I think you will do fine with some help, but these essays would score rather low. Work on writing in a more direct way (more simply). For example, don't use so much passive voice, and make sure you know what your clear subject and verb is in each sentence. I think your ideas are fine, but your writing style makes them a bit tough for the reader to understand. Also, write more. These are pretty short, and you're missing a lot of great analysis, and your introductions and conclusions are far too short to do their jobs fully. I would also recommend looking up comma rules if you have the time (you're missing a lot of commas). If your test is soon, don't worry about it.