Does this sound okay? I removed identifying things about me from this essay:
In October 2003, I was diagnosed with a (illness) which later was discovered to be (illness). Treatment for this required me to be hospitalized for a surgery during finals week where they placed a (xxx) in me. Before I was diagnosed, I was often in the emergency room or at a doctor’s office due to the discomfort from my illness.
Because of this, I feel like it contributed to my low GPA due to the fact two of my classes, (class) and (class) were classes where attendance and my final project weighed heavily on my final grade. As a result, I received a 1.6 GPA for that semester. In the following semester, I was able to raise my GPA to a 2.2.
Medical documentation of this illness and treatment can be provided upon request.