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Hi I am struggling with GRE Analytical Writing Essay. I got 3.0 two times. I would really appreciate your help! The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment building to its manager. "One month ago, all the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately one-third of its original flow. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, restricting water flow throughout all the twenty floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase our profits further." 　　The author hastily put forward the solution to increase the profit of Sunnyside Towrs. At first glance the author's argument seems somewhat convincing. However, further reflection reveals that the statement omits some substantial concerns that should be adressed and thus it is not cogent enough to substantiate the argument. The argument at least suffers from at least three main logical flaws. 　　To start with, the author's assumption that the change will obviously result in a considerable saving for Sunnyside Corporation is unwarranted. This stamement is based on uncertain premise that the actual reading of water usage after the adjustment will be much lower than the one before the adjustment. It might be possible that people living in the higher floors are using more water because they do not get as much water pressure as before. For instance, if people cannot clean dirty dishes very well because of the lower water pressure, they would use more water for longer time in order to clean the dishes completely. If the author wants to substantiate his claim, he should wait and compare the actual reading of water usage before the adjustment and the one after. 　　In addition, the author stated that except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I believe that the author clearly failed to take those complaints seriously. Those complaints might be a tip of iceburg. Behind those few comoplaints, there might be many complaints and dissatisfaction that is not yet asserted. In order to support his claim, the author should take a questionnaire investigation to make sure that residents of the Sunnyside Tower appartment do not have any more complaints and dissatisfaction. 　　Finally, it should be noted that the owner wrote the letter one month after the adjustment. This fact would increase the possibility of people using more water for longer time without noticing. Also, there probably will be an increasing number of complaints since they would know the fact that the owner lowered the water pressure without notice in advance. 　　To sum up, the author has failed to substantiate his claim that restrictin of the water flow throughout all the twenty floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase their profits. The proof refered in the passage do not led the strong support to what the author maintains. Without additional evidence, howerver, we should be very circumspect about accepting the truth of the author's conclusion. (407words)

Thank you very much for your offer to review my essay. Any kind of help will be appreciated. I sent you a message. Thank you again

I am applying to Master's degree in petroleum engineering in the U.S. I am a foreigner and I don't have a great English Teacher to evaluate my Statement of Purpose. Could you please review my essay? I need your help. Please give a comment on this post or give me a private message and I will send you my SoP. Thank you.

Yeah, true. I might be too concerned about it verbal. I probably should work more on math. since my math score is kinda low for engineering degree. Thank you for your comment.

Your program sounds good. I only have less than 1 month. And your program cost $229, which is a lot for me, just for a couple of weeks. Any possible discount or refund in case I did not improve? (which will be a financial safety net)

Hi Thank you very much for all the comments. Especially Caffeinated's comment was very encouraging. I am not a native speaker. English is my second language. That is a big reason why I am having hard time on GRE. I tried Magoosh. I know it is a great program but for some reason, I did not manage to increase my score after doing all the questions on it. I am still using it though, reviewing those questions.

Thank you for your reply. Unfortunately, I am not be able to hire a private tutor for some reasons, unless I can find a tutor online who would agree with not so expensive payment. True, I probably should do my best this month and if it doesn't work then, I would have to apply for schools in low rank.

Hi I'm Yuki. I am a chemical engineering student in Japan. I took GRE twice already and did not improve much. My scores are August 5th Math: 158, Verbal: 146 AWA 3.0 October 11th Math: 159, Verbal : 146 During those GRE tests, I studied Barron's "1100 words you need to know" I used a program called Magoosh, did all the questions and watched most of verbal videos and math videos that I thought I need to watch. I memorized more than 1500 words with Quizlet. After the 2 months of hard work, nothing came out. I am in an engineering major, so I thought math would be easy but not really. I often make stupid mistakes and sometimes struggle with questions that I have no idea to solve, Also I still sometimes struggle with understanding word problems, interpreting word problems in English could be confusing. I feel defeated by not improving my scores but I decided to make another month to prepare to give it the last try. I am applying for grad schools in December and January. Please, I need some advice on what to study, how to study, from a non-native English speaker might be better. Thank you.