MS in CS SoP Feedback Welcome

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Hi! I'm currently working on a draft of my statement of purpose, but am terribly stuck. I'm going to post a link to what I've got thus far, and if anyone would like to give me some feedback, I've got comments enabled. It's not done yet, but I have an outline at the bottom regarding what I've yet to write.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nD0zqc5XbB5wRm_PwQ--RXzyK4VZ3sIRCzDVG45R7hY/edit?usp=sharing

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Hi, guys! This is an update to say that I finished the above SoP. I'd love some more feedback, as I plan to continue tailoring it for the rest of my schools.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nD0zqc5XbB5wRm_PwQ--RXzyK4VZ3sIRCzDVG45R7hY/edit?usp=sharing