Ze HeadBanger

Mechanical Engineering has combined the practicality of mathematics with the limitless creativity of science like no other field of engineering. Hence, as an individual with an active interest in this global phenomenon, it was only natural for me to embark on my journey in the field of Mechanical Engineering in XXXXX School of Engineering. this is my oening pararaph..an extremely concise one.but i thoought that a brief yet "catchy" opening para would be a good bet... what do u think?? what else should i add to it..or is just too flashy???