[Physics International Applicant]

Definitely. You have a very good profile.

[Help with Statement of Purpose for PhD in Mech. Engineer?]

DM me. I will give it a shot.

[clinical psychology SOP critique request]

Sure. DM it, I will give it a shot.

[Review My Personal Statement (PhD Social Welfare) Please]

I first noticed this disparity five years ago when I was working with clients who had psychotic diagnoses.  

I'd advise you to rewrite the SoP. Probably, you can read some other SoPs related to you field and then come back to it after few days.

[How much will Oxford-educated help me out?]

To great extent. I believe Oxford didn't only gift you a name tag to boast off, it introduced you to a network of smart people who will always be of help. Moreover, the recommendation letters that you will get from your professors bear a commendable weight.

[MS Material Science SOP Critique]

Definitely. Inbox them to me.

[SOP - Research interests]

Nope. If you have diversified interests, do mention them. You can always narrow it down after you get admitted.

[SOP Help? (I'll edit yours if you edit mine!)]

These academic projects have augmented my desire to continue participating in a high level scientific education through graduate school and have been enhanced by my research experiences.

 We treated TNF double knockout . Who ?

My goal is to pursue a career path in scientific research that allows me to design experiments and projects investigating the molecular mechanisms and consequences of immune cell regulation through signaling. Such as ?

I believe  Graduate school will facilitate the necessary training for a career in scientific research.

 Dr. Oettinger is one of several faculty members with research applicable related/similar to my interests and career goals . So ? What purpose this sentence serves?

[Please help review my SOP]

The upshot was that I grew up with a dedication to what something which I considered to be the “true” form of the Christian faith, which to and my faith was fully grounded in the teachings of Bible. For me, the Bible was the word of God, and it contained no error whatsoever . I considered the Bible to be the word of God which contains no errors.

On the other hand, my contact with Biblical Studies has raised many questions in my mind regarding the faith such as: .....

as the research interests of some of the scholars align with my own

my scholarship, and as a result, develop my life as a Christian.

Furthermore, and in light of your dDepartment’s commitment to diversity, I am convinced that as a Nigerian, I can contribute by bringing in an African-Protestant experience and perspective on the Bible and faith which will, no doubt, aid in broadening the academic and theological horizons of my prospective teachers and colleagues .

 Likewise, I myself will be enriched by interacting directly with non-African and non-Protestant views. Consider rewriting and/or reframing this sentence.

On the whole, it is my utmost desire to work with the entire community at Notre Dame in my pursuit of graduate theological studies. Consider rewriting and/or reframing this sentence. It's not clear what you meant to say.

[supplemental essay topic - which one is strongest?]

I'd have chosen point number 2.

[My Finalized Statement of Purpose and Personal Anecdote for Fletcher]

 International Negotiation and Conflict Resolution, and Southwest Asia and Islamic Civilization or  'International Negotiation and Conflict Resolution' and 'Southwest Asia and Islamic Civilization'. Amend the line by choosing any of these two.

You haven't mentioned anywhere about your undergraduate degree, what you learned from it, and how that lead to your current motivation. Please try to give some academic examples showing how you are credible to stand the rigorous academic load of MALD program.

I realized that this threat, the wall, and the loaded guns are were a feature of daily life for Palestinians.

 

[Please can anyone be of assistance in reviewing my SoP?]

''The second strand of my research, located in the sub-field of International Relations, is an area I have considerable professional and academic experience: “international norms on natural resource governance. ''

-international  International

Here, I am interested in the question of why despite the proliferation of global governance mechanisms to promote sustainable utilization of natural resources in resource-rich developing countries, these problems are hardly surmounted.
:-- Which problems ?

'' Both my educational and professional experiences have prepared me for [insert name of university] graduate program. During my honors program, I was successful in balancing my time between work, school and extracurricular affairs, by graduating top of the class with the Dean’s Award. In graduate school, my essay won the Graduate Paper Award in Political Economy. I have recently completed a certificate program in Survey Methodology in [insert name of state], [insert name of country], and I consider this experience a significant part of my education. Apart from broadening my horizon, study abroad has improved my research skills, enabling me to present my research to students and scholars working in the area of research methods and resource governance. My wonderful performance in the course is a recent accomplishment that further demonstrates my preparation for a PhD program. ;;

:--- These info have already been given in your CV. Other than affirming those again, try to give the reader some exclusive views of your research experience.

'' not as a sage on the stage but as a guide on the side ''

:-- Cliche 

Ultimately, however, your PhD program will enhance my career goals, by honing my research skills, as well as a professional stepping stone to my career.

:   Ultimately, this PhD program will enhance my overall credentials by honing my research skills, and will serve as a professional stepping stone to my career.

 

 

[A little help on SOP intro for MPH please?? Thanks!!!]

'Growing up in a doctors’ family, I understand the importance of medicine from a very young age .

''As a result of my professional experiences in Chinese hospital and women’s federation during summer breaks, and later 1.5 year full time in medical technology industry ...''

: During which summer break ? What was the duration ? What did you do ?
Which medical company ? What was your post ? How did you learn ?

''With the current political environment in China, I believe good public health policies are essential and I am motivated to make a difference''

: How is that current political environment related to good public health policies ? Do not expect the reader to know everything. He doesn't.