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Hello, can anyone critique my practice GRE essays? ISSUE ESSAY Prompt: Technology, while apparently aimed to simplify our lives, only makes our lives more complicated. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Technology is a growing industry over the last decade. In a quickly growing world, technology has to keep up with the demand of their consumers. Many individuals are continuing to adopt this field with the goal to discover new and better forms of technology to create a easier way of life. Technology is aimed to simplify our lives, not complicate it further. Technology has always been fast growing, from the cell phone cars to light weight touch screen cell phones. Technology has always given individuals a way to communicate. A letter that would've taken weeks to send across the country now can be sent in seconds through a cell phone or e-mail. This ability to communicate has made lives more simple and allowed individuals to stay close to connected to others all around the world. It's easy to say that none of those connections could have been as sturdy if it weren't for computers, phones, facetime etc. Through out this busy society the best way to stay in contact is through technology. The birth of technology immediately gave individuals a sense of freedom. The sense of freedom where they can travel, and be less dependent on their lives at home. Allowing an individual to travel and experience the world is a great way to broaden their minds by experiencing a new culture and make them appreciate what they have or where they come from. If technology never continued to grow individuals would still not know whats out in the world, yet alone be able to experience it for themselves. Although technology has made life more simplistic due to all the power one holds in a device, it also has created individuals that cannot think for themselves and have become dependent on their phone or technology within their everyday lives. Being dependent on technology would create individuals that have a lack of knowledge in specific areas such as directions, mental math, searches, and spelling. many of us as a society have learned that life is easier when the answer can be given to us through our technology than actually working to get it. Many millennial today don't know directions or how to read a map. They also struggle to do mental math or spell words because a calculator or spell check is so readily at their finger tips. Even though technology is making lives more simply, is it making everyday lives more dependent on it to function. ARGUMENT ESSAY Prompt: SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision. Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted. The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. The argument is primarily based on the unstated assumptions that moving Supercorp to Corporateville was the best decision. This argument fails to give any justification that the move to Corporateville from Middlesburg will provide the company with the best outcome. Prior to moving to Corporateville, SuperCorp should have done more thorough background checks to insure that the moved would have been the best decision. Even though there was surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville the information does not provide any statistical amount. The surge may have increased, but the question is by how much and whether or not there is enough homes to provide housing for the employees of SuperCorp if they were to move. SuperCorp chose to provide employees with a survey to determine whether or not they are in support of the move. The assumption is that all the majority stated they would rather live in Corporateville. However, the argument failed to state if every employee took the survey and the percentage of employees that approved and disapproved of the move. Providing the reasons for employees to approve the move and the exact percentages would greatly strengthen the argument. Lastly, the argument states that Coporateville has lower taxes, which makes it cheaper and safer to live. In order to strengthen this argument, it would have to prove that by having lower taxes it automatically makes the town safer to live in. The argument should provide statistical comparisons between Middlesburg and Coporatevilles taxes, resident population, and background. The argument would have to further provide more statistical evidence that the move from Middlesburg to Corporatville was the best decision for not just the company, but the employees as well.