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  1. Hello lovely people, I was was wondering if there is anyone who could possibly help grade my writing according to the ETS scoring criteria. It would be much appreciated:) If anyone can, please pm me and I will send you the scoring guidelines and my writing. Thank you in advance!:)
  2. Hi all, Firstly, I would like to thank everyone who responded to my previous posts. Your suggestions and support are invaluable and they are very important to me at this very stressful and lonely stage of thesis writing. I don't have big problems with grammar, paraphrasing and using academic language to write, but I am struggling to produce clear and concise sentences. I can write grammatically correct sentences, but they are often clumsy and difficult to read. Although I will go with my main supervisor's suggestion to hire a copy-editor for my thesis, I wish to hear some tips to improve academic writing. I have been trying the followings. (1) Grammarly: I installed this software when I saw it in YouTube. It is better than Word to pick up typos and grammatical mistakes. At least my co-supervisor has complained less about my writing. (2) PerfectIt: I found it from google and it is very helpful in ensuring consistencies in spelling (e.g. email vs e-mail) and the use of abbreviations etc. (3) I have tried reading out things aloud too, but this does not work quite well for me. I think it is down to I am a non-native English speaker and I am not good at picking up weird sentences from reading. What are your suggestions? I feel that I should do my best rather than relying on the copy-editor. Thanks.
  3. GRE writing score - high enough?

    Hi everyone. I'm a non-US undergrad planning to apply for PhD programs for 2018. My field of interest is in developmental psychology. I took the GRE a few months ago, and got a 164(v)/170(q)/4(w). I'm pretty content with the verbal and quant scores, but a bit insecure about my writing. Some of my target schools are in the Top 5 (Harvard, Stanford etc) Should I invest some more time with GRE and try to improve my writing score? Or should I just focus on writing a better SOP? Thanks in advance!
  4. Hi, I am planning to apply for Philosophy PhD programs in the US and was wondering about the importance of GRE scores in admission. Oh and I'm not a native speaker in English. I didn't do my degrees in English-speaking countries. Just to let you know, if this turns out to be relevant... I just got my GRE score, which is V 170 Q 170 W 4.5. I'm happy to have these V and Q scores but ... I'm hoping to get into one of the top programs in philosophy, and from what I saw on this site, it seems like the absolute majority of the admitted students have writing scores of at least 5.0. (5.5 seems to be the average.) Some say that GRE works as sort of pass/fail and I'll be just ok if I pass the minimum. I've heard some schools take into consideration that the student is not a native speaker and that speed really matters in GRE writing. But I'm not sure about that. Maybe they could just take this a sign of weakness in language, won't they....? My GPA is almost perfect, but as everyone in the field knows, it's getting enormously competitive and almost everyone who applies to the top programs seems to have perfect GPA. So I thought a low analytic writing score could matter in the admission process. If it matters a lot, I think I should retake the exam. But if the effect is minimal, I would just take more time to revise my writing sample. If anyone knows about the importance of GRE in philosophy program admissions, please help me out. There are not many people here I can ask for advice, so I'll really, really, appreciate any tip or information you give me. Thanks...!! + Does it hurt to apply two or three times to the same program? Is there any disadvantage, formal or informal, for a person who got rejected last year and then applies again?
  5. If you're anything like me, you're thinking "jeez I haven't heard back/gotten accepted anywhere yet....wth will I do this fall?" In my desire to have some sort of a plan (if only for being able to work towards something and remain sane), I've thought of a thousand other things I'd like to/plan to do if I don't end up going to graduate school. Some are silly (biologist-turned-celebrity-chef) and some are legitimate (gain more research experience and network), but all have the potential to be extremely valid come graduation in a few months. What about you?
  6. GRE question

    Hello everyone, I recently took a diagnostic GRE practice test and scored a 156 on verbal and 154 on quant. I was wondering what the likely hood of getting above a 165 on both sections would be. Have any of you been able to increase your score more than 10 points per section? I will be taking the GRE on October 7th. Thank you
  7. Writing Sample

    What kind of writing did you use for your sample? Was it a school paper, if so was it the newest thing you had written? When a school has a limit of say 20 pages Max do you send over a 19 page paper? Would a, say, 12 page paper been seen as not sufficient enough? How many used a portion of a longer paper or thesis? Last, what kind of things did you do to edit it before submission (deleting title page and class number, date, etc.). Do you keep your bibliography or get rid of it? Do you add an abstract or German Zusammenhang/Zusammenfassung?
  8. GRE Issue Essay

    Hello there:) this is my first try on Issue essay. I would love to hear an opinion from GRE expert. Thanks in advance. The issue topic claims that all parents should be required to volunteer time to their children’s school. Even though I can see the positive outcome of the parents’ involvement in their children school life, I disagree with the statements’ imperativeness. First of all, even though the school setting often considers that the children education should be a cooperation between the school’s staff and parents of the child, often times the thin line between these two entities is being disrupted. For example, overly controlling parents might assume roles that are inappropriate for the school setting, involving punishments and verbal restrictions toward their child. I think school should be a safe and stress-free environment where the child is protected even from their own parents control. From my experience, I can surely say that my mother’s frequent visits to my school gave anxiety and stress even though she had the best intention. Furthermore, parents’ frequent visits to school can create a drama with the teachers and other parents. For instance, coming from a very traditional background where the parents had special commissary meetings during school time, the arguments and monetary issues were often created. That would form some tension between the parents and would manifest itself in the relationship of the children. Moreover, the situation would get even stickier, when the personnel of the school got involvement in the issue. So, if keeping the parents away from school would ensure a peaceful environment for a child, then it is a good idea to keep it that way. Finally, it is a good idea to use the parents’ influence on the children outside the school to reinforce the knowledge gained during their education. Seeing the parents at school every time, would cause carelessness in the part of the child. For example, when I saw my mother was at school I was sure she would find out about my homework and what I was supposed to do at home. So, I would be careless when listening to teachers or recording the assignments into my journal. However, if I knew my mom was not in the school and she cannot record the assignment for me, I would be extra attentive and would not want to disappoint her when I get home. All in all, while there are some positive outcomes in regard of parent’s involvement into their child’s school affairs, I disagree with the statement that parents should be required to volunteer time to their children’s schools.
  9. Hi all, In preparing for the GRE (ugh) I've been reading through potential issue essay topics on the ETS site (can be found here if interested). Many of these prompts stand out to me as particularly relevant in our (USA's) current political climate. For example: To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards. Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image. Claim: Any piece of information referred to as a fact should be mistrusted, since it may well be proven false in the future. Reason: Much of the information that people assume is factual actually turns out to be inaccurate. Here's my main concern/question: if the topic seems to be begging for a connection to current events (#fakenews), do you include it in the essay because it's (a) an easy point to make and the first thing that comes to mind and time is limited and (b) proof that you're aware of what's happening around you politically? OR, do you avoid it in case there is a risk that the human grader who receives your essay might have a different political orientation or might find it inappropriate for you to reveal your political affiliation in a standardized test format? Am I over-thinking this? Is there a chance one could receive a lowered score with effective writing that ultimately criticizes our current administration if the grader is sympathetic to that administration? Or would they recuse themselves from grading the essay? Thanks for your thoughts!!
  10. Hello everyone, I hope all is well. I was wondering if you guys please grade both my GRE AWA essays. I would like an expert to take a look at them for me, someone who has a very good knowledge of GRE testing. I would also like your constructive feedback. It will be helpful. I have attached the essays to this post. They are in the uploaded file. Thank you! Argument Task Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. The following passage contains a weaken argument that is based off of assumptions of a village. These are the reason I believe the argument is incoherent. The archeologists were exclusively studying Palea, which has ancient baskets. But they found the baskets in Lithos, so they conclude those baskets are not Palean. Plus there were no boats in Paelea. The argument is faulty. There could be interminable possibilities why both villages have similar archaeological artifacts. I wonder if archaeologists consider that maybe the people of Lithos and Palea are from the same culture or from the same ethnic group. People from similar cultures tend to have similar ways of life, even from a geographical distance. The river might have divided the groups, but it may not have divided their similarities. Archaeologists claim that there are no boats present in Palea but at the same time the Brim River is present. It is possible that migration took place among the villages. The river boating used to be one of the main transportation in early human history. It is likely that the village dwellers migrated upstream or down stream, left their belongings and resettled to different areas. If two villages are present across from each other and there is a river between the two, then river boating must have taken place. The archeologists did not mention any boats present in the village of Lithos. They might want to consider that the villagers of Palea may have migrated to the village of Lithos and took their belongings along. The passage states that Palea was found before Lithos. I wonder in which time period were the villages established. The question is whether one of them is more ancient than the other. There is no reservation in my mind that during the prehistoric times, there were geographic alterations. Sometimes geographical changes do have an impact on the lifestyle of early human beings. The woven baskets represent the lifestyles of the people of Palea and the people of Lithos. Since the river is present, I would not disregard the possibility that flooding took place between the two locations. The following passage is incoherent because it fails to analyze the evidence and the setting revolving the prehistoric village of Palea. The dots do not seem to be connected which makes the argument faulty. Issue Task To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. An individual must study the foundations of all types of societies in order to understand the characteristics of a society. Only evaluating major cities will give the individual a parochial view of society. To gauge the characteristics of society, an individual must study the foundation of civilizations. The history of civilizations paved a way for the many characteristics of societies, which includes law, science, arts and a variety of more. Societies were based off of how human beings should supposedly function in the natural world. A good paradigm would be the roles between men and women. The roles of women and men became distinguishable since the dawn of men. In most countries, men are viewed as the breadwinners and women are viewed as the caretakers. Even though the roles have become more blurred due to the promotion of equal rights for both sexes, this distinction is reflected across the globe. This illustration demonstrates that societies across the globe are intertwined when it comes to the roles of both sexes. To have a common idea of the roles of men and women in the world, an individual must include all the parts of the world to get a good inkling of where this social construct was derived from. Studying major cities only will give the individual a one-sided story. Exclusively studying major cities will give the individual a narrow-scope of the characteristics of a society. Major cities that have an urban setting such as London and New York have a more diverse population where anything is plausible. They are both the melting pot of different cultures, ethnicities and backgrounds. The characteristics of each group within the city are variable and are not consistent with one another. If an individual is going to exclusively study major cities, then that individual is using the characteristics of a major city to define every society in this world, which I believe is impossible. The characteristics of one location should not mirror the characteristics of all locations across the globe. The characteristic of a major city in California does not mirror the characteristics of a village in Papua New Guinea. I would understand why a person would want to solely study a major city. Major cities that have an urban setting are often more dynamic and more enhanced because they have a higher population density. Major cities that are well known tend to have a lot of history. Their history is what shaped them up to this day. Their evolution to become major cities does give an individual us an insight on how societies developed over time and it gives us an insight on what characteristics helped those societies to become more prosperous. Plus, studying cities or areas across the globe can be a challenge. I believe in order to study the characteristics of a society an individual must acknowledge the foundation of civilization. I believe the characteristics were part of that foundation and have reflected the prosperity and development of a society.
  11. Hi all - I'm looking to take some type of online writing course this Summer as a bit of a refresh. Does anyone have a specific online writing course that they would recommend? Lots of universities offer them, and many online education websites (e.g. Coursera) have them, but I don't know what would be best. Recommendations? Thanks!
  12. Should I retake the GRE?

    I'm going to Brandeis for an MA in philosophy this fall, and plan to apply to PhD programs after that. I took the GRE last summer and scored 169V/155Q/4.0W. The verbal is good and the quantitative is fine for this field, but the writing score is not ideal. That being said, I don't know how I would really go about improving it. I did do a bunch of practice tests before taking the test. I'm also a good academic writer, generally get A's on papers and can definitely produce a solid writing sample. Any advice about whether to retake and if so, how to effectively study for the writing section?
  13. Writing the Statement of Purpose is hard. It's supposed to be. It is a synthesis of years of experience and intellectual development, but, depending on your program, it is also a very purpose-driven document. It forces you to think clearly about why you want to take this next step, and how best to communicate that vision to different stakeholders. The Masters of Public Policy was my program of choice, and I can't think of better preparation. Before the process I considered myself a strong writer; my personal Bible is Strunk and White, and my work has performed well in the professional contexts it has been tested. Still, the Statement of Purpose is hard. So, I thought I might offer a few pieces of advice. They may not be helpful, but they're what I wish someone would have told me. Disclaimer: I realize the hard sciences and research-driven SOPs have specific research requirements. While my SOP didn't require that, I'd venture to guess the creative processes are still similar. 1. If you feel like your first drafts are "perfect", you're doing it wrong. It's relatively easy to string together a narrative and slapdash a philosophy into a few relatively coherent paragraphs (or pages, as the prompt may be). You're applying to graduate school. Everyone can do that. Play with structure, from narrative to thesis driven, always understanding writing as the aligning of audience and purpose. Figure out what works best for you and why it works best. What are the weaknesses you are compensating for, the strengths you are accentuating, and how can you do that with a "show" rather than "tell" execution? How can you set a tone? How can you be different while still being you? These are the questions behind the white page and blinking cursor, and by answering them through writing exercises or more "informal" writing sessions (I prefer pen and paper), you can begin to create a fully functioning draft. 2. Give yourself time to sit on a "fully functioning" draft for two weeks before doing anything with it. I'm terrible with time management, so the first school I applied to also happened to have the most worked-over, crafted SOP. By being able to shelve it and come back with fresh eyes, I could do a re-write as opposed to a revise, emphasizing certain parts and cutting others. Once I felt comfortable with this document, I started sharing it among my network of LOR writers, peers I admire, etc., which leads me to... 3. Listen to all of your advice, but also none of it. Everyone who has a note is pointing something out that isn't working, even if their identification is off or their diagnosis doesn't work. So be open to potential changes. That said, if you're taking the road less traveled and are truly being a little original, a little novel, a little -- dare I say -- interesting, some people will hate it. One of the people I admire most said of my final draft something along the lines of "It's well written, but it's certainly not what I would have written." At the time it felt like a slight (or a huge blow), but I've grown to appreciate the sentiment. Only one person really understands your Statement of Purpose, so while constantly looking for a better execution is a virtue, being confident in your basic construction is essential. Unfortunately, you're still an academic, which means... 4. You're probably going to hate your SOP by the time you send it out. It's never going to be a perfect distillation of your potential as a graduate student or professional in your field. It's never going to talk the adcomms into admitting you. It's never the all-powerful document we make it out to be in our minds when we are obsessing over dependent clause construction. Still, it's the one-thing (outside of maybe the GRE) you can really control heading into admissions, which makes it a lightning rod for doubt and self-loathing. So, unless your mental health is much better than mine, you're pretty much destined to hate your SOP until... 5. When you finally know where you're going to go, take a look at the SOP you wrote. Most people tell you to tailor your SOP to the school, and while I agree with this sentiment wholeheartedly, I also felt it was important to be honest about my study and career aspirations, even if they didn't align perfectly with the school. That's not strategery out of the "How to Write Your Way Into Grad School" game plan, but at the end of the day it led me to a school with a great fit that also happens to be Top 5 in my field. Also, I'm surprised to report, outside of one typo, one misplaced however, and one flawed introductory clause, it was a document I can be proud of. Good luck, and remember. It's supposed to be hard.
  14. Hello, Everyone! My wife and I wanted to tell everyone about our new online course, The Grad Academy. We've taught graduate students across the nation through our face to face workshops, and we just recently put everything online. We teach graduate students the skill sets they need to succeed in their MA and PhD programs, including conquering academic writing, demystifying academic reading, and decreasing impostor phenomenon feelings. Our participants have reported increases in productivity, reading, and writing (93%, 95%, 95%) and 100% of participants very strongly or strongly (94%, 6%) recommended The Grad Academy to other graduate students. If you're interested, we posted one module from The Grad Academy on The Literature Review Matrix, available on Youtube here: The Full Grad Academy Provides Information on: Impostor Phenomenon and Academia How to Think Like Successful Academics Academic Efficiency Conquering Academic Reading Demystifying Academic Writing Mastering Academic Research We're hoping that The Grad Academy can reach the students who haven't been able to come to our face to face workshops. We also have a blog at Wishing you all the very best, Jonathan and Jayme Cisco, PhD The Grad Academy: JOIN.THEGRADACADEMY.COM (Note: We've tried to contact the moderators prior to submitting this announcement. We don't want to spam anyone. We're happy to remove this if inappropriate.)
  15. Hey yall! So I got good news for my MFA poetry applications-- I'm a Berkeley local and applied to SFSU's MFA program as well as CCA's MFA and got into both! I am having a lot of trouble figuring out what I should do. I'd appreciate as much advice as possible! Right now I'm thinking about these things: SFSU: is a LOT cheaper, and I'm getting a scholarship for the first semester; amazing staff; offers teaching certification included with degree; is located kind of far away so commuting will be a pain depending on how many days a week I am actually on campus [tuition is approx 7k per year] CCA: private art school; offering me a more prestigious array of scholarships even though it will still end up more expensive than SFSU; no teaching certification; amazing campus, but i'll be surrounded by people who are mostly willing or able to dive into an insanely high tuition and idk how comfortable id feel being in that environment as a low income person of color [tuition is approx 40k per year, but i would basically be receiving 70% of my tuition covered] I've also been traveling all month for academic events and its made it super hard to organize the pros and cons of each. Basically floundering a little!!! Thank you in advance <3
  16. Writing tutors

    Dear members of theGradCafe, I am a PhD student who is in need of a wonderful writing tutor. I've searched all the forums listed on this website whose postings are related to the writing improvement, but besides the suggestions, like "write more to get better," I failed to find information about hiring a writing tutor as a way to improve writing. I know hiring a tutor is the most expensive way to improve your writing, yet I believe it is a relatively less risky method of improving my writing skills than the method of writing and reviewing my own paper over and over without feedbacks. I am happy to pay for the tutor if he/she can improve my writing. Can anyone recommend a great writing tutor for me? (I live in Pittsburgh, but ONLINE tutor would be just fine as well)
  17. Hey all. So for those of you who have had interviews that included writing samples, how long did you have to write them? 10 minutes?...5 minutes?! 😱 Was there any word-count or character limit/minimum? Any subject matter you might suggest to review? I know it may sound like a lot but honestly, ANY tips would be helpful. I am terrified about the writing sample especially after knowing now that it is unavoidable so I'm trying to prepare as much as I can. I already planned on setting a timer and writing about certain things about myself or SLP in that time to get ready for it, but it would really ease my anxiety if I had a better idea of the amount of time I'd be working with or any helpful info.
  18. I'm applying for an internship to study a master's in a U.S. university to specialize in graphics programming and simulation. I'm from Spain, and they rate the SoP from 1 to 8. If I don't get 8 points I get disqualified because of the competitivity and low total number of granted internships. I will share this statement with my professors too but I would really appreciate some help online. Please have a look and tell me if it is boring, or if you honestly like it. The maximum length is 3 pages, so If you find any useless and generic area I will delete it. All criticism is welcomed. I've already been told that my Universities section is weak, that I need to say something special about each one. What do you think about that? Btw, the link in the document is not available yet. Thanks in advance.
  19. GRE Analytical Writing Critiques

    Hi guys, I am studying for the GRE and I recently wrote my first practice papers (in about 2 or 3 months) for the analytical writing section on the GRE. I was wondering if anyone would mind reading these essays over and critiquing me on what I can do to improve my writing and my GRE score. I am a lot more confident with my argument essay than I am with my issue essay. Thanks! Argument Essay Practice 1.docx Issue Essay Practice 1.docx
  20. I didn't know where to post to get advice, I'm hoping at least this is a good place to start. Yes I do realize this is quite late in the application season. Background: Originally after my B.A degree in biology, I took a year to volunteer at OMSI in Portland while applying for research tech. jobs in neuroscience. I was hired for a neuroscience lab at MIT where i worked for 2 years and had a middle-author publication. I then tried applying to Ph.D programs in the fall of 2014, no interviews and no admissions. I then applied for MS programs and then was accepted for a Bioinformatics MS degree at Georgia Tech. I'm finishing a 3-semester professional development degree with no thesis but with research work in a neuroscience & genetics lab - no chance for publications. Question: What is the best way to describe my meager research experience to a Ph.D program in neuroscience? I am concerned that my lack of publications and accomplishments in 5 years since my BA will hurt me and that my MS degree will be disregarded. Should I try a different field? bioinformatics, biology or psychology? I am having alot of issues trying to fit my skills and accomplishments where none seem to exist or are relevant. I feel rather stupid for trying.
  21. Hello! I heard that this forum was the perfect place to ask the kind community for help with statement of intent/purpose revisions? Could someone help me by taking looking at my statements and offer feedback or with writing revision. Any feedback at all would be greatly appreciated!
  22. Is anyone on here doing a three-year PhD? I know one of the pitfalls of European programs is the lack of time to publish, present, etc. outside of the dissertation. I'm getting a lot of conflicting messages from professors and students about expected productivity in projects outside of their dissertation. Most of the students in my program I've spoken to don't seem too worried about anything besides their dissertation. My adviser wants me to present 2x a year and to simply "read everything" - not worrying about writing until later. If I'm writing a full paper for a conference, I'd like to publish if I can. On the other hand, I have to finish a big chunk of the dissertation in the first year if I'm to upgrade. I'd like to be competitive for jobs when I graduate and I'm sure my classmates do to, but as far as I know I'm the only one that's thinking this way. What are your thoughts? How would you balance writing on the side in such a time frame? What is reasonable?
  23. [Essay] review

    Hi, I'm new to this forum as well as grad school life. And since English isn't my native language, I need help with reviewing this short essay of mine. I think it may sound not academically written or too plain. I'll appreciate any help. “What steps would you recommend be taken to make health care in America more available to everyone?” Increasing Value Based Healthcare in America It is imperative to restructure the healthcare system with the aim of value for patients and shift away from a supply-driven system. To deliver more value, healthcare providers should focus solely on quality. To achieve this, they need to deepen their expertise so as to serve all complicated and interrelated needs of patients during their full course of care. Care should revolve around patient medical conditions. Additionally, as care is administered the results achieved should be measured against the patient’s needs. For example, diabetes involves other conditions like renal disease, hypertension, and retinal disease among others. Therefore, care delivered to diabetic patients should incorporate all these needs. Providers should move to bundled payments for care cycles. Patients with acute conditions pay one price to cover all treatments and interventions performed on them during their full care cycle (Porter and Lee 24). As a result, they achieve best outcomes at lower prices. Another step to take is integrating healthcare systems. The first step is defining the scope of services a provider can perform and eliminate unrealistic lines of service. Volume is concentrated by medical condition and moving non-severe cases out of heavily resourced facilities. Integrating care in this manner across the network of facilities and incorporating community resources adds value for patients, providers and improves the whole structure. Certain principles need to be adhered to while measuring the cost of care. Cost depends on the actual resources used in delivering care, which includes time devoted, the capacity cost of each resource and support costs required. The total cost incurred should be for the full cycle of care of the patient and not for line items, departments or services. Community providers should affiliate with a higher tier of providers to assist in complex conditions and redistribution of patients depending on the severity of the condition. Works Cited Bernstein, L. "Once again, U.S. has most expensive, least effective health care system in survey." Washingtonpost (2014). Retrieved from "Health Care Facts: Why We Need Health Care Reform." ObamaCareFacts (n.d.) Retrieved from Ridic, G., Gleason, S., Ridic., O. "Comparisons of Health Care Systems in the United States, Germany and Canada." Mater Sociomed 2012; 24(2): 112–120 "Patients' Rights." JetWriters (n.d.) Retrieved from Porter, Michael E., and Thomas H. Lee. "The strategy that will fix health care." Harv Bus Rev 91.12 (2013): 24. Also, in future when I am writing my thesis and stuff should I have someone proofread it? Or since the committee knows that my English isn't perfect, they may not pay too much attention to it but concentrate more on the actual research?
  24. I realize its a little wordy but it was my first time practicing with a timer! See attached word doc. I left errors as is since that's how they'll be graded on test day. Thanks!!! practice essays 1.docx

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