SOP for Computer Science PhD application -- anyone available to review?

[DSA]

I've got a rough draft of my SOP for my computer science PhD application. Would anyone be able to PM me to take a look at it? Of course, I'd be willing to give your work a fresh pair of eyes in exchange if you'd like.

 

So far my SOP is still quite long and I haven't worked to edit things down yet -- mainly because I was hoping to give any reviewers here a more complete picture of my background (perhaps too complete! ) so that you can help chop off pieces or tweak areas. My thought is that for someone who doesn't know me personally, that may be more helpful at this point than trying to figure out things about my background to add that I hadn't mentioned.

 

Please let me know via PM if you'd be up for taking a look at my (about 2400-word-so-far) SOP!