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Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position. ---
There has increasingly been a push for policy makers around the world to increase the wages of teachers in order to attract more talent to pursue teaching as a profession. It is an incontestable fact that by investing in education - teachers, classroom facilities, education materials, it will reap high yielding results for the economy in the long run, and most importantly, break the vicious poverty cycle in developing countries. Then there comes the question of how do we appropriately pay our teachers, and a proposition to reward teachers based on their students’ academic results has surfaced, which I strongly disagree with.
This proposition firstly makes the broad assumption that teachers are motivated by monetary compensation, which is, in my opinion, almost insulting to them. Educators are deeply passionate about what they do, and money often has little, or any, to do with fueling that passion. An opposing argument is that there has increasingly been a push for policy makers to increase the wages of teachers in order to attract more talent into this field. It is true that most people work towards getting their paycheck every month, but truely dedicated teachers do not fall in that category. It is precisely because they are underpaid for the amount of contribution they make to society that this push for higher wages came about. Yet teachers exist in classrooms in every part of the world, poor or rich, simply because of their passion for carving a better future for their students. By increasing teachers’ salaries if their students perform better on paper, it assumes that they will put a more conceited effort into becoming better educators, as if they aren’t already doing their best for what they inherently care about.
Education is much more than purely academic achievements, it includes character building and the development of other practical skills. Granted, many detractors may argue that, in the competitive environment today, academic results is the first thing higher education institutions and employers look at, in order to discern the best candidates. That may be true in the past, but we have seen increasingly that that is no longer the case. Interviews with Fortune 500 companies’ CEOs reveal what they look for in candidates go beyond a glowing academic transcript - they look for attitude, character traits and values developed through past experiences, sometimes these even take precedence over academic achievements. If teachers’ compensation are indeed benchmarked against their students’ academic results, teachers would direct their efforts into grooming straight As students, and that will inadvertently lead to less time spent on creating an environment for a holistic education. Students will have their heads buried in textbooks, instead of giving back to the community, learning soft skills such as communication and presentation, or simply just enjoying the pleasures of life that many take for granted. We will then end up producing students of just academic achievements, instead of a diversified pool of talent which, studies have shown, is conducive for progress and growth. In addition, many students excel in other areas such as sports and the arts because of various factors, and it is unjust to not reward their teachers for pushing them in their respective areas of passion.
There are indeed many ways that we can reward our teachers appropriately, but to incentivise them using monetary compensation according to how their students perform on paper is not one of the. In fact that can demotivate them, and ultimately produce undesirable consequences for society.