Can you score my essay question 1-6?

[grad29]

This is a timed essay I took on the Powerprep practice test.

 

Topic: A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 

 

I disagree with the idea that a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Although there are some benefits to creating this requirement, the negatives far outweigh the positives.

 

Requiring all students to learn the same national curriculum would work in a system where all students learn at the same rate; however, this is far from the truth of reality. Many students learn faster than other students. Similarly, many students learn slower than other students. If you required the slower learning students to learn the same curriculum as the faster learning students, they may not get the most out of their education. Perhaps the curriculum is too advanced, or perhaps it is not advanced enough. The curriculum imposed on a student should be positively correlated to their level of learning. 

 

Additionally, if you required all students to study the same national curriculum you would prevent the student from choosing what they wanted to study. In high school, there are usually many courses to select from. This allows a student to pick what type of classes to take based on their interests. For instance, a high school that had an automotive or construction program available would allow students who wanted to be car mechanics or construction workers get a head start. Similarly, if a student was interested in becoming a physicist, they would be able to excel by taking advanced courses in mathematics and science. Allowing a student to study what they want motivates them to learn and to take the most out of their education. Forcing a student who despises math to take a certain math course, may set them up for failure. 

 

Furthermore, not all students want to attend college after high school graduation. Some students who know they are not going to be attending college may not need to learn some of the same things other students who plan to are. For instance, requiring knowledge of geometry may be important for a student who wants to design houses, but for a student who knows they will be working on their parent's farm after they graduate, it may be become irrelevant for them to learn. 

 

Admittingly, there are instances that requiring all students to learn the same national curriculum that are beneficial. For instance, a student who is naturally gifted with a high IQ, but who lacks the motivation to excel, may choose to slack off in his studies by enrolling themselves in easier courses. Requiring that student enroll in a specific curriculum may push themselves to learn things they may not have otherwise. Or for example, a high school that forces its students to learn a unique type of curriculum may set the students up for failure since they are not learning the same things other students are. There are many students who are forced by their parents to attend a catholic school. Taking time learning about the history of Christianity could perhaps have been better spent learning about the history of colonies or civilization. Standardized the curriculum nationally would prevent some of these downsides. However these examples are the few and far between.

 

There are many more instances that make the idea of requiring all students to study the same national curriculum more counterproductive than beneficial. In a perfect world where all students learn at the same rate. want to excel by enrolling in postgraduate education, or have identical interests it may make more sense creating this requirement. Unfortunately, this is not how we are and the idea becomes more and more insensical the longer you investigate its merits.

 

Edited July 14, 2015 by westy3789

[random_grad]

I d say it s a 5. You have a clear argument, make several points which you explain in detail and provide some examples.

And yet the style is dry, there is no rhetorical persuasion, which seems to be the key element of most 6 rate essays. These would include powerful sentence structure, quotes of famous people, strong intro. About quotes: apparently it s ok to make things up. But that s just something I read online. I would not risk it.