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Hi Somnus, Thank you for your reply, it is greatly appreciated. I felt as I was writing, the structure could have been better. That is a great point regarding the thesis, I was a bit worried about the third paragraph hurting the paper. I guess, it is better to chose a side but not be so absolute then there will be room to add concession point which doesn't hurt my postion. Thank you again for your feedback! Nathan

Hello all, I was hoping for someone to mark my essay, it's my first attempt under a timed constraint (40 mins). Any feedback would be a greatly appreciated! Prompt: A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position. Essay: Students wishing to enter university should have a fair oppertunity of attending. As a result, students should be exposed to the same standarized curriculum nationwide prior to entering college. Standardizing curriculum is also an efficient tool for determinng which schools are struggling and unable to perform as expected. Suppose there are two school from either side of the country, school A and B, Both of which are teaching the exact same curriculum. If performences differs significanlty between both school, this may be an indication of poor teaching, lack of funding and many other issues. A standardized curriculum allows for the issues to be easily observed since the curriculum itself is not an issue. The curriculum taught in school has an impact on the students who are exposed to it. By exposing various students in the same grade to the exact same curriculum, neither student will have an upper hand over their peers. Standardized curriculum provides an equal playing field for students. Students who are weak will have a fair oppertunity against other weak students. Furthermore, students who are poor will have the same opportunity for learning as students who are rich since the curriculum will not be changed to suite individuals comming from different socio-economic backgrounds. Although, a national curriculum would allow for equal learning amoung students. A curriculum that is set in stone without the freedom change or deviate could hurt some students. Consider, a gifted student who is forced to study a curriculum which does not challenge his/hers ability. By not nurturing their ability they are doing themselves a disservices. In contrast, consider exposing weak students to a difficult curriculum, students may feel overwheled or unintelligent, thus pushing them away from school altogether. Overall a standardized curriculum would benefit students. Equality will give all students a figthing a chance at entering university. Futhermore, a national curriculum would expose and allow government to help school that need the aid. As a result, a national curriculum will benefit not only students but society in general as those kids are our future.