SOP for PhD in Anthropology - feedback request

[David Ko]

Would anyone here be able to read through an SOP for a PhD application in the field of anthropology? It's only about 1000 words. I'm actually asking for my cousin who lives in South Korea, but is applying to schools in the U.S. Her English isn't the greatest so I proofread and edited her SOP. But having no background in any of this, I needed help from any of you kind, knowledgeable folk to give any feedback. Thank you!