leighfritz

Hi All! I'm hoping to get some feedback on this practice essay from the issue topic section of the GRE. Looking for a few (or many) people who are willing to grade this against the ETS GRE AWA rubric (copied below). Thanks! Prompt: Essay Response: Essay Grading Rubric: Score 6 Outstanding In addressing the specific task directions, a 6 response presents a cogent, well-articulated analysis of the issue and conveys meaning skillfully. A typical response in this category: articulates a clear and insightful position on the issue in accordance with the assigned task develops the position fully with compelling reasons and/or persuasive examples sustains a well-focused, well-organized analysis, connecting ideas logically conveys ideas fluently and precisely, using effective vocabulary and sentence variety demonstrates superior facility with the conventions of standard written English (i.e., grammar, usage and mechanics), but may have minor errors Score 5 Strong In addressing the specific task directions, a 5 response presents a generally thoughtful, well-developed analysis of the issue and conveys meaning clearly. A typical response in this category: presents a clear and well-considered position on the issue in accordance with the assigned task develops the position with logically sound reasons and/or well-chosen examples is focused and generally well organized, connecting ideas appropriately conveys ideas clearly and well, using appropriate vocabulary and sentence variety demonstrates facility with the conventions of standard written English, but may have minor errors Score 4 Adequate In addressing the specific task directions, a 4 response presents a competent analysis of the issue and conveys meaning with acceptable clarity. A typical response in this category: presents a clear position on the issue in accordance with the assigned task develops the position with relevant reasons and/or examples is adequately focused and organized demonstrates sufficient control of language to express ideas with acceptable clarity generally demonstrates control of the conventions of standard written English, but may have some errors Score 3 Limited A 3 response demonstrates some competence in addressing the specific task directions, in analyzing the issue and in conveying meaning, but is obviously flawed. A typical response in this category exhibits ONE OR MORE of the following characteristics: is vague or limited in addressing the specific task directions and in presenting or developing a position on the issue or both is weak in the use of relevant reasons or examples or relies largely on unsupported claims is limited in focus and/or organization has problems in language and sentence structure that result in a lack of clarity contains occasional major errors or frequent minor errors in grammar, usage or mechanics that can interfere with meaning Score 2 Seriously Flawed A 2 response largely disregards the specific task directions and/or demonstrates serious weaknesses in analytical writing. A typical response in this category exhibits ONE OR MORE of the following characteristics: is unclear or seriously limited in addressing the specific task directions and in presenting or developing a position on the issue or both provides few, if any, relevant reasons or examples in support of its claims is poorly focused and/or poorly organized has serious problems in language and sentence structure that frequently interfere with meaning contains serious errors in grammar, usage or mechanics that frequently obscure meaning Score 1 Fundamentally Deficient A 1 response demonstrates fundamental deficiencies in analytical writing. A typical response in this category exhibits ONE OR MORE of the following characteristics: provides little or no evidence of understanding the issue provides little or no evidence of the ability to develop an organized response (e.g., is disorganized and/or extremely brief) has severe problems in language and sentence structure that persistently interfere with meaning contains pervasive errors in grammar, usage or mechanics that result in incoherence Score 0 Off topic (i.e., provides no evidence of an attempt to address the assigned topic), is in a foreign language, merely copies the topic, consists of only keystroke characters or is illegible or nonverbal. Score NS The essay response is blank.