Thank you so much Takemycoffeeblack.I can't believe rearranging can make this much difference.That is so much better than the one I've first wrote. I'll include the university name and more information.
(I didn't include the types of work I've done in the first place because I'll put them in my portfolio.)
Thank you again for helping me. I'm really appreciate your help.
It's my first time writing sop and English isn't my native language so I'm really worry that I'm doing it wrong or there might be too much grammatical mistakes and unnatural sentences.
Appreciate if you take your time and give some feedback for this. Thanks in advance.
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