To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

[aj518]

Societies' individuality and originality is well kept and seen where the society is present in majority. Studying the major cites may reveal some important and interesting characteristics of the society that are otherwise hidden. 
By studying the major cities we will know about the proper functioning of the society. We will have collective groups of people, which will certainly be bigger in the major city of the society. So, by studying the bigger group or more people our studies will yield results that will more accurate and precise, than studying the cities where less people of that particular society are present. If I talk about studying Muslims, what Muslims do, how do they live, how do they react to certain things, how do they see the world and many more such things, we will have to study the cities where they are present in in majority. If we go to the city where the Muslims are present in very less number, then the originality of the society is lost. Their daily actions will have the influence of other societies, that are present in majority. And, if we are to study the same group of people when they are surrounded by the people of same community and society, they will act very differently. They will have more originality, their decision making would be free of all the influence, and one would be able to see the uniqueness of the society. 
But sometimes it may happen that society as a whole has lost it's uniqueness or originality. Let's consider India is still being ruled by the British. It never got it's freedom. So, the people of India would have had their lifestyle and actions completely influenced by the British. So, India as a society would have completely lost it's identity and uniqueness. In order to study what Indians were used to be like, we would have to study certain groups of people who fled the country to save their lives and they will most probably have more of the cultural heritage and the Indian identity to them. So, here studying India's major cities or the people living in India for that matter won't give the accurate account of what Indians were used to be like. 
So, to study about the most important characteristics of the society we have to study the major cities, considering those cities still have the characteristics and originality treasured in them. Otherwise, it would just be a waste of time, energy and resources. 

[rising_star]

What is this exactly?

[aj518]

As I am preparing for GRE , I just wanted to know the ways by which I can improve my writing. 

[01sonal]

On 3/13/2018 at 2:40 AM, aj518 said:

Societies' individuality and originality is well kept and seen where the society is present in majority. Studying the major cites may reveal some important and interesting characteristics of the society that are otherwise hidden. 
By studying the major cities we will know about the proper functioning of the society. We will have collective groups of people, which will certainly be bigger in the major city of the society. So, by studying the bigger group or more people our studies will yield results that will more accurate and precise, than studying the cities where less people of that particular society are present. If I talk about studying Muslims, what Muslims do, how do they live, how do they react to certain things, how do they see the world and many more such things, we will have to study the cities where they are present in in majority. If we go to the city where the Muslims are present in very less number, then the originality of the society is lost. Their daily actions will have the influence of other societies, that are present in majority. And, if we are to study the same group of people when they are surrounded by the people of same community and society, they will act very differently. They will have more originality, their decision making would be free of all the influence, and one would be able to see the uniqueness of the society. 
But sometimes it may happen that society as a whole has lost it's uniqueness or originality. Let's consider India is still being ruled by the British. It never got it's freedom. So, the people of India would have had their lifestyle and actions completely influenced by the British. So, India as a society would have completely lost it's identity and uniqueness. In order to study what Indians were used to be like, we would have to study certain groups of people who fled the country to save their lives and they will most probably have more of the cultural heritage and the Indian identity to them. So, here studying India's major cities or the people living in India for that matter won't give the accurate account of what Indians were used to be like. 
So, to study about the most important characteristics of the society we have to study the major cities, considering those cities still have the characteristics and originality treasured in them. Otherwise, it would just be a waste of time, energy and resources. 

I think this might be better in the GRE forum. However, since it's here, I will provide some feedback. First, it would be helpful for you to provide the prompt, so that whoever is reading knows what the requirements asked of you were. 

I will not comment on grammar, but rather content. I am guessing that this is for the Argument Essay. 

First, I am not quite convinced by the argument that, in order to understand a society, we must study the major cities within it. There are many types of societies - the society of a country as a whole, the society of a particular ethnic group within a country, urban societies, rural societies, religious societies, and so on. Studying an urban society will not tell us about the society of a country as a whole; in order to understand the latter, we would need to study several of the smaller communities within that society, which would include all of the types of societies I mentioned before. Perhaps thinking more generally about societies would solve this issue? Or, naming specifically what kind of society you are referring to (in this case, urban societies) would also solve the issue. 

Second, it is factually incorrect that India is still under colonial rule. India has been independent of British rule since 1947. Also, I am again unconvinced by the argument that early immigrants would be more "purely" Indian than those who stayed in India throughout colonial rule. Would Indian immigrants not be influenced by the culture of the new society to which they fled? That makes them no more "authentically" Indian than those who stayed in India and were culturally influenced by the British empire. 

Edited March 21, 2018 by 01sonal