Help with personal statement?

[jilliebean435]

I've just finished the first draft of my personal statement. I'm wondering if anyone out there would mind reading it and giving me their opinion. I'm applying to the biomedical sciences PhD program at few schools. If you've had a successful application process or are trying write your SOP too, I would love your help! I need someone to check grammar and content, and just let me know how it sounds overall. I'm happy to help other people as well with their statements. If you're interested let me know!!