Request you to rate my attempts at Issue and Argument Essay

[Divyanshu]

Dear Experts and Fellow Grad School Aspirants,

Hope you all are going great and preparing to the best of your efforts. Would like to take this moment to wish you all the very best for the exam. 

I have written my first Issue and argument task and would love to get your feedback on the same. There are many errors in spellings and repeated usage of some words in the Essay and I have not corrected them at all so that I can get a true picture as to where I stand as of now.

Thus request you to take some time out in reading and probability giving a score to my attempt. I would further not take much of your time here in making you go through this long mail !

Thanks
Divyanshu

Attempts are as follows ---> 

Issue Essay

Question:
As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Answer:

Starting our journey as un uncivilized mamal to a civilized race, human beings have come a long way in understanding simple problems to advance it to more complex problems. Discovery of wheels led to a great use of transport facilities and helped in reaching to far off places and thus now leading us to travel in space to explore different life forms. Therefore, acquiring knowledge leeds to an ease in understanding of of complex and mysteriously unsolved problems.

Human race loves to solve problems to create better future, a future with complex yet effective solutions to contribute in daily tasks. Thus inorder to solve such problems it is necessary to acuire knowledge from the very berth of an ofspring. A child learns about the gravity in his/her early days and in continium of his/ her advanced studies, is introduced to advance sciences to learn to become a professional which does daily complex operations with the help of the knowledge earned from different forays of fields and directions. Thereby we can easly say that people who study take up jobs which are required to solve more complex problems.

While it is common that a person who has acuired less knowledge, with the use of technology, can nowadays work on more complex problems with less or little understanding. Nontheless, the same technology is created by us because of our understanding of complex problems by years of complex and mystic studies.

One's ability to acuire knowledge to solve complex problems has thus not only made our lives easy but has opened doors to other more complex problems. This is an undeniable adendum to the current ability to acquire knowledge and understand complicated theories.

Argument Essay

Question
The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.

"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

Answer

The recomendation that opening a cafe in Monarch Books clearly defetes its purpose and thus should be executed with caution. Opening a new cafe may cause an opposite effect in reducation of the large customer base and in-turn defeating the purpose of introducing it altogether. This is due to the different number of reasons stated ahead.

Firstly, Being in the business for a twenty years period gives Monarch Books a upper hand in a strong clientle and the idea that opening a cafe just like Regal Books did might not be a wise decission. It is not clear the reasons adopted by Regal to open its cafe. May be Regal store is running running into losses and wants to cover up its cost by running a cafe. Thus opening up a cafe and following the footsteps of Regel's should be done with a lot of considerations.

Secondly, the data paterns suggested by the reacent national census cannot be fully trusted. Since these census often missinterepet the local dynamics of a location with the whole outcome in general and thus may be the trend of decline population under ten is not significant in the area where Monarch Books is located. Even if the trends are considered to be local to that area there is a possibility that the actual buyers of the children books are the adults and not the children themselves. Thus banishing the children's section can potentially decrease the customer base at Monarch Books.

Lastly, One can not access the effect of operational aspects of managing a new service inside the book store.An ill-managed cafe can result in daunting way by hampering the goodwill created by Monarch over the twenty plus year of its service. To run a cafe with the goal the increse its customer base is a difficult task and requires extra managerial hands which cannot be compared with Regal's approach. May be Regal has presence across the nation having multiple stores with a well managed team, this clearly is not stated in the argument thus making it difficult to comprehend the success of this approach.

Therefore, the recomendation is likely to fail more than causing a huge trumph in achieving the desired increase in customer base and thus should be carefully thought about.