Can someone Help me To review my Sop for Physics Masters

[punter196]

SOP
In my opinion, gaining knowledge about the nature is the only way the Human beings has evolved. Since my childhood, I have always wondered about the grand nature of universe when i used to look up in the sky. Barely I could understand anything and I just used to gaze at the dots of light those filled the sky.
I am very curious about things and sometimes i get impatient when i dont get the reason behind how things work. When is was in 6th Std in school we had a topic in our science textbook named "The Universe" . This particular topic amazed me so much as the grand nature of universe was explained in that chapter and that lit the fire of curiousity inside me. I started Reading books and started looking for articles those were related to to universe.

My family was not financially sound, my father didn't had a job and mother used work as a maid in others house. On one side I had a larger aspiration of knowning the unknown about universe and on the other I had responsibilities to support my family. Due to financial issues I had to leave school in std 7th as my parents were unable to pay the fees. 2 years I helped my family financially as getting food became the primary task for us. That was the worst phase of my life. I had accepted that, this is the way things are going to be, and all my aspirations were doomed. I started working in Cyber cafe as attendant, I used to surf internet and read about the Universe on internet. That was the first time i came to know about Astronomy. That was it, I was sure that this is the field in which i have to persue my career in. I started searching for different ways by which I could do it. but basic school education completion was required.  I came to know about a scheme in which I could appear 10th standard examination as Private candidate. I started preparing for 10th Std examination along with the work that i used to do in cybercafe. I completed my 10th With a decent score of 83.69% without attending school and prepared completely on my own.

Now I was 1 Step closer to my dream of becoming Astronomer. Truely speaking Astronomy is the only field where you dont need a degree you just need a open sky with good eyesight. My parents enrolled me into college for Standard 11th.  The financial situation at home was the same so i had to work and help family, so i decided to work in a coaching institute where i also attend some lectures. It was the best decision because now i had access to all the books from library. I started developing interest in Physics and Mathematics. I started preparing for 11th and then 12th standard examination in which i scored 86.67% with 95/100 in physics and 98/100 in maths. But alongside we have Engineering entrance exam MHT-CET Based on Physics, Chemistry and Mathematics for getting into engineering college in state of Maharashtra, India. In this exam, I score 196/200 and stood 1st in My district and 4th in the state in which about about 2 to 3 lac students appear.

As i wanted to support my family Engineering was the only field which could easily fetch me a good job so i enrolled into a prestigious College in the state of Maharashtra named College of Engineering Pune (COEP) in Mechanical Engineering as i thought that it was the only field that could keep me in touch with Physics upto certain extent. I started working after college hour in the coaching institutes in my area, where  I discovered my interest in teaching. As i started Teaching Physics my interest in Studying Physics and Teaching increased to a large extent. But since I was enrolled in Mechanical Engineering I had to complete the Course. Honestly speaking I never felt excited studying engineering and enjoyed teaching physics more after the college hours.

During My Third Year of Engineering, I lost my brother in an accident and we as a family were in a shock of losing him and that also cost us financially. The hospitalization  was very expensive we were into debt and getting out of it was very difficult. I started My own Coaching Academy to support my family. After completing my engineering in 2014 I continued Teaching students in my academy. Meanwhile my interest in Physics and Astronomy was constantly bogging me down and I constantly kept questioning myself about my work. Although I really love teaching students but it was at the expense of Sacrificing my childhood dream. I focused on my coaching academy ad I had to support my family financially so I had no choice. It took me about 3-4 years to clear all the debts and now I want to live my dream.

Edited October 7, 2019 by punter196

[Nacychuks]

I spotted several grammatical errors across each paragraphs. Also, I like the way you pitch your ideas, but your SOP needs to be refined all over again before final submission. 

The flow needs to be dynamic and I think you have a good stand if you could work on the SOP once again.