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Topic: Issue

As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true  and explain how these considerations shape your position

 

Technology have captured the whole world. No doubt we are completely reliable upon technology for our day to day work but that doesn’t justify that humans will lose the ability to think for themselves.

In order to use technology , we have to be aware of its uses , its properties , how one particular technology works, in what ways will it help us, after studying analyzing the utilities we jump to use that particular technology. This requires a lot of brain works, nevertheless people will think and will learn firstly to use the technology.

Some will argue using calculators have lessen our capacity of mental maths, my question to them without calculators how could have archeologists solved complicated equation in order to discover something or scientists  proceed with their inventions . Doing mental math is something qualified to school studies, clearing entrance exams but for complicated calculations we need the help of technology.

Social networking a form of technology have helped us remembering those people whom we have forgotten , brought us closer which wouldn’t have been possible by just thinking about that friend without any contact details.

Technology helps people to remember things which they could have possibly forgotten due to their busy schedule with the help of notes , reminders but as stated above at some point people thought about this day to day small problems and came up with a solution which made people’s life hassle free.

Though saying that technology have helped in each step of our life and we do rely upon it , at some points I do focus upon the saying by Mr. Steven Spielberg “Technology can be our best friend , and technology can be the biggest party pooper of our lives. It interrupts our own story, interrupts our ability to have a thought a daydream, to imagine something wonderful, because we are too busy bridging the walk from the cafeteria back to the office on the cell phone” . Again , it is anomalous behavior from human part who is making it a habit to be attached to cellphones but can’t blame on technology or its creators. They just found a solution to a problem which we go through everyday. We, humans have to practice our own to keep ourselves away from technology sometimes and give ourselves some free time.

As said by Mr. Edward Teller “The science of today is technology of tomorrow” , without human’s power of thinking their won’t be any innovation and for a particular innovation we have to rely upon Technology.

 

Topic:Argument

Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the palean people. Recently, however , archeologists discovered suach a “Palean” basket in Lithios, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim river is very deep and board , and so the ancient Palens could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found . Thus it follows that the so called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

 

The problem with the argument that as Palean boats were not found across the brim river in an Ancient city named Lithios near to Palea, which makes it possible that Palean baskets are not made by palean is somewhat vague in nature. Some more accounts should be figured out before coming to a conclusion.

As mentioned in the paragraph Palea is a prehistoric village near to Lithios which is also an ancient village , that suggests that there may be some trading terms between those places whether by water ways or by land. There is nowhere mentioned that the villages is connected only by river brim, its just across one another. So maybe the trade was done through land, some other possible route.

Secondly, its mentioned that both Palea and Lithios are near to Brim river but there maybe more villages nearby which does trade of the same woven baskets with palea and in turns have traded those baskets to Lithios.

Thirdly, how can the researchers be so sure that they would have crossed the river only by boats maybe there were wooden bridges or some other means to cross the river not just boat is the only way. As time went by those debris are lost.

Fourthly, if we consider the fact that Paleans could have crossed river brim only by boat, maybe as it is the case of ancient age so the debris of boats have somehow vanished is not being found.

Fifth, we can hold into consideration that as this places were near to river brim so natural calamities could have washed away the goods from one village to other for which reason palean baskets are found in Lithios.

Thus examining all the various possibilities and factors ,whether the Woven baskets are uniquely Palean or not , more research work is required in this matter to know their actual originality, just a missing boat can’t cite the fact that the special woven baskets are not made by Palean.

 

 

Edited June 24, 2017 by tuli