SOP Review please

[xva13]

Hi everyone, with application season in full swing I have been feverishly writing out a generalized version of the SOP that I will then tailor to be more applicable to individual schools. If anyone has the extra time to spare, it would be greatly appreciated if you could view over my SOP and give some constructive criticism about where I need to improve and alter what I've wrote. I will be providing an attachment below, but if you would prefer me to DM it to you I would be more than happy to oblige. If you would like to do a swap as well in order to be more enticed I would be happy to do so as well. Thanks everyone :)

Grad Cafe SOP Review.pdf