Help critique argument essay

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Just took a manhattan test, they dont grade essays so i am hoping someone who is a pundit in critiquing essays would help out. It is a timed essay argument task.

The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:

A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The assertion by the faculty committee that Seatown University should sanction a free tuition for professors' college students is flawed and they have to give specific evidence that Seatown and Oceania Universities are similar, among other things.

Firstly, do both schools have different similarities, apart from close proximity. While professors in Oceania may have more college aged kids, the situation may actually differ from Seatown;these professors may have children that are done with college. And the results of this study may be not be typical of Seatown and reccomendation won't lead to retention of academics in Seatown University. The committee has to show that the study sample is representative of Seatown University constituent.

Furthermore, evidence that Seatown would be able to implement a free tuition for the group of students. The conditions at Oceania may favor giving free tuition: underwriting from private organizations and loans. Whereas, Seatown may not have suitable funds and budget to show such largess. Thus, this reccomendation may not be sanctioned by the President. The comittee should provide evidence that Seatown has the excess budget to run this programmes.

Finally, the committee members make a great leap from giving free tuition to luring new professors. There are various incentives that academics seek before choosing where to lecture: research facilities, wages and geographical location of the college. Seatown University could give free tuition to their kids and pay low wages and lack adequate research facilities and thus such professors may not be wooed into taking residents at Seatown. The committee members should show among other things that Seatown has other facilities that would intesrest new academics.

In summary,the committee members should provide the above named evidence to buttress their assertion. If these are not provided, the president would reject their reccomendation.

Edited September 5, 2014 by dicapino