arpitsardhana

Hi all Please provide critique to my SOP: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B7QvmgWqstTOaUR4Z3M1X0Y5MkE/view?usp=sharing Please comment about structure, usage of sentence, grammatical and syntax errors. Please also point out what material to include and what to leave out. Does it really make an impact? P.S:Lines in red indicate that i am not really sure to include them

I think you dont have to justify by criticizing the country lack of resources. I have seen people with 0 research experience getting into CMU. If you could read something about professor where you want to work and suggest some innovative research ideas, it will be enough. If you are planning for PHD then it is big problem. If however,for MS you have good grades(topper of class) did decent projects and interns.It should be absolutely fine to tell about those experiences.

Although i am also in process of writing my SOP and no expert in this domain, but after reading your essay i have few points to make: ->Specifically mention your current aim i.e M.S or PHD or MS leading to Phd in first paragraph itself ->Adhere to word limit .Your essay is 1500 words long. Admission committee at many universities are very strict about word limit. ->Rather than generically mentioning XX university, search departmental website, shortlist one of two professor working in your area.Provide a brief mention how you connect to them through your work. ->It is good thing that you have mentioned how MEMS fascinates you, it would be good idea to mention what are the areas on which research can be extended.

Thanks a lot GMH for detailed critique. It is really helpful. Actually i also felt problems but could not figure out logical way to address my SOP.Your views provided me adequate view to move forward. I will make all changes and rephrase again

Hi Please critique my SOP at https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B7QvmgWqstTOV3hXNnpVZ2U2Q0U/view?usp=sharing It is a rough draft . I have tried to pull all ideas and now in process of editing it. Provide useful comments on which part i should do away and which i should have. My profile. Applying for - MS in CS GRE/TOFEL- 316/99 Education- M.Tech (Electronics and Comm from IIT Roorkee India) -7.76/10 B.Tech (Electronics and Comm from UPTU)- 74.5% Work EX - 3 years as software developer at Cisco in at Protocol development. 4 Projects ( 3 in electronics + 1 in distributed computing) 3 trainings (2 industrial and 1 system programming) I have not mentioned that i have been TA at IIT roorkee during my graduation and i have done community service for 1 year teaching kids about science

I am applying for MS computer science Development exp in OS and protocol 2yr GRE-316, did M.Tech ECE from IIT Roorkee(7.76) Do i stand i chance in top 20 university I suffer from partial deafness, will it affect my application