MS Material Science SOP Critique

[LmJim]

I want to get into the MSE Materials Science Online program at UCLA.   Does anyone want to help me by critiquing my statement of purpose?

[Promit B]

Definitely. Inbox them to me.

[sarvesh_710]

Hey,

I am a final year undergraduate in Material Science and Engineering at IITK ,India. I believe you have been enrolled in MS program, can you help me out on the procedure, I am thinking to apply in fall 2017. 

Edited June 1, 2016 by sarvesh_710