Would love some feedback on my SoP

[chinolicious23]

Like a ton of people here, I would love to get a fresh set of eyes on my statement. I've edited it a few times after finding new information on this site and other, but now I think I'm ready to just get some comments and go from there.

 

I'm applying to a MS in food science for fall of 2015!

 

I'll PM it to anyone who would be willing to help

 

Thanks so much

[PavitraK]

Hey, any luck with the admissions?