Analyze an Argument for GRE

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The argument presented in this statement reveals multiple flaws.  The main flaw that becomes obvious to the reader is the assumption that there is sufficient evidence to point out a cause and effect between the increased numbers of skateboarders in the plaza area that can be linked to the number of shoppers that frequent the mall in Central Plaza. This renders its conclusion to be sorely lacking and insufficient in the changes suggested.

The argument does not provide sufficient evidence to reveal that within the span of 2 years the increased population of skateboarders can be linked to the success and sales of the mall within Central Plaza.  For one, it does not take into account what the population might have been 2 years ago and what economic or cultural changes have been occurring within the area for that span of time.  Has there been uncertain economical times that has caused a recent change in cultural climates in the area? Has the area invited in families of different social classes whether wealthy or poor and changed the spending levels of this particular area?  These factors are not presented or even taken into account in this particular argument, thereby leaving it void of any other deciding factors. 

Another prominent flaw in this argument is the cause and effect that is established with the skateboarding community to the increased crime in the area.  Is this really attributable to the increased presence of skateboarders?  Is it involved due to the changing population and the current climate of the culture shifts in the area?  What is the true driving force in the litter and vandalism that has become widespread in the area?  The argument fails to provide any convincing evidence that the skateboarding community is the leading factor in this latest presentation of evidence.

The idea that removing the skateboarding community can singlehandedly change the current situation of dropping sales without any real evidence of a correlation could be disastrous to an already struggling corporation if it really fails to target the problem with the true solution and lead to further alienation by the community and further damage the wellness of the business.   If the arguments had been able to provide more details that the skateboarding community had individuals heavily involved in different shady activities or were shown to be linked to the litter and vandalism, there would have been more validity to the claims.  Even then, one bad apple doesn’t define the whole lot, and would have required greater proof that more members of the community were all linked together.

Due to the flaws in this argument, we do not have sufficient evidence that removing the skateboarding community would cause a dramatic shift in the success of the sales at the mall in Central Plaza.