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  1. jcoleiscooliguess

    Issue task attempt 1

    Hey all! I wanted to know if anyone would be willing to go over my essay for the GRE. Thank you so much for your time! Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. The argument above assumes that because a Palean basket was found a great distance from Palea past a major river, Palean baskets are not unique to Palean culture. The argument fails in its assumptions and lack of explanation for it to be considered. The author in the beginning assumes that the Paleans did not make any boats during the time and thus couldn’t through the river. It could very well be in the next couple of years on the site that the author begins to find remnants of rafts made by the Paleans. The absence of evidence is not the evidence of absence. The way the author could strengthen the argument would be to find evidence that indicates that the Paleans did not make boats. Even if the river was an unconquerable barrier, it doesn’t mean that they were isolated as well. They could have interacted with other cultures, who then appropriated the ideas of the Palean people. Estimation of date of creation between the discovered basket and other baskets is crucial. The argument also uses vague language to describe the environment as well as the discovery. It is unclear the depth and breadth of the Brim River; only that’s “deep and broad.” It would also weaken this argument if it was discovered that the Palean people were strong swimmers and could overcome this barrier. It’s also unclear what the distinctive pattern gives artifacts a Palean distinction. If the argument went into further detail, it would most likely be strengthened. Nevertheless, we also run into the meaning of immediate vicinity. There is no explanation to the immediate vicinity, which could extend as far as 3 miles or be right under their feet. All in all, the author lacks a lot of detail in the argument to make the argument believable. Other evidence may need to be analyzed before it is believable.
  2. Hello, may I have some help with having my practice essays reviewed? Thank you for your availability and help. ISSUE People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Human beings are very complex creatures, reacting and responding in a myriad of ways to our surroundings, thoughts, emotions, and others. Although, humans have an astounding ability to adapt, physically, emotionally and mentally. This allows humans to behave in such a manner that is not entirely subject to forces not of their own making. Firstly, there is a mind-bending lens called perspective. Perspective is one of the abstract advantages that humans over any other species. One of the characteristics about perspective that allows us to overcome external forces is that it is largely conceived in the mind. The things that are seen are not always as they wholly are. If all behavioral judgement is founded on what people see, we miss the profound elements of the human experience. Much of the potency that external forces carry, find their strength in the human mind. For instance, if I had a negative experience with dogs all throughout my childhood, I could grow up thinking all dogs are vicious – unless I came to understand that dogs are used to aid the blind. Furthermore, this point gives credence to the power of choice. Attitude, a sister of behavior, is a choice. Because of this, people have another arm to battle external forces with. The power to choose behavior is what drives the focus of military officials and soldiers through moments of extreme distress, and fuels their humility in serving their beloved country when these soldiers are viewed as heroes. The human mind is a powerful component of human being that can channel external forces for its own advantage. Although, this is not to say that environments and upbringing do not play some role in a person’s behavior. A child may very well take on the behavior of a father or mother in moments of much stress or joy. These complex, influential relationships in the home are the birthplace of phrases like “a chip off of the old block”. The yet-present weakness of this position although is that the child may move to a college education later on in life and adopt many different habits and perspectives. The issue at hand remains that our behavior does not have to largely be determined by forces not of our own making. While external forces are a part of the human experience, our brains are constantly responding to them, the human’s behavior does not have to be subject to them because of the power of perspective and choice. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ARGUMENT The following appeared in a memo from a budget planner for the city of Grandview. "Our citizens are well aware of the fact that while the Grandview Symphony Orchestra was struggling to succeed, our city government promised annual funding to help support its programs. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent, and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. The symphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year. Such developments indicate that the symphony can now succeed without funding from city government and we can eliminate that expense from next year's budget. Therefore, we recommend that the city of Grandview eliminate its funding for the Grandview Symphony from next year's budget. By doing so, we can prevent a city budget deficit without threatening the success of the symphony." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. The recommendation presented in the budget planner for the City of Grandview possesses some assumptions that deem it questionable. To begin with, there is a claim made that the citizens are aware of the want the Grandview Symphony Orchestra is suffering in its success. These terms of success are not defined. What does make for a successful Grandview Symphony Orchestra? Is there a lack of ticket sales? Involvement? Promotion? These are vital questions to ask, in order to determine what the city deems as a successful Orchestra. The orchestra may be very popular amongst student musicians, but have its position in a conference center next to a basketball arena. Likewise, the recommendation assumes that having attendance doubled at the concerts-in-the-park series, is a weighty factor for an increase in popularity. This too, can be considered fallacious because the higher attendance may have been due to the fact that the concert was providing free food. Many of the local students may have joined the orchestra as well. It is difficult to justly conclude that there would be a rise in lasting popularity for the orchestra. Lastly, to remove government spending because of an influx in private contributions is a weak force in the argument as well. In the last year, private contributions may be defined as the soup can-sized container next to the ticket window. In a whole year, contributions could barely exceed $200. If the government provided the orchestra with $20,000 while the private contributions hit a ceiling of $600, a 200% increase. Then, this would still only leave a proportion of 100:3, the government being a very vital contributor over the private contributions. The orchestra may very well need to raise the prices of their tickets, to hold larger events and have more support. While the recommendation does strive to present some knowledge to support it’s argument, the judgment is not wise. There are assumptions made out of ambiguity in the citizen’s awareness, private contributions, and doubled attendance at the concert.
  3. Tamim Ahmed

    GRE Issue Sample

    Hello everyone, I am appearing GRE exam very soon. I am very much concerned about the AWA section. I attended the GRE exam previously and got 3.0 on the AWA. Here I am posting a sample issue which I wrote. It would be very helpful if someone please review the issue. The issue is given below: Issue: Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before; it means putting old ideas together in new ways. Response: Originality has different meaning for everyone. It is the basis for many inventions. But inventions does not necessarily means something new, old ideas can also modified for the better usage of the humanity. In the 19th century, the innovation of automobiles brings profound impact on the life of the people. Moreover, the wireless communication, which was once inconceivable in the beginning of the last century, is now available in almost everywhere in the world. Similarly, the invention of computer brings a revolution in the world. Each of these ideas were quite unimaginable few centuries ago. The statement mentions about originality by using the old ideas in a modified way among the people. As the world is developing day by day, humans choice of products is changing rapidly. Nowadays, in case of automobiles, one checks the best speed and cost for their convenience. For communicating, most of the cellphone companies tries to add features like high resolution camera, size and compatibility of the device. Most companies in Silicon Valleys like Apple, Microsoft etc. are in huge competition to add customer interests in their products. However, when the concept of wireless communication was first proposed, surely nobody thought smart phones would be available like nowadays. At the initial stage of the wireless communication, the telephone was very rare and would take huge costs for transferring information to the other end. But now smart phones are available in almost every person in the world. In the purpose of getting massive revenues, most companies are trying to add new features like security, which is a must for every smart phone users for the preservation of their personal information and compatibily, which makes market position of a company stronger than other competitors. The quantum theory is a good example of originality depending on the old and proven facts. The basic of quantum mechanics has restored the old and valuable ideas of Newton's mechanics. However, one has to think about old ideas creatively. In the purpose of making the better world, sometimes the improvement of old ideas, which was once revolutionary makes the life of the people easier and merely connects the world in a fast way. One has to go through established ideas to find drawbacks and by improving them old ideas can be represented in the best way. The value of old ideas merely cannot be ignored. Therefore, originality does not have to be always something which was never thought before. In fact, one can look into the old ideas from a completely different angle. Originality can stretched human knowledge, which gives new inventions. Every person has the independence to take the ideas from the nature. Thus, one can take inspiration from the old work but after giving respect to the person behind the old ideas.
  4. PsychologySam

    Grade Issue Task Essay Exchange

    Hello, I am willing to grade other people's essays if someone could grade mine (or just simple feedback) using the ETS Grading Rubric. Please respond with feedback for my essay and your essay if interested. Thank you! Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position. Educational institutions uphold the responsibility of manifesting student success. However, dissuading students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed does not guarantee success in other fields. Certain fields of study require a long-term pursuit of work ethic and perseverance before success if manifested, particularly the arts. Celebrity actor Morgan Freeman did not have his big break until he was significantly older than the status quo youthful age of obtaining fame. There are limited predictive measurements that can determine a students’ success. While grades may provide a narrow glimpse of student strengths and weaknesses, successful high school drop-outs including Mark Zuckerberg, CEO of Facebook, and Bill Gates, CEO of Microsoft, have disproven traditional education as a preemptive necessity for success. Students also may not experience failure, moments of which are commonly found in the narrative of successful people. Research on social-emotional learning has increasingly found soft skills including grit and perseverance increase the likelihood of high school graduation by 37%. Educational institutions may consider manifesting such skills rather than focusing on specific fields. However, dissuading students from pursuing fields of study could potentially increase the likelihood of identifying skills and talents worth tapping into given the evaluation and development of psychological, emotional, and intelligence testing, leading the way for a successful career. Schools, universities, and other learning centers are responsible for manifesting student success using methods that predict achievements of which remain unclear.
  5. The two views stated has been debated from a long time. Though some believes that corporations should focus on the main purpose of their existence, while other believes that they should not only have economic impact but also social impact on populace. Nonetheless, the company have responsibilities towards the company and the profit they are determined to concoct. Yet the steadfast toward the society and environment cannot be neglected. More than 60% people earn their income from corporate sector, if such abound people are only focused on gaining money then the wellbeing of society and environment will be difficult to maintain. Little effects from corporations can lead to a drastic change in the environment and society. Let exemplify, if suppose textile companies, working according to the law, drain out dirty water into the river. They are having huge profit but they are damaging the environment. If a little effort of making sure that the river is cleaned from time to time, can make remarkable difference. Corporation have responsibility to make sure that the society that they are working in is not harmed in any way. This can lead to not only adverse effects on the people around them but also the people working for the corporation. Furthermore, most of the people result in having mental issue after having working only for the money. Being social, doing something good for the society increase the moral of the people working in the company. They have a relaxation which helps in better performance of people. Many corporations like google, Facebook, dell etc. have taken initiative to work towards the society and environment by launching programs where people donate their clothes for the need ones, cleaning campaigns to work on the nearby peoples to have a clean environment to work in. To extrapolate, corporation being an integral part of the society have a responsibility to make environment and society a better place to work.
  6. The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position. Positive and negative aspects are two sides of coin. It is never a good practice to focus on one side and neglect the other sides. Teaching is the basic fundamental of our life. Negligence is the foundation of the life’s study cannot be accepted. As a result, it is never a best way to teach by praising for positive actions and ignoring the negative ones. Teaching, means to learn from our actions and we cannot ignore the actions which are not right as there are the most imperative learning of our life. Let’s exemplify, if you have cooked a dish which is cooked perfectly but the salt is in excess. You can never ignore the fact that the next time you have to decrease the quantity of salt. Ignorance is bliss. Learning from the mistakes make a recipe perfect. Negative result are as integral as the positive result to learn for the future. As praise for the good indeed motivates us but only praise won’t push the person to learn from it. Before the invention of the blub, Thomas Edison failed thousands of times. If he had ignored the failure and would have settled with a short achievement, we would never have lights in our home. Furthermore, he said the failure taught him 3000 things that cannot be used in the light bulb. As a result learning from the hard way is the best way. Teaching is the most pristine and difficult jobs of all. As we don’t have to make the person learn it but remember it for rest of the life and sometimes abrasive punishment teaches us the most imperative lesson of the life. The great warrior always learnt from the failure and from the deaths of their dear one, the lessons of their life. Teaching can never ignore any side of the result whether positive or negative. The best way to teach is to go hand in hand with praising for good actions and learning from the negative ones. Neither of the two aspects can be ignored in life. The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist. “Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.” Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the assumption that time doesn’t play any role the research. Furthermore, it is also considered that the rearing and talking about parents is equivalent. Thus making the weak argument that Tertian village culture as well as the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid. The argument is mainly invalid owing to the reason that it doesn’t considered the fact that Dr. Field’s research was carried out twenty years ago. As the time changes the tradition also changes in the villages. The children who were observed by Dr Field are now adults and hence may be they were reared by the whole village but as the two decades have passed the parents are more protective towards the children and therefore tertian village culture is obsoleted. Dr Karp should have also interviewed the adults who were children at the time Dr Field study was executed. Though this would have given a much strong reason to extrapolate that the Tertain village culture was invalid yet this argument this fails to validate that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid. The argument also fails to give strong evidence that the children of Tertain are not reared by the whole village. The argument that the talk more about their biological parents only give any strong proof that they are reared by their biological parents. May be the children are not good in communicating or maybe they are repeating the things that the children of the other islands are answering. This can also be considered that they are reared by the whole village but they have more affection towards their parents. As a result, we can say that besides interviewing the children, observing the children’s lifestyle is an integral aspect to validate that Tertain village culture is not practiced. Therefore concluding that interview based approach is better approach that observation centered is inaccurate. As the argument has left many unanswered question as well as many factors has been ignored in the argument. Thus it fails to make convincing case that interview based approach is much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions.
  7. Argument Q. Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. A. The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that Palean baskets were imported from Lithos, an ancient village situated across the river and not the other way around. The argument is based on the assumption that since palean boats have not been found, the people from lithos might have exported it using their boats. The argument fails to take into consideration that there is a consummate chance that the people from lithos might have used the boats to import it to their city.Had the argument provided the information of the place where palean baskets first found, then it would have strengthened the argument. Again, the argument states that since both the ancient cities are separated by river, wide and deep, it is assumed that lithos people had boats. Since, there is no mention of boats found in lithos, there might be a tertiary village;the actual source of palean baskets; connected to both the villages. If this is true, it would weaken the argument to a greater extent. Because the argument makes unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Issue Writing Q.To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. A.In order to understand the major characteristics of a society, one must study the major bucolic cities where the roots of art and culture are deep. The people in the major cities, with parochial mindset, have easily amenable characteristics which are inspired by the characteristics trending in other foreign places. The pure rustic characteristics are made obscure in the eyes of younger generations living in the major cities. Some part of the characteristics may be derived from the major cities, but the remaining part is a derivation of the culture adopted in the village areas. Since cities are made from development of villages, to know the important characteristics, one must study the latter part.
  8. Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position. For communities with a decent culture and a viable system, scandals may give useful results to fix the corrupted organisms in the system by appeasing the community about that specific corruptions. Hence, in theory the useful way of the scandals cannot be rejected, but in contrast of the assumption of living in non-aberrant societies, in reality it is very hard to find even one. Most people in modern societies live in a wasteful life where they do not grow any self-ability anda are hungry for any type of success. Therefore, the people you see everyday have a great chance of being a vicious zealot. After giving their hearts for some leader or some political party or some similar aspect of the society, there is no way of convincing him that the thing or person that he believes is may be a part of the scandal. To give an illustration, the president of Turkey, Erdoğan, actually persuaded his poor fanatics to go outside and fight against the soldiers with tanks while there was a coup attempt against him. Thus, I cannot see anyway that these people will turn their back to Erdoğan after a scandal. Actually, there were accusations against him and his colleagues from his party about stealing money. The result was a more powerful support for Erdoğan. Still, there may be some disagreements about that example by claiming that Erdoğan is an exception, or not every society is as corrupted as Turkish community. Even though we are hearing resignations after scandals, especially from Asian countries, with the technological revolution coming, the number of people who are tend to be fanatics will rise with the decline in the opportunity of finding jobs. Even in US, the greatest economy of our World and the land of freedom, it is possible to see people who are yelling ‘Heil Trump!’, a reference to a Nazi Slogan. Summarizing, as time moves on and the populations becomes greater, the number of fanatics and radicals will rise too which will lead to people who are rejecting, closing their eyes to the scandals related to their beloved leader or organization. In the past, scandals may give the societies the opportunity to fix the problems, but in our times it will lead to more polarized people who hate each other because they do not like each others’ radical and fanatic attitude.
  9. All college and university students would benefit from spending at least one semester studying in a foreign country.” Education is an important part of our life. Education means gaining knowledge from experience. Learning everyday chores, learning how to keep a pet or even learning how to knit a sweater. These aren’t things you learn in schools/colleges. These are lessons that life and experience teach us .Experience teaches us more about this world than any physics, math or biology book can. Students who study abroad are likely to be more independent. The students will grow up to be well rounded and confident people. They attain leadership qualities and learn how to live a life in every situation.You are unlikely to learn how to take care of the pet you just adopted at college. Taking care of a pet helps one achieve a sense of responsibility. Traveling in itself is a big confidence booster. One learns how to deal with people from around the world. If the student wants he can learn the language of the country he is sent to. Any person who is pushed out of their comfort zone at this age will be a little uncomfortable initially, but will learn to adjust. Living alone in a foreign country will teach the students how to fend for themselves. They will learn to live in this big world on their own. Living away from your home, family and friends helps you build character. The student will always be alert of his surroundings since he is the only person he can rely on. If a student from America studies in Pakistan then he will be tasting a lot of spicy food. The cuisine is completely different from a typical American meal. He will see new values and traditions. The student can learn the national language spoken throughout the country (urdu). The culture is extremely different. The student will learn about the traditional dress of the country; the way wedding festivities take place. The student will learn to venerate the religion and culture of the people living there. They will learn how life is led in Pakistan. They will adapt to living a comfortable life in a third world country. On the contrary, sending every student will be cost effective. In an ideal world it would seem perfect but we don’t live in an ideal world. Some people might have trouble adjusting to the new culture. Some might not be aware of the societal norms such as in Pakistan a boy and girl never hug when they meet. They just shake hands. But that isn’t something one cannot get used to. There is also a language barrier initially, which may fade away once the person learns at least the necessary words spoken in the country. Sending students to foreign countries is for the benefit of every student. They learn so much more than they learn in their own protected environment. Since this is the question of our coming generation, why not add tolerance and patient to their list of qualities by sending them to see the different cultures in the world? Letting them see the world for what it actually is than what it is on tv. When it comes to traveling and exploring, there is no dearth of learning.
  10. themacattack

    GRE Practice Essays

    Hi! I'm new to the GradCafe and I'm not sure if this is where I should post this, but I thought I'd give it a shot. I'm currently studying for the GRE (taking it Aug 24th), and I wrote my first practice Issue and Argument Essays. I'm looking for someone to go over, critique, and score them. They are very rough, as this was my first go at it. I stuck to the 30 minute time limit. I would appreciate any feedback! Thank you! Mac Argument 1.docx Issue 1.docx
  11. priyankarythem3

    Please GRADE my ISSUE ESSAY

    Question: The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Answer: Culture is term that is representative of an entire society as a whole comprising of children,aged and the working class people and not just the just the youth. To analyze the culture,just focusing on the youth is quite likely to bear false results. An entire society is represented by the culture of a place. It is quite unfair to the other members of the society that is not the youth to not be part of the analysis being done on the contemporary culture.If a place 'Suwon' has a trend that developed just over a few recent years where people after their retirement prefer to stay in the cities itself rather than going to countryside,the above statement would fail in that case. Or if the high schools in Suwon taught the its students the laws of Physics by experimenting in the laboratories and not just on paper. Meanwhile,the culture of a place is also represented by its who are not so wealthy to follow what seems quirky.The middle-class people come up with their own version of trends that give the same output with a pocket-friendly budget. Ultimately,there is a class of people who do not easily adapt to the on-going trend.In fact,they come up with their own personal opinions and derivatives of the on-going contemporaries. As youth of a society has a fresh and open mindset,it is easier for them to pick up a particular tendency,follow each other and ultimately make it a trend. So the most popular trend of a culture may be existing in the youth. A large part of the society is not covered when just the youth is kept in focus to analyze the contemporary trend. It may be possible that the results of the analysis may miss most definitive part of a society's culture.
  12. priyankarythem3

    Please GRADE my ISSUE ESSAY

    Question: The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Answer: Culture is term that is representative of an entire society as a whole comprising of children,aged and the working class people and not just the just the youth. To analyze the culture,just focusing on the youth is quite likely to bear false results. An entire society is represented by the culture of a place. It is quite unfair to the other members of the society that is not the youth to not be part of the analysis being done on the contemporary culture.If a place 'Suwon' has a trend that developed just over a few recent years where people after their retirement prefer to stay in the cities itself rather than going to countryside,the above statement would fail in that case. Or if the high schools in Suwon taught the its students the laws of Physics by experimenting in the laboratories and not just on paper. Meanwhile,the culture of a place is also represented by its who are not so wealthy to follow what seems quirky.The middle-class people come up with their own version of trends that give the same output with a pocket-friendly budget. Ultimately,there is a class of people who do not easily adapt to the on-going trend.In fact,they come up with their own personal opinions and derivatives of the on-going contemporaries. As youth of a society has a fresh and open mindset,it is easier for them to pick up a particular tendency,follow each other and ultimately make it a trend. So the most popular trend of a culture may be existing in the youth. A large part of the society is not covered when just the youth is kept in focus to analyze the contemporary trend. It may be possible that the results of the analysis may miss most definitive part of a society's culture.
  13. Hello everyone, I hope all is well. I was wondering if you guys please grade both my GRE AWA essays. I would like an expert to take a look at them for me, someone who has a very good knowledge of GRE testing. I would also like your constructive feedback. It will be helpful. I have attached the essays to this post. They are in the uploaded file. Thank you! Argument Task Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. The following passage contains a weaken argument that is based off of assumptions of a village. These are the reason I believe the argument is incoherent. The archeologists were exclusively studying Palea, which has ancient baskets. But they found the baskets in Lithos, so they conclude those baskets are not Palean. Plus there were no boats in Paelea. The argument is faulty. There could be interminable possibilities why both villages have similar archaeological artifacts. I wonder if archaeologists consider that maybe the people of Lithos and Palea are from the same culture or from the same ethnic group. People from similar cultures tend to have similar ways of life, even from a geographical distance. The river might have divided the groups, but it may not have divided their similarities. Archaeologists claim that there are no boats present in Palea but at the same time the Brim River is present. It is possible that migration took place among the villages. The river boating used to be one of the main transportation in early human history. It is likely that the village dwellers migrated upstream or down stream, left their belongings and resettled to different areas. If two villages are present across from each other and there is a river between the two, then river boating must have taken place. The archeologists did not mention any boats present in the village of Lithos. They might want to consider that the villagers of Palea may have migrated to the village of Lithos and took their belongings along. The passage states that Palea was found before Lithos. I wonder in which time period were the villages established. The question is whether one of them is more ancient than the other. There is no reservation in my mind that during the prehistoric times, there were geographic alterations. Sometimes geographical changes do have an impact on the lifestyle of early human beings. The woven baskets represent the lifestyles of the people of Palea and the people of Lithos. Since the river is present, I would not disregard the possibility that flooding took place between the two locations. The following passage is incoherent because it fails to analyze the evidence and the setting revolving the prehistoric village of Palea. The dots do not seem to be connected which makes the argument faulty. Issue Task To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. An individual must study the foundations of all types of societies in order to understand the characteristics of a society. Only evaluating major cities will give the individual a parochial view of society. To gauge the characteristics of society, an individual must study the foundation of civilizations. The history of civilizations paved a way for the many characteristics of societies, which includes law, science, arts and a variety of more. Societies were based off of how human beings should supposedly function in the natural world. A good paradigm would be the roles between men and women. The roles of women and men became distinguishable since the dawn of men. In most countries, men are viewed as the breadwinners and women are viewed as the caretakers. Even though the roles have become more blurred due to the promotion of equal rights for both sexes, this distinction is reflected across the globe. This illustration demonstrates that societies across the globe are intertwined when it comes to the roles of both sexes. To have a common idea of the roles of men and women in the world, an individual must include all the parts of the world to get a good inkling of where this social construct was derived from. Studying major cities only will give the individual a one-sided story. Exclusively studying major cities will give the individual a narrow-scope of the characteristics of a society. Major cities that have an urban setting such as London and New York have a more diverse population where anything is plausible. They are both the melting pot of different cultures, ethnicities and backgrounds. The characteristics of each group within the city are variable and are not consistent with one another. If an individual is going to exclusively study major cities, then that individual is using the characteristics of a major city to define every society in this world, which I believe is impossible. The characteristics of one location should not mirror the characteristics of all locations across the globe. The characteristic of a major city in California does not mirror the characteristics of a village in Papua New Guinea. I would understand why a person would want to solely study a major city. Major cities that have an urban setting are often more dynamic and more enhanced because they have a higher population density. Major cities that are well known tend to have a lot of history. Their history is what shaped them up to this day. Their evolution to become major cities does give an individual us an insight on how societies developed over time and it gives us an insight on what characteristics helped those societies to become more prosperous. Plus, studying cities or areas across the globe can be a challenge. I believe in order to study the characteristics of a society an individual must acknowledge the foundation of civilization. I believe the characteristics were part of that foundation and have reflected the prosperity and development of a society.
  14. Gabriela Nolivos

    Help with scoring AW essays for the GRE

    Hey guys I really need your help indicating me what score should my essays receive. I need an indicator to see how is mi development in his section. Thanks a lot! Argument task Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method. Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. The paragraph above is flawed for numerous reasons and some additional information is required if the conclusions of dr Karl are considered valid. The questions which could be elaborated in order to validate the claims of dr Karp vary from contrasting the situation and costumes of tertia island inhabitants and ways of raising their children 20 years ago and the changes made in that area. The scope of the investigation should also be asked and the population included in the method used by dr karp for his study. A question that could be asked in order to determine the Veracity of dr karp affirmation about dr field investigation is which changes have occurred during the last twenty years in tertia island. Analyzing the situation or drastic changes in lifestyle could explain why nowadays dr karp found a different way of rising children. A lot of events could have happened during that period so to confirm or reject dr karp claim it would be necessary to ask to a representative a mount of tertia inhabitants what have happened during those 20 years and which events could have modified the rearing practices of their infants. Another questionable point of dr karp conclusions that pretend to invalidate dr field results is the place where the new studies were developed. In the study carried out by the first investigator only the island of tertia is mentioned but in the description of the second study carried out by dr kArp it mentions that he visited and studied the group of island that includes the island of tertia. That difference could certainly invalidate the conclusion of dr karp because the two studies were not carried out to population of the same place because in the second one more islands were studied and it is not determined in the study which percent of the interviews were carried out in the specific island of Tertia so the representation of the results found in this place is imponderable. The third important question to make is to determine which was the population included in the method developed by dr karp. As the paragraph indicates he visited various islands and tertia was one of them but it doesn't indicate if the research was focused on tertia island or in any other island, it also lacks of precision because it doesn't indicate what percentage of the population was interviewed in order to make conclusions, it neither indicates which were the characteristics of the population interviewed so information about this study is vague and can not be considered reliable. Referring to the first study it doesn't mention the duration of the observation or which variables were considered in the study made. So to prove the affirmation of dr karp it would be necessary to ask him which was the method used to determine the population of study and the sample and how can he correlate it to the population observed by dr field. Because the argument of dr karp lacks of validity the three questions mentioned above which are related with changes in time, place where the studies were developed and sample considered in the study are necessary and could certainly evaluate the relevance of his affirmation.
  15. bh_alpana

    GRE Writing Task

    ARGUMENT The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette. "On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. Reducing the number of mopeds in Balmer island won’t decrease number of accidents involving pedestrians and mopeds because it is not clear what were the primary reasons for accidents in Balmer Island. A number of reasons vary the number and type of accident such as road conditions, time of day, year, driving under influence, etc. The argument compares accidents in Balmer Island to that of accidents in Seaville island last year. The argument fails to substantiate this data with population in each town and residents in the city. We don’t know if there was similar population increase in Seaville, or mopeds are the preferred means of transportation in Seaville. Thus, what worked in Seaville doesn’t necessarily work for Balmer Island. The argument recommends limiting the moped rental by half in Balmer Island. However, we don’t have enough data to support how many accidents occurred involving mopeds and pedestrians in the overall accident statistics of Seaville. It is possible that most residents relied on cars and there were few pedestrian areas. If the argument had stated the population in Seaville, popular choice of vehicle, etc. then we could compare Seaville to Balmer Island. The argument fails to provide that information. It is also not clear what time the accidents were occurring in Balmer Island. Most of the statistics might account for accidents in the night due to poor vision, condition of roads or if the car drivers were driving under influence. In such cases, it is less likely that pedestrians or mopeds for that matter were involved in the accidents. In lack of supporting data, the argument is invalid. Thus, it cannot be estimated that accidents will reduce by half in Balmer Island by reducing the number of mopeds by half. It cannot be assumed that what worked for Seaville will work for Balmer Island because of difference in residents, their choice of commute and time of accidents. ISSUE Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain. Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position. Nations should definitely pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state because these wilderness are home to indigenous flora and fauna, and bases for natural resources vital for survival such as water and air. Preservation of wilderness is also gaining global attention and this will help countries attend necessary attention. The world is urbanizing at a fast pace and green belts are quickly converting to concrete jungles. Wilderness areas should be preserved so that urbanizing them doesn’t endanger existence of animals and birds. Several species of animals and birds have become extinct and a few are on the verge of extinction. This is a potential threat to natural ecosystem. The habitation of plants and animals should prolong to conserve animals and plants. Growing conversion of wilderness is also contributing to global warming. Preserving and promoting wilderness, apart from housing indigenous birds and animals, also maintains the microclimate. The rapid change in microclimate pose threat for disasters such as flooding during monsoon, landslides, wildfires, rise in local temperature, etc. These disasters are costly, in terms of lives and resources. Therefore, preservation of wilderness help maintain the local temperature and contribute in control of flooding and landslides. At present, all the countries in the world are focusing their economic activities on controlling global warming, reduction of carbon production etc. Therefore, all the countries are joining their hands together to promote wilderness and establish protected zones. Many countries have gained global attention due to diversity attained by preservation of wilderness. This also increases recreational and research-focused tourism in particular places. Therefore, preservation of wilderness also contributed to economic opportunities through tourism. Converting wilderness for economic gain might be short term, however, this depletes the sources of water and threat existence of indigenous flora and fauna. If wilderness is preserved, it will benefit economically via tourism.
  16. kez.ewuraadjoa

    GRE AWA Writing

    Hello everyone, I hope all is well. I was wondering if you guys please grade both my GRE AWA essays. I would like an expert to take a look at them for me, someone who has a very good knowledge of GRE testing. I would also like your constructive feedback. It will be helpful. I have attached the essays to this post. They are in the uploaded file. Thank you! GRE - AWA Tasks June 5, 2017.docx
  17. I completed these timed essays as practice and would love some feedback! I've never take the GRE before and am open to any advice. I know that my sentence maturity could improve and if I had more time I would have definitely worked more on that. GRE ARGUMENT TASK.docx GRE ISSUE TASK.docx
  18. I have taken the GRE once before, and am now studying for my second try. I have written my first practice Issue and Argument Task essays and am looking for an expert to critique my work. If you are familiar with the Official Guide assessment criteria, please also include your estimated holistic score for each. Thank you! W1D6 Issue Task.docx W1D6 Argument Task.docx
  19. zhichaolitju

    GRE Issue review for rookies

    Hi, Guys Please help me review this issue. Any feedback is more than welcome. Thanks Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Long-term goal, though provide overall roadmap and instruction, most often will be confront with certain issues like how to setup the ultimate goal and what is the step required to achieve them. Short term fame and recognition, however, is more easy to grasp and since mostly people consider candidates’ qualification based on their previous achievements, higher recognition will benefit us with more approval and thus more opportunities. So young people--not saying wrong to maintain long-term goal if they know for sure what it is—needs to focus more on immediate fame and recognition. Immature and inexperienced, it is often overwhelming for young people to realize their goals and thus hard to setup comprehensive and applicable plan. On the other hand, seeking fame and recognition, even though sounds mundane, is clear in terms what need to be accomplished. During their path of achieving fame and recognition, they may potentially reshape their goals and detail plans. Also, people’s qualification being judged based on their past performance. Achieving fame and recognition, will leads to higher evaluations, and larger changes of success. For example, more than required number of students apply same grad school, and only those who have solid testing and researching background will be considered. Thus what we achieved before entering grad school, the academic recognition, is the determent factor for the success. As young people, it is not easy, and most of time not even realistic, to have a clear understanding of our life’s purpose, thus “long-term goal” may change based on our understanding of our strengthen and what society needs. With that much uncertainties, immediate fame and recognition, is a better way to start.
  20. Danyal Zafar

    Request for Review - GRE ISSUE

    Please be kind enough to rate and review my Issue response for GRE essay. Thank you :-) Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position. It is important to keep public attention on social problems to ensure the smooth functioning of a society. Two ways of focusing that attention are scandals and public debates by reformers and speakers. Scandals are usually discarded for dramatizing petty issues, however, therein lies the usefulness of scandals: Scandals capture the attention of the public on problems in such profound ways that may not be possible for most reformers or speakers. Often in public debates the discussions on problems only touch the tip of the iceberg. It may be that the intelligentsia is either not fully aware of the magnitude of the problem or, they do not delve into the details to maintain political correctness. Either way, the reformers and speakers fail to pique the public's interest. On the other hand, scandals have the potential to reveal the depth and the magnitude of the issue in one instant. For instance, the revelations by Edward Snowden regarding mass surveillance carried out by the National Security Agency led to a public outcry against the breach of privacy. Many social activists and critics had been pointing out this issue previously as well, but it never gained as much traction as it did after the Edward Snowden episode. Thus, scandals are useful in grabbing public attention in a way that the intelligentsia can not. In addition to revealing the true depth and magnitude of an issue, scandals can also bring to the fore issue that were not even the part of public debate. Issues such as pedophilia and rape, though prevalent in the society, are not discussed in most Muslim countries. Debate on such issues and their public acceptance is a taboo. In such circumstances reformers and speakers can not discuss these issues in public as the society refuses to lend an ear to them. However, if a scandal about these issues is reported in the media, the public will be to talk about such issues. Hence, scandals prove to be useful in bringing problems to the agenda of public debate. However, some problems are of a nature that can best be addressed by the relentless efforts of speakers and reformers. The Suffrage movement in the late 18th and early 19th century for women's right to vote is a quintessential example of a problem that was solved by persistent efforts of speakers and reformers. Figures such as Eliabeht Caddy Stanton and Alice Paul did not wait for a scandal to break out. They realized the problem, gathered mass support by organizing protests and writing literature, and eventually led to the passage of the 19 Amendment in the constitution of USA that allowed women the right to vote. To sum, scandals are useful, in majority instances at least, because they capture the focus the attention of public on problems in ways that most speakers and reformers may not be able to do.
  21. colourlesslight

    Would anyone like to grade my essays?

    Here are my two writing section samples. This is the first time I've tried a timed writing section. If you have a moment and would like to provide some feedback, I thank you in advance Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years. Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based. Oftentimes, our society is lead to believe that change always implies something good. However, change that occurs too often, and without direction, may lead to disasterous results. I argue that those in power, whether it be in business, education, politics or government, should not have to step down after five years. First of all, leadership does not always need to be renewed in order for an institution to be successful. Although the renewal of leadership may lead to some systematic changes that result in an overall positive outcome for an institution, oftentimes there is no method to prove that these results will occur. However, there is one conclusion that usually can be agreed upon: with new leadership comes new rules, or at least a slightly different ones than with the previous leader. New rules do not automatically entail a successful paradigm. The rules of the new leadership might lead a company, university, or whole country into complete chaos. Although changing the leadership might give a fresh start to an organization, choosing a new leader is not always the most reliable way to create positive change within a system. Secondly, a leader that is in power for longer than five years isn’t always past his or her prime. The current person of power might actually be in the process of instigating change within a system and that change would be stunted or even completely destroyed due to the new leadership. Having a policy which forces the leadership to change every five years would mean that each leader, no matter the situation, would have to fit their plan for a system into a mere five years; this is absurd. Understandably, five years is too short for many leaders, especially those who prove to be competent at their job. However, there are some cases in which having the leadership change every five years might prove effective. In the United States, the president changes every four years; this allows for other political parties and, perhaps, minority positions, to have a chance at a position of power, rather than having one ruling party. The same goes for some businesses: in growing fields, such as IT or any other technology-related area, there is always a massive growth rate. Having a veteren within a technology-related field wouldn’t be as useful as in other more stable categories, such as at a University. However, even in these fast-growing field cases, having a limit of five years seems too short – if a person of power is doing well in their position, they should have the ability to continue their leadership. Taken from the example given above – even the president of the United States is allowed a second term. In conclusion, I have aruged that those in a position of power – whether is be in business, education, politics, or government – should not have a five-year cap on their leadership. A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings. Firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations (such as the return of a parent after an absence). The study also found that during pregnancy, first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than did those who had had several offspring."" Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument. The argument that an experiment with eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual’s levels of stimulation is flawed for numerous reasons. First, the argument makes the assumption that rhesus monkeys and humans have almost identical physiologies. Also, the argument uses confusing language that could lead to equivocation of terms, as well as unreliable numbers. Finally, the argument assumes a causal relationship between cortisol and stimulation within the mother and the child, when we have little or no reason to believe this claim. The main problem with this experiment is the fact that humans and rhesus monkeys do not have identicial physiologies. Small physiological differences can take a huge toll on a body; cortisol, although present, might have a different effect on the human physiological system than on the monkeys. The argument mentions that there is a relationship between stimulating situations, which “primes the body for increased activity levels” but does not clarify if this also applies to the human body. If the argument were to include information on the effect of cortisol on the human body, the study would have a stronger argument but not quite solid since monkeys and humans are innately different. Another problem with the argument this study makes is about the vagueness of the language, as well as the statistics. The report of the study relies on the term “stimulating situations.” However, the study does not provide a through account of the meaning of the term. In such cases, if the definition were to be too broad (i.e. simulating situations could be seeing a new object, or watching the death of ones mother), then the results of the experiment would be much less significant. If the argument were to clarify narrow and precisify the unclear terms, then the thesis would be much better supported – perhaps a better comparison between the stimulation in the mother and child. As for the statistics, there is an issue with the number of participant monkeys – only 18! This small sample wouldn’t be representative of any results within scientific literature; furthermore, there were no statistics taken from humans. The argument would be stronger if the statistics were taken from a much larger sample group, as well as a human sample group. The last issue with this argument which I will address is related to the casual assumption between cortisol in mothers and children. Although the argument provides examples of when cortisol and stimulation are connected (i.e. an encounter with an unfamilar money; return of a parent) there isn’t a strong connection established between the levels of cortisol present within the mother and the effect on the infant, as the first-born. Perhaps the high levels of cortisol were not caused by the fact that the infant was first-born, but that the mother was experiencing a new situation for the first time. If the argument were to make clear that there are no other factors causing the change in cortisol, as well as some more experimental evidence which supports the relationship between cortisol present in the mother on the child, then the argument would be much stronger. In conclusion, the argument that an experiment with eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual’s levels of stimulation is flawed for numerous reasons, and should be investiaged further before making any strong claims.
  22. MindyKale

    GRE Issue Review

    This is my first attempting at writing GRE essays and I would appreciate it a lot if any person could critique them for me. In exchange, I could critique yours. Thanks a lot in advance. The Prompt : As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. ESSAY : Knowledge is power. As human beings-the only creatures on earth gifted with inquisition, it is our responsibility to utilize this gift to the fullest to acquire knowledge. The function of knowledge is both to understand things and improve things as they are today, and the process of acquiring it happens as we ask a lot of questions and search for answers. As children, we are all taught a set of rules and code of conduct by adults in our surroundings. We are naive observers of the universe around us and naturally inclined to ask questions when something fails our assumed reasoning or sparks our curiosity. Bill Waterson, the cartoonist responsible for Calvin and Hobbes often illustrated the inquisitive phenomenon of Calvin- A 6 year old who keeps asking his dad questions of various kinds--sometimes philosophical, sometimes scientific and some just related to the current state of the world under his observance. For examples “Why is he not allowed to drive a car?”. While he understands the answers which maybe factually inaccurate, He is never satisfied with them and is always introspecting, reading or probing for more information. Which illustrates that, our thirst for knowledge is unquenchable. Which illustrates that even when we do have answers, there is some unknown that allures us. Also, knowledge, in its broadest sense is infinite. There is no finite amount of knowledge which when learned and understood satisfies our curiosity. Knowledge is also, not merely a consumption tool, we create with knowledge. Ever since the dawn of time and early evolution, mankind sought to improve their quality of life and progress forward. We invented fire by rubbing flints together, made tools, invented cooking meat instead of raw consumption, the wheel instead of walking on foot and as of today, we are coming up with cars that drive themselves. This constant invention wouldn’t have been possible without some complexity and mystery that allures man to seek more. Sir Isaac Newton is another classic example that acquiring knowledge is a constant process, while he was intrigued by the apple falling down from the tree and invented gravity. He wasn’t satisfied with it as an end all be all for all natural phenomenon. He seeked to understand gravity with reference to other objects in the solar system, he invented his famous laws of motion and his scientific achievements led to various other inventions today which could only have been possible while trying to question and extend his line of work. Thus, seeking knowledge happens with the realization that there is more to learn and there is more than the known that requires our understanding. Great philosophers too, are a prime example of how knowledge becomes more mysterious and susceptible to questioning, inquisition and understanding, Acquiring knowledge is a constant process that humans undergo for self-improvement and improvement of the society. While there is something that defies our understanding or intuitive knowledge, we seek it--gather as many resources as possible to understand it, at which point it is our choice to probe further and find answers to other questions or be satisfied with our current understanding of the world.
  23. m21

    Issue Essay feedback

    Hello! I am taking the GRE in a month and I have taken a couple of practice tests now. I would really appreciate it if I can get feedback on this Issue Task essay I wrote for one of them. I'm not sure how this works in the forum but I'm happy to correct someone else's issue task to return the favor. Let me know if you want for me to correct yours as an exchange for some feedback on mine. - Michelle The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position. Teaching is a hard feat: as a teacher, you have to encourage positive behaviors and discourage negative behaviors, all while keeping your students motivated. Therefore, disregarding negative behaviors when teaching and just praising positive behaviors does not foster learning. Just praising positive behaviors should be avoided. Negative actions should be analyzed and talked though to make sure the student learns from their mistakes. A good example that shows the importance of correcting negative behaviors is studying for the GRE. My goal while studying was to learn all the topics the GRE was going to test me in and answer as many questions correctly. While doing practice questions, I kept track of the questions I had answered correctly and questions I had answered incorrectly. If I had just rewarded myself for the times I got questions right and ignored those which I answered incorrectly, I would have not made much progress. If I had not corrected the questions I got wrong, I would have kept on making the same mistakes when answering future questions that test me on similar topics and kept on getting the questions wrong. Therefore, it was essential for me to go back to the negative questions I answered ad see what flaws I had in my thought process for answering to get the questions right the next time. Take for example a child who is being taught good habits at home. The child is taught to put their dishes in the sink every time they are done eating. Every time the child remembers to put the dirty plates in the sink, the parents praise the child and the child learns to put the dishes in the sink after eating. Moreover, the parents want the child not to interrupt people when other people are not talking. Although the parents want to teach the child this, the parents ignore the faults of the child every time the child interrupts someone. This will probably make the child keep on interrupting people when the other person speaks because they are not being told not to do it. If the child was told by their parents to not interrupt someone when they are talking, the child would learn from their mistakes and get better at not interrupting people. This does not mean that praising good actions is detrimental to learning. Praising good actions reinforce on the person to keep on behaving the same way and therefore learn. If I had not rewarded myself when I got a section right in the GRE, I would have been burned out when studying. Rewarding myself every time I got a question right helped me be motivated in learning. If the parents of the child had not praised the child every time they put the dirty dishes on the sink, the child would have no motivation to learn this behavior. Rewarding positive actions is not enough to foster thorough learning and would not help people learn from their mistakes. Correcting negative behaviors when learning something is necessary to foster thorough learning. If only positive behaviors were praised, negative ones would keep on happening, and people would just keep on doing the positively reinforced ones and not the negative ones.Therefore, the best way to teach is to reinforce positive behaviors and correct negative behaviors.
  24. hopefulPA2B

    Please grade my new issue essay

    Taking the GRE is just a few days! I've been working really hard on the other sections, but am worrying a bit about the essays...Thanks in advance for looking at this,everything you need is below. Here is a scoring guide as well: https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/issue/scoring_guide The Issue: The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position. My response: In the before mentioned statement the author states that instilling a sense of cooperation, not competition, will better prepare the youth of a society for leadership roles. To the contrary, I myself agree that with a correct balance of the two qualities, competition will induce leadership for the next generation of leaders. First, one must recognize the fact that competition rears growth. This is what makes the capitalistic economy in America so great. For instance, businesses of all kinds are able to compete with each other to better appeal to their consumer. In order to maintain and increase productivity, they must continue trying and experimenting with the product so that consumer is more likely to buy from their company. This is advantageouss to the society, because -since these companies are allowed to compete- new and improved products are available to choose from. In addition, creativity will spark one's imagination to think critically and for oneself. If one is only taught to be exactly obedient in all things, then we could not grow as a society, thus hindering the creativity, as partly discussed in the above paragraph. In short, every member in the society would be nothing more than a robot, not able to think for themselves. At the same time, competition could easily be taken to the extreme. Someone that is too competitive can be a danger to society. For example, in presidential elections, some politicians will go as far as to lie and spread falsehoods about the opposing candidate in an effort to win the vote from the public. In this way, too much competition could damage a person's good caracter or create ill will for another person. One must remember to balance competition with a good dose of cooperation as to be fair to all parties in society. In the end, when preparing the next generation for taking on leadership roles in society, the older generation must not forget to teach friendly competition along with a fair dosage of cooperation. Forgetting to teach one without the other would mean shorthanding those young people, and suffering from inevitable future consequences.
  25. Issue Task: "A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college" School curriculum should be designed to equip the students with required skills and knowledge that will help them gain confidence to enter college and eventually, see success in college. Having single national curriculum across the country helps students from different schools attempt the preliminary exam, conducted by the government, in order to enter college, in a fair manner. A student or a teacher, wishing to move to a different city within the country, can do it, without worrying about the curriculum which is going to be the same across the country. Sometimes, students spend time learning some field that they have no interest in and they would be passionate to study a totally different field in college. Students from different schools with different curriculum could result in, getting challenged with different levels of difficulty to complete senior high school before entering college. This could lower quality of students because they were exposed to an easy curriculum and not letting their explore their full potential or help them grow their ability to learn to solve medium to complex problems. Therefore,a nation should require all of its students to study single effective national curriculum that is designed to equip the students with required skills and knowledge that will help them gain confidence to enter college and eventually, see success in college. Argument Task: The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station. "Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level." This argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the unwarrented assumption that the complaints from the viewers concerned with station's coverage of weather and local news is about the late-night news program which mostly concentrates on national news. The argument fails to provide any justification that local businesses reason for cancellation of advertising contracts with the television station in the argument presented is only due to their late-night news program that has devoted increased time to national news. It is possible that economy is down that the local businesses are executing cost cutting strategies or simply that local businesses were introduced some efficient low cost alternatives for advertisement.Had the argument provided additional information that could prove the cancellation of advertising contracts by the local businesses is due to late-night news program it could strengthen the argument. The argument also leaves many other unanswered questions. The argument vaguely mentions about the complaints regarding the station's coverage of weather and local news. Because it doesn't indicate whether the coverage of weather and local news, should be increased or reduced. The argument also assumes to attract more viewers by restoring the time devoted to weather and local news. It is possible that number of people watching the television could simply be reduced due to numerous other factors that doesn't have anything to do with the content broadcasted. Because the argument makes several unwarrented assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that by restoring the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level could attract more viewers to the program and could improve the advertising revenues. Thanks a lot in advance for your time helping with your valuable feedback.
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