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[Masterwolf]

Topic
Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. 
Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. 
In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

Essay

Funding is very much required for Art courses to develop the society.

As per graduate school sensus in 2014, less student are taking art courses as compared to Science and Tech courses.
This is due High tution fees in college and less jobs available for Art courses hence paying education loan would be tough.
Gorermnet funding can help the students who are really interested in Arts courses without thinking about the finances.

Art is very important aspect of society.Without art there wont be any beautiful designs, the big companies like APPLE gave more important role for arts.
Funding can help many more people to go for Art courses and thus can help in improvement of society.

Funding from Government can be dangerous if government is governing what to teach courses to be run. 

Thus i would like to say that funding is very good for art as it will help in many people going toward arts.

[Vince Kotchian GRE Prep]

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