Requesting help with Artist Statement

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It's recently come to my attention that my artist statement is weak to say the least. I don't like this, so I'm asking you folks for some assistance.

I'm posting my blog where you can find my statement on the left bar: http://waynemarcelli.blogspot.com/

You can ignore the non-figurative paintings on the page; those were mostly just for fun and will not be included in my portfolio.

My paintings have a lot to do with relationships, anxiety and fear, though I had such a hard time working that into a statement that I abandoned it altogether.

This is what I've come up with, at least the start of it, and by all means feel free to criticize, comment, rewrite or destroy:

"This body of work attempts to discard preexisting molds and embrace the unpredictable, dynamic nature of human relationships. The notion that personal relationships are expected to

conform to a specific design is not only completely unrealistic, but damages emotional connections between individuals for failure to meet nonsensical standards."

I realize it's got leagues to go, but what do you think?

Thanks in advance people.