Cleven

While this may seem naive, I'm not exactly sure what the different between these two statements is, or more specifically, why we need to write two. I guess my problem might be I'm a naturally concise writer (I have an allergy to florid language and my prose is painted beige). So here's a list of questions to get the ball rolling: 1. What kind of personal information is expected in an autobio. sketch? How long should this be? I feel like my personal (and family) history is about as interesting as a gray wall, but that's beside the point... 2. In a statement of purpose (written by someone with a bachelors degree, which, as usual, means that my research and experiences is somewhat limited, of course...) what information should be included? Since this statement is less personal, should I jump right in or include a hook-like statement? Can some of the details covered in the Autobiographical be included in this statement (if they're relevant to both)? 3. What qualities do you think makes a good Autobio sketch and/or Sop; and why? I'll come up with more questions later, but let's begin with these!

I'll be honest, your "hook" is boring: "Questions about women’s healthcare in today’s society deeply interest me as an American woman during a historical moment in which women’s right to healthcare is being hotly contested. " It's too general, a bit awkward, and not very interesting. There's nothing about this sentence that grabs my attention, in fact, if I was a profession reading 500 applications, I'd probably not remember yours well enough to even consider it. What you need is more "spunk". Why in the world does this interest you, Alicia? I'm a woman too, but this topic doesn't interest me (well, more than any other topic in modern American history), but why did this catch your eye? What you need is to go a bit more personal. Dig a bit deeper. Don't just talk about the history, hook it in with who you are and why these professions locked in the back room should chose you for their graduate program.