GRE-Issue and Argument Essay

[Ana Liz]

I am taking the GRE Test in 10 days!! Can any, or all of you  give me some feedback on the following essays?:

As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

 

It is certain that new technology is helpful to make operations for humans faster. However, if there is not a priority on developing the human mind, and interacting on human levels without technology, we are putting the hands of our future merely on technological tools. I believe that one must create innovations for better develop our world. However, one must not rely on it as the primary way to do everything, otherwise that innovation will be in charge of the human, and not vice versa. For example, there are basic things like washing the dishes, which are easily done with the human mind. However, dishwashers do save humans time to perform other duties. In this way, one is utilizing this tool for assistance, not to do it all for the human. One still needs to put the dish away after the dishwasher has complete its task.

 

There are other innovations that should be done mostly by humans. For example, the internet is a great tool to find information on any topic. However, when a student aims to perform a thesis in his/her field of studies, the student must not rely on the computer to find topics of interest. Instead the student, needs to come up with a topic from the areas that interest the person. If every student relies on looking up research topics on the internet, then that is almost plagiarism. Moreover, making the internet find the research topic for the student, stops him/her from doing a research in what he is actually interested. Giving the fact that a topic is given to the student, he/her cannot utilize his background to develop a topic that is unique to his experience.

 

If one goes deeper into the topic of technology, one must argue that as people are relying more on technology, their mind is not only becoming obsolete, but their relationships are loosing its human meaning. Facebook for example, does not show life in its total reality. It might keep one connected to long distance friends. However, the idea one has of them, and they have of us, is just a social network level, but not on a personal one. Even conversations become less authentic. One cannot know for sure, that people interacting through Facebook, are really focusing on the conversation, or also talking to other people. The problem is not in how well one can maintain conversations with multiple people at a time, but the fact that one is not fully present in any of the conversations, due to multitasking.

 

In conclusion, society needs to come back to traditional ways of doing things. One must be grateful for having technology as a source to save time, make distance unnoticeable. However, one must not become a slave of technology. Doing so, will only make us less intelligent, more robotic, and lack creativity.

 

 In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.

 

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

 

It is assumed that due to high interest of water sports among the residents in Mason City, the government should provide the recreational facilities with more funds. In this way, the organization can provide games for the residents to enjoy water sports in their own river. Additionally, the river has been very uncleansed for many years, so the other assumption, is that it is time that the river gets cleaned up. This will make the complaining residents happy, plus the river, can then be used to serve the population that enjoys water sports.

 

Increasing the budget of the facility merely relied on the results of the survey. Given, the fact that most residents would love to swim, boat, and fish in the river, the government should hear their input, and raise the budget for Riverside facilities. Since, the state is cleaning the river, it will give joy to the unsatisfied residents. However, it will be wise to make use of the river, once cleaned, to satisfy the other residents.

 

Now, the city government should wait to increase the budget of riverside facilities, until the state cleans the river. Otherwise, the money will not make any positive advancement towards bringing water sport services to the residents of Mason City.

 

 

I will very much appreciate your input!!! Thanks