused by HIV. This was an important discovery that lead to understanding the disease in the medical community. However, this lead to even more questions about the sources of HIV, and what kind of measures we could take as a society to combat the issue as a whole. Sometimes it is true that we simple don’t know what we don’t know. Overall, as humans gain more knowledge, things become more comprehensible. As time has gone on, the human race has learned more about many important topics, which has lead to a society that can invent amazing technologies, help others to learn, and heal disease.
  5. Hello peeps! I am new on this forum and I am very happy I found this gem! I am a French student preparing the GRE. My English language skills are definitely okay, but of course 'ok' is not enough for the GRE I practiced the dreaded Argument Essay for the first time today and a feedback would help me to evaluate what my strengths and weaknesses are. I know an in-depth analysis is time consuming, any small comment will help! Thank you very much Subject: The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of WWAC radio station. "To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area." Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. Answer: In this essay, the author examines the audience decline of local rock-music radio WWAC station and suggests to remediate the situation by capturing a new audience with a format change. To support this proposal, the author makes several hasty assumptions regarding the causes for audience decline and the preferences of the new target demographic, thus failing to make a cogent case for a format shift. Citing the decline in listener numbers, the author implies that a change of format could remediate the issue. However, he does not provide satisfying explanations regarding the origin the decrease. Numerous factors could have provoked the drop: an excessive number of commercials, a lack of eclecticism in the musical selection, or a poor choice of radio presenters, could all result in losing listeners. In the absence of an in-depth survey or market study, it is hazardous to point out rock music as the key elements needing to be altered. Secondly, the author suggests population growth did not result in audience gain, because the new residents are retired. This claim bears two suppositions, one being that people into the retirement age bracket do not like the current format (rock music), and the other that they INDEED listen to the radio. While this may sound plausible, there is again no supporting element to this thesis. We do not know if retirees dislike rock, or if they simply do not listen to the radio. If this latter argument were true, then no format change could appeal to this audience segment. Building upon these premises, the author examines what format would be best catered to this new target. Arguing that a local decline in recorded music indicates a lack of interest in music, he proposes a talk and news approach instead . It is easy to see holes in this argument. The rise of free music streaming platforms, such as Youtube or Spotify for example, might have caused the sales to fall. Recorded music sale is too narrow of a criteria to evaluate people’s fondness for music. Going to the opera, going to a live band performance, or playing the violin or all indicate interest in music, yet can not be quantified through music sales only. While WWAC should take action to countervail decline in audience, the author did not manage to provide compelling arguments to support a format change. Rebranding the station from rock-music to a talk and news oriented channel might very well result in alienating the radio’s original audience, with no guarantee that new listeners will won over in the process.
  6. I wrote two introductions for my SOP for Harvard University, both taking a bit of a different approach. These are, of course, rough, and will probably not make it into my SOP without significant editing. My research interests center on the broad intersection of gender and ethnicity in American cities during the twentieth century. I am particularly interested in the way that second-generation immigrant- specifically, Italian, Greek, and Jewish -women were present in the public sphere. Using their involvement in sexuality, fashion, beauty, consumption, and political movements as a focal point, I intend to complicate the current historical narrative around immigrant women, which centers around their productivity. Further, I seek to highlight the attitudinal differences across generations and the place of non-Protestant religions in female life. I have an ancillary interest in the way that American culture and society reacted to these women, paying particular attention to media and cultural texts. Above all, I am interested in the immigrant identity in the second generation and its expression by women. or I am applying to the PhD program in history at Harvard University in order to explore the broad intersection of gender and ethnicity in urban America during the twentieth century. Using sexuality, fashion, beauty, consumption, and involvement in political movements as a focal point, I intend to research the lives of second-generation Italian-, Greek-, and Jewish-American women and the expression of an immigrant identity. I have an ancillary interest in the way that American society reacted to this expression, paying particular attention to media and cultural texts. Any feedback would be much appreciated!
  7. Is anyone out there able to give feedback on practice GRE essays? I would be happy to do the same for them!!
  8. Hello! I have a few questions about the School Psychology program at University of Hartford and was wondering if anyone would be willing to share their experiences? Thanks!
  9. What do you think is the best way to go about soliciting application feedback from departments? I was wondering how best to reach out to universities in order to minimize the intrusion and maximize the possibility of getting useful information. (e.g., do you consider it better to write directly to the department, or instead to the graduate admissions office? Do you have opinions as to the best time to ask for feedback? etc, etc.) At this point I'm planning on a second admissions cycle, and even if I get accepted somewhere last minute, I'd like to open the discussion for any lurkers who may be facing a shutout in the next few weeks.
  10. I am a freshman Computer Science student who is applying for a prestigious research internship at IST Austria. This is my SOP: I am applying as an intern at the Lampert Group for Computer Vision and Machine Learning at IST Austria. Being aware that the best way to learn about any field is to start working on it, I decided to take up a project on Machine Learning. My journey as a Machine learning newbie began with this project. After some thorough searching, I thought about solving the problem of classification on unbalanced datasets. It is difficult to implement classification algorithms on these datasets as there is a danger of overlapping of classes. Solving this problem led me to this paper on Mahalanobis Data-Oversampling. It uses Mahalanobis distance as a metric to measure the covariance in place of the the euclidean distance. It also made me realise the importance of machine learning in solving real life problems like detection of anomalies, fraud detection in banking transactions, etc. Success in this project led me to another project on an interesting problem. I took up a project on the problem of audio classification. Substantial work had been done on a similar problem of image classification. Here, deep learning and convolutional neural networks succeeded where traditional techniques had previously failed. Some of these networks even passed human classifiers in accuracy. Audio classification brought with it a different set of interesting challenges. SVMs and deep convolutional networks continued to dominate the scene here too. Initially, I solved a simpler single label classification problem on the Google Audioset. Taking cue from the results obtained, I tried solving a similar problem for multiple-labels. During this, I learned about many multi-label classification algorithms and also about the various problems in multi-label classification. This also gave me the required exposure to a variety of problems like incorrect labelling, computationally expensive applications, etc. This also cleared my brain of misconceptions about having a lucky breakthrough in science. The goal of research is not to publish but to make an impact to the field. It is important to fail in research and learn from the failures. It also helped me on my journey from a machine learning newbie to a machine learning enthusiast. During my work on the audio classification problem, my professor recommended me to use Zernike descriptors for the project. Studying about Zernike desciptors helped me cultivate a different approach towards my problem and introduced me to Image Processing. Zernike moments help in giving an invariant transform of images and play a big role in Computer Vision too. Learning more about Zernike descriptors led me to study their applications in 3D object retrieval and other fields like bioonformatics too. I also became aware of the interesting problems in Computer vision like learning from continuous data. One of the most important work to solve this problem is being performed at IST Austria. In my whole journey, I realised the importance of having an excellent peer group and teachers. Lampert Group has been involved in solving some of the most intriguing and difficult problems of computer vision. Working there will help me learn from some of the most esteemed professors in this field and also help me progress in my journey from a machine learning enthusiast to a machine learning student. This is the first time ever that I have written a statement of purpose. I would love to receive your feedback regarding the same.
  11. hi, I'm preparing for GRE to apply to study abroad. Can anyone here help me by grading my essays? Please let me know if you can help and i will send you my essay. PS: I'm new and not native English speaker. Thanks in advance. I appreciate the help.
  12. Hi, I am an art student, now I have some problems and I hope I can get your help : ) If I give the petri dish an electric shock, can I get some feedback from the bacteria? ( it could be any form, such as numbers, shapes, or some instrument can output some kind of data ( Any form is okay, but the final output need a real-time changes value ) If you know something about it, I hope to get your answer, or you know that there are similar experiments please tell me, thank you!
  13. Hi everyone, would anyone like to exchange SOPs for feedback? Mine is for Sociology PhD programs. Let me know and I will PM you. Thank you!!
  14. This might be a really dumb question, but I was still wondering. I just really want to know if my SOP reflects a fit for that particular program (Sociology). And I was thinking of emailing the listed contact reference for graduate applications (not some random professor I mean lol) - so then it wouldn't be completely inappropriate right? What do you guys think? Thanks!
  15. This is my first attempt on the issue essay. My particular concerns are whether my logic and examples are logical, well-developed, and persuasive enough. Any other critiques will be much appreciate though. Thanks in advance and I'll be happy to return the favour! Issue Prompt: “As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.” In order to make the author’s claim, we also need to explore how we use technology to solve problems in the first place. The direct relationship between overreliance on technology and people’s ability to think for themselves that the author draws undermines how we use the technology. Considering the perspective that the efficiency of technologies will increase our use and reliance ironically ignores its benefits. The use of technology to solve problems is not only helpful for simple problems but argueably, enhances our ability to solve more complex problems. For example, the use of calculators are discouraged in elementary schools but often encouraged for university students. Why might that be the case? While both are developing, students attempting to solve problems in their level of education, the complexity of problems in post-secondary curriculum is obvious. The use of calculators in university tests eliminates simple calculations in order to tackle more complex problems. In line with this reasoning, then, reliance on technology increases our mental capacity to think about more complex problems. We can also combine and manipulate technology in order to approach and solve problems. If we consider technology as one of our many tools, rather than an ‘one-fits-all’ solution, than our ability to think will not deteriorate. For instance, medical diagnoses are deducted using different instruments to analyze different areas of our body. In addition, the combined use of technology can help us consolidate our previous findings. For example, microbiological testing for an infectious disease uses multiple skilled technology and diagnostic strategies to come to a sound analysis. In this way, scientists could come to an accurate and precise answer that would eliminate false positives or false negatives. Shifting to a more pragmatic perspective, we need to explore our relationship with technology itself. The author neglects the product-consumer relationship that increases the number and diversity of technologies that we use. The use of technology is not simply a linear process. Rather, information about how consumers use their technology will inform product engineers and developers to adapt to our increasing needs. As a result, engineers will continue to develop new ways of using our technology as we currently use them. Due to this cyclical relationship, our use of technology will continue to evolve along with us. Our relationship with technology is not a simple, linear process. Humans’ ability to think for themselves will not simply deteriorate with the use of technology due to the nature of our use. Our use and reliance on technology will inform engineers to develop innovative products to adapt to our problems.
  16. Hey, guys! I was hoping to find someone interesting in trading their SOP, especially for a public affairs/government related program. Let me know!
  17. These are pretty rough I know since they were my first timed practice essays. Any and all advice and critiques are welcome! GRE Practice Essays.docx
  18. Applicants are asked to provide a 1 - 2 page, double-spaced personal statement which includes the following: Why do you want to undertake graduate work? Why do you qualify to pursue a graduate degree at Virginia Tech? What do you expect to derive from your program of study? If you have a concentration or area of interest in mind, briefly outline your interests in this area. What do you expect to contribute as a student and subsequently as a member of the profession? If you have not previously indicated in your application the names of faculty members you are interested in working with, please include that information in this statement. STATEMENT OF PURPOSE Seeing my father drive, the concept of mobility in machines, shifting gears, accelerating, judgment to take a pass or to turn & all this controlled by a human seemed like magic to me. Since I started driving this fascination grew into a passion. This passion has been responsible for my inclination towards engineering. I have been an automobile fanatic right since my primary schooling days. Shows like Super Cars & Mega Factories gave me motivation. Motivation and passion, in my opinion, have a strong correlation. This correlation led me to pursue undergraduate in Mechanical Engineering. I have completed my undergraduate course in Mechanical Engineering from Manipal University Jaipur, India. My undergraduate course has given me numerous opportunities to learn what I enjoy. However, moving ahead, I desire to study Mechanical Engineering further by undertaking graduate work as it would give me more insight into the field, do something constructive in the field with much better understanding as well as provide me with more career opportunities. During my undergraduate subjects like Mechanical Engineering Sciences, manufacturing processes engineering, Theory of machinery, Internal Combustion Engines, gave me a clearer view of what I wanted to do. I seek to design and engineer something new in a developing segment of mechanical. But sadly there were very few subjects relevant. So whenever & wherever I got any chance to follow my passion, gain more knowledge and practical skills I took it. I chose Automobile Engineering, micro-electro-mechanical-systems (MEMS), Computational Fluid dynamics (CFD), sustainable development & optimization technique as my elective courses even when only as much as 10% students of the department chose to study these subjects. The final year project considered in my undergraduate program was titled “Long Stroke Engine Development” & it gave me the opportunity to be a part of a team to design and develop something new. It was one of the most original, challenging & insightful project & was appreciated with good grades. We developed a 4 Cylinder Vertical In-Line Engine to achieve higher horsepower than all existing engines at MAHINDRA & MAHINDRA. Being the only student selected for project & I needed to have a thorough knowledge of most of the operations and structure of the IC engine. Working toe to toe with experienced Industrial Experts has improved my knowledge & skills in engine assembly, engine testing, time management & teamwork. I have attended several workshops, seminars and internships organized at different institutions which helped in having hands on experience of the various machines that are the backbone of mechanical engineering. Having these valuable experiences have shown me the value of practical exposure. To learn what other institutes offer I joined and completed many MOOC courses like Machine Design from Georgia Institute of Technology & I am currently finishing A Hands-on Introduction to Engineering Simulations from Cornell University using ANSYS Mechanical & ANSYS Fluent. It has increased my knowledge in structural mechanics, fluid dynamics and heat transfer through finite-element analysis, computational fluid dynamics and structural mechanics simulations. I did my summer internship at NBC. This training at undergraduate level has helped me identify the various manufacturing processes, issues underlining each sector of the industry. Apart from the academic learning at the university level, I was elected as member for Student Council of the University by the university students & at the departmental level, I was voted as Class Representative. These two huge designations have given me a sense of commitment and responsibility toward the community of which I am a part of. I had been a part of organizing teams of the annual technical festival, cultural & sports festival of my university. I was campus and hostel committee member of University's joint admission counseling & have worked 210 hours each summer for past three years. These all have helped me in building my organizational skills, management, reasoning skills, team management & problem-solving skills & this helped me overcome my social barrier. These developed skills proved to be the foundation for many other skill developments. I have also worked as customer care executive for two and half months during my summer break of the 3rd year of undergraduate, giving me command over my communication skills and various quick problem resolving skills. My academics declined when I met two life threatening accidents. I had to be away from lectures for months due to prescribed bed rest, progressive surgeries and was dependent on others for attending classes for a substantial period. I had to miss 2 midterm examinations in different semesters resulting in my inferior GPA. Those were massive emotional, physical & mental setbacks for me. I have overcome those now. I have been trying with all what is within my capability & capacity to compensate those setbacks. I got certified in diesel management system and vehicle dynamics from BOSCH, developed a Go-Kart vehicle with a primary objective to design a safe & functional vehicle based on a rigid and torsion –free chassis, I was the design & material coordinator of the team & worked really hard for my project. These have enhanced my skills and knowledge even further. Research is a very important part for the growth and sustenance of both the university and its students. It allows us to give something back to the society in terms of new findings or better solutions to a potential problem. Virginia Tech has pioneered this area. We all know where the power supply for Intel chips was designed. The accomplished research work of department professors like Douglas Nelson, Joseph Meadows fascinates me, and if provided with the opportunity I would like to work under the combined guidance of both of them in investigating CFD &combustion systems application in hybrid vehicles. Also, other factors to be considered for choosing Virginia Tech as my top choice are that the faculty to student ratio is good, the campus looks very institutional and what I have gathered is that the institute is focused on preparing the student for a lifetime of service no matter their academic discipline. With my Master’s degree in place, I would want to pursue a further in-depth research where I can find novel ways and techniques that would help the industry to develop, for this I need to have a thorough knowledge which is possible at your institution. Once I have the field proficiency in the job I wish to make an impact in the field. For me to achieve this, education and experience are the stand up pillars. I can then combine my experience and knowledge to develop a stable & prosperous future. Learning in a well-organized institution in the USA with powerful pedagogical resources, vibrant intellectual environment, and a comprehensive curriculum will be a great step for me to achieve my aims and through working in a community having very large number of international students will give me a chance to interact with people from different & diverse cultures. It would give me a wider perspective of the world. I would be honored if you decide to accept my candidateship for Master studies. At the same time, I am aware of possible challenges and the high investment of efforts which I will have to put in order to successfully complete this course. I am looking forward to new experiences at the university. I am sure that the university will give me chances and challenges which will assist me in my all round personal growth GAURAV SHARMA
  19. I can share a link to a google doc if you would like to give me writing feedback on the personal statement.
  20. Hello! I am taking the GRE in a month and I have taken a couple of practice tests now. I would really appreciate it if I can get feedback on this Issue Task essay I wrote for one of them. I'm not sure how this works in the forum but I'm happy to correct someone else's issue task to return the favor. Let me know if you want for me to correct yours as an exchange for some feedback on mine. - Michelle The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position. Teaching is a hard feat: as a teacher, you have to encourage positive behaviors and discourage negative behaviors, all while keeping your students motivated. Therefore, disregarding negative behaviors when teaching and just praising positive behaviors does not foster learning. Just praising positive behaviors should be avoided. Negative actions should be analyzed and talked though to make sure the student learns from their mistakes. A good example that shows the importance of correcting negative behaviors is studying for the GRE. My goal while studying was to learn all the topics the GRE was going to test me in and answer as many questions correctly. While doing practice questions, I kept track of the questions I had answered correctly and questions I had answered incorrectly. If I had just rewarded myself for the times I got questions right and ignored those which I answered incorrectly, I would have not made much progress. If I had not corrected the questions I got wrong, I would have kept on making the same mistakes when answering future questions that test me on similar topics and kept on getting the questions wrong. Therefore, it was essential for me to go back to the negative questions I answered ad see what flaws I had in my thought process for answering to get the questions right the next time. Take for example a child who is being taught good habits at home. The child is taught to put their dishes in the sink every time they are done eating. Every time the child remembers to put the dirty plates in the sink, the parents praise the child and the child learns to put the dishes in the sink after eating. Moreover, the parents want the child not to interrupt people when other people are not talking. Although the parents want to teach the child this, the parents ignore the faults of the child every time the child interrupts someone. This will probably make the child keep on interrupting people when the other person speaks because they are not being told not to do it. If the child was told by their parents to not interrupt someone when they are talking, the child would learn from their mistakes and get better at not interrupting people. This does not mean that praising good actions is detrimental to learning. Praising good actions reinforce on the person to keep on behaving the same way and therefore learn. If I had not rewarded myself when I got a section right in the GRE, I would have been burned out when studying. Rewarding myself every time I got a question right helped me be motivated in learning. If the parents of the child had not praised the child every time they put the dirty dishes on the sink, the child would have no motivation to learn this behavior. Rewarding positive actions is not enough to foster thorough learning and would not help people learn from their mistakes. Correcting negative behaviors when learning something is necessary to foster thorough learning. If only positive behaviors were praised, negative ones would keep on happening, and people would just keep on doing the positively reinforced ones and not the negative ones.Therefore, the best way to teach is to reinforce positive behaviors and correct negative behaviors.
  21. [PROMPT] SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters. Moreover, Middleburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision. Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted. [RESPONSE] The argument that Supercorp has made the best decision of moving its headquarters from Middlesburg to Corporateville is open to debate. There are many assumptions that the author makes. The most glaring assumption is that lower taxes and a less urban setting directly qualifies Corporateville as the best destination for setting up Supercorp's new headquarters. The author mentions that due to the fact that Corporateville is a less urban area, it is a much safer place than Middlesburg. This may not be true as Corporateville may have an unusually higher crime rate than its counterparts. We just cannot say. Also the lower taxes may be a policy of the government to bring in more investment and after a few years the government may be tempted to raise the taxes, bringing the expenses at a comparable level to what the company had in Middlesburg. Another statement that invokes suspicion is the claim from the survey that the employees prefer t live in non urban areas. The authenticity of the survey may be called into question as it was not done by an independent outside organisation. Even after considering the survey authentic, the results may have been incorrectly interpreted. It may be the case that the employees at the lower spectrum of work who were, not surprisingly, in greater numbers preferred non urban areas while the top management which was fewer in numbers were greatly opposed to living in non urban areas. The surge in number of homeowners is in no way an indication of the superiority of Corporateville as compared to Middlesburg. This may have been a result of government subsidy on taxes which ultimately pulled a large number of people to invest in property here. Corporateville may as well have been a city lagging behind others and in an attempt to make it more attractive to industry and the general population certain policies and tax sops may have been introduced by the government and the duration up to which they will last is hard to say.
  22. [PROMPT] Technology, while apparently aimed to simplify our lives, only makes our lives more complicated. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. [RESPONSE] Technology, instead of simplifying our lives, has made it even more complicated. Technology is a great enabler. It has simplified our lives more than the complications that have arisen due to it. Today, it offers a plethora of solutions for everyday problems ranging from ordering food from a nearby restaurant to ride hailing services. It is not surprising that many a people cannot think of a world without the ever watchful eyes of technology. There is hardly any convenience related service that is not addressed by the technology existing in our times. The invention of telephone by Graham Bell was a ground breaking step in the way that man communicates. Sitting at home a prospective student can apply to any number of universities of her choice. This is the power of the internet, a gift from the womb of technology. The security infrastructure has greatly improved with technology with inventions such as the closed circuit television which enable us to monitor any suspicious activity for the safety of the general public. There is even the baby camera for working professionals which allows them to keep track of the baby while still being able to devote time for work. It is perhaps the immense benefits offered by technology, that it could be said that in some ways we have become hugely dependant on it. The amount of social interactions has decreased as people have replaced it with a simple test or voice message. A sense of lethargy is seen in people for tasks which they would otherwise have preferred to do the online way. Also there are cases of hacking by individuals and organisations into personal details of the general public which has been a cause of concern. By carefully measuring between the pros and cons, the cons of technology cannot be counted as a concession to the wide range of benefit that technology offers.
  23. Hi, I'm new to this forum as well as grad school life. And since English isn't my native language, I need help with reviewing this short essay of mine. I think it may sound not academically written or too plain. I'll appreciate any help. “What steps would you recommend be taken to make health care in America more available to everyone?” Increasing Value Based Healthcare in America It is imperative to restructure the healthcare system with the aim of value for patients and shift away from a supply-driven system. To deliver more value, healthcare providers should focus solely on quality. To achieve this, they need to deepen their expertise so as to serve all complicated and interrelated needs of patients during their full course of care. Care should revolve around patient medical conditions. Additionally, as care is administered the results achieved should be measured against the patient’s needs. For example, diabetes involves other conditions like renal disease, hypertension, and retinal disease among others. Therefore, care delivered to diabetic patients should incorporate all these needs. Providers should move to bundled payments for care cycles. Patients with acute conditions pay one price to cover all treatments and interventions performed on them during their full care cycle (Porter and Lee 24). As a result, they achieve best outcomes at lower prices. Another step to take is integrating healthcare systems. The first step is defining the scope of services a provider can perform and eliminate unrealistic lines of service. Volume is concentrated by medical condition and moving non-severe cases out of heavily resourced facilities. Integrating care in this manner across the network of facilities and incorporating community resources adds value for patients, providers and improves the whole structure. Certain principles need to be adhered to while measuring the cost of care. Cost depends on the actual resources used in delivering care, which includes time devoted, the capacity cost of each resource and support costs required. The total cost incurred should be for the full cycle of care of the patient and not for line items, departments or services. Community providers should affiliate with a higher tier of providers to assist in complex conditions and redistribution of patients depending on the severity of the condition. Works Cited Bernstein, L. "Once again, U.S. has most expensive, least effective health care system in survey." Washingtonpost (2014). Retrieved from https://www.washingtonpost.com/news/to-your-health/wp/2014/06/16/once-again-u-s-has-most-expensive-least-effective-health-care-system-in-survey/ "Health Care Facts: Why We Need Health Care Reform." ObamaCareFacts (n.d.) Retrieved from http://obamacarefacts.com/healthcare-facts/ Ridic, G., Gleason, S., Ridic., O. "Comparisons of Health Care Systems in the United States, Germany and Canada." Mater Sociomed 2012; 24(2): 112–120 "Patients' Rights." JetWriters (n.d.) Retrieved from http://jetwriters.com/euthanasia-essay/ Porter, Michael E., and Thomas H. Lee. "The strategy that will fix health care." Harv Bus Rev 91.12 (2013): 24. Also, in future when I am writing my thesis and stuff should I have someone proofread it? Or since the committee knows that my English isn't perfect, they may not pay too much attention to it but concentrate more on the actual research?
  24. I have just started to practice analytical writing. This one is almost my first argument writing under time constrain. Please help me improve my writing by providing feedback. I dont mind negative feedbacks because they can even more direct you towards improvement. Also, I would appreciate ratings out of 6. Please do not hesitate to express your true opinions. Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast; since that time, its share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly. Given WCQP's recent success with call-in advice programming, and citing a nationwide survey indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs, the station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs in an attempt to gain a larger audience share in its listening area. The author hastily concludes that radio station KICK in Medway should also include more call-in advice programs like radio station WCQP in Rockville: in an attempt to gain a larger audience share in its listening area. He draws this conclusion based on the analogy that WCQP was able, in two years, to increase significantly, its share of the radio audience in the Rockville. This argument is entirely disagreeable as it is rife with fallacies. At the first glance, the recommendation of the Manager of KICK seems cogent but with a meticulous analysis, it’s validity undermines. Firstly, the manager has not studied about what else are the factors of increase of share of WCQP except the in-call advice program. There might be lots of other interesting programs available for all the age-groups in WCQP which might be the core reason of its popularity. So, only introducing in-call program does not guarantee the KICK, it’s increase in share. Secondly, the manager has no statistical or numerical data about the popularity of other radio stations on which he is based to draw his conclusion. He uses ambiguous terms like nationwide and many which I think should be clear – which specific places, respective population and respective popularity of the stations. Then, on the basis of which he could formulate plans. Just because other stations in the nation in the other places became successful because of introduction of call-in programs does not mean that it will be fruitful for the KICK as it listeners can have different taste. Finally, the manager assumes that no promotion campaign was done by WCQP and therefore, KICK also does not need to do one. Perhaps, more than call-in program had played role in increasing share of WCQP, the advertisement played greater role. In a nutshell, he needs to study about what other factors were the reason for increasing share of WCQP, should draw his conclusion on the basis of statistical data about population and popularity and also must research on others things like how advertisement can play role or if advertisement is indispensable for the goal. Therefore, for this argument to be true or unanimous, the manager should gather sufficient evidences from exhaustive research and adopt apt assumptions.
  25. I'll be applying to clinical psychology programs for a second time, but not until next fall. This year, I'll be a first year M.S. student studying experimental psychology at a state university in WI. Looking to get some input on my chances/what I should be improving on for next year's application cycle. I graduated in May '16 with my B.S. in Psychology and a minor in Neuroscience. Overall GPA of 3.44 (which I know isn't very good), however my psych and neuro GPA's are both higher than my cumulative. Hoping to have a relatively high Masters GPA to help offset undergrad gpa. Research experience: Obviously quite a bit, as that is what my masters will be in. 3+ years by time of graduation, in multiple labs (counseling psych, health psych, psychology of sexuality labs), also including a Master's Thesis. Two years experience as the Project Manager of the UW System Counseling Impact Project, which examines the utilization and effectiveness of UW counseling centers at 17 universities. Most of my presentations/pubs are in counseling and sexuality research. Presentations: Currently, I have 6 from this past year at various state, regional, and national conferences/convention Pubs: 3 in preparation, 1 will be submitted in the next month, 1 other should be accepted for publication prior to applying, the last may not be ready by my next application cycle. Internships: one in an outpatient mental health facility, another in a domestic violence program (both for 8 months each) Recommendations: 1 over the top outstanding, 1 pretty great, and my last will probably come from my thesis advisor. Other Info: I can demonstrate an ability to secure funding, as I have received research grants in the past. Also feel OK about my GRE scores, 80% Verbal, 65% Q, 81% AW, but I'm considering studying this year and retaking them next summer before applying again. What do you all feel I should focus my little free time on improving before next fall? Any feedback is so appreciated! and good luck to everyone applying!
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