Advice on personal statement for public policy

[pubpol101]

I am currently an undergraduate student hoping to apply to public policy programs straight out of undergrad. Obviously, my clearest disadvantage is work experience, and if you look at my CV, my major as well. I'm looking for someone to critique my statement of purpose via a private message. If you've been on the forum for a while now, and have been admitted to a school in public policy or international affairs, and you'd like to help critique the SOP, let me know, and I'll send it to you via private message.

My stats: Biomedical sciences, 150ish ranked school, 3.77 GPA, GRE 164 V 165 Q, hoping to apply to top 10 schools in the field.

[J_Phil]

Hi "AAAAAA", my name is John. I'm happy to critique for you (we are applying to similar programs). I'm applied, currently, to Fletcher and American SIS; where do you plan to apply? Send that SOP and I'll edit the heck out of it ASAP :)