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Hey thanks for replying ! I believe I understand what you suggested, it could be more easy to read by using direct verbs rather than passive ones. It will be helpful if you can explain regarding adding thesis statement which is not very clear to me.

Hi all, this is my first blogpost in the forum! I have started preparing for GRE recently and need help regarding scoring the following "Analysing an Issue" task I havejust completed. Any suggestion or opinion regarding improvement are welcome. Thanks! Issue : If Students Are Smart, They’ll Major in What They Love. Essay : The comment is based on a very common, universally familiar notion that student community as a whole is being more and more inclined to make a choice of specialization of study based on the profitability of it from career oriented perspective. This is a viable issue prevalent in more or less every part of the world where college education is considered as an investment and which in turn will give returns in form of wealth from the career path you choose after completion of education and earned wealth will give a secured, established and a comfortable life style. One foremost thing to consider here is that, the decision of choosing a particular area for higher education gets influenced by the thought process of one's family, friends, in short, some key people of one's life. Perhaps, these people are already prejudiced with the fundamental essence of our capitalist society that wealth is the most important key to success and happiness. Unfortunately, things like passion, interest do get overlooked in this highly competitive present world, which in turns affect the big picture of one's life. Majors should be chosen wisely, where "wisely" implies with individual wisdom knowing one's affinity and love towards a particular concentration which will contribute in mastering a skill, enhancing intellect and useful for career in long run. Nevertheless the freedom of choice should be present even though one can simply have a belief system which may support other definitions of "success" driven by materialistic or capitalistic views. Undoubtedly freedom encourages learning and growth, which should be the primary goal of academia. At the end of the day, it depends on a particular individual to decide what should be the take away from his or her career or professional life. So, if chuckling , after noticing somebody using the mobile application one developed in an air-conditioned cubicle, in a high rise building, gives one more satisfaction or having goosebumps, while thinking about the after effects of a just completed novel about a contentious current issue at three in the morning in one's study, gives one more happiness that depends on one's own self and truthfully none of these cannot be forced of all.