Essay Argument Essay.

[Ellpi Rosales]

 Hi can please anyone rate my GRE Argument Essay. AW practice. The statement below is the argument topic.

The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.

"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

Productivity is a measurement of output at any given amount of time. Employing a system that measures employee’s productivity by its internet use is at all irrational.  

In support to the introduction, there are employees who are smart in spending their time and by that, that means they can produce output within or beyond expectations. Let’s say that the electronic monitoring says that the employee has high internet use throughout the day but eventually created a numerous and top notch output. Should this disqualify him/her from being productive because it was found out his internet use is just way too high?

The system is also expecting employees to have the same behavior in wasting their time. Internet use is only one way for them to do that. They could dally or do something else that are totally irrelevant to their job. The new system for sure has not monitored that so they could end up being productive but actually were producing no output at all. Apparently, the new system is dysfunctional on this aspect.

Lastly, how could the impact of lowered internet use will improve overall profits? Unproductivity of employees does not determine the well-being of a company’s financial status. The argument fails to state any stats or studies supporting such claim about improvement of profits due to lowered internet use.

The argument in all fails to elaborate why a system that electronically monitors employees’ internet use is the best gauge to understand its employees’ productivity. It simply does not measure the output of the employees when productivity is all about the output.

[AkashSky]

I think your thesis is lacking.  You are just saying that its irrational, which is very vague.  Why is it irrational?