Asking for Recommendation Letters

[Sury]

Hello all,

I am applying for a PhD in Business Administration for Fall 2013 and need to send a request to the professors for teh letter of recomendation. I am not sure what should I write in the email and for this reason I prepared a draft and would like to have some insights about this.

ps. the email is going for a professor who I already informed about my future plans (pursuing a PhD) and I am sending it viam email since I am living outside US right now.

"Dear Professor XXX,

I hope this email finds you well.

By this e mail, I would like to ask if you would be kind enough, to write recommendation letter for my next application for a PhD program in Strategic Management, focusing my future studies in global strategy in developing economies, as well as, technology and innovation.

While studying at Brandeis University, I enjoyed attending Competition & Strategy classes (Spring 2011). I strongly believe that this class contributed to my development and growth as well as it helped to increase my interest in this field.

I believe that as my teacher you noticed my approach and dedication to academics and that is the reason why I take the liberty to ask for such a recommendation letter.

I am currently applying for admission for fall 2013 and I have selected a universe of six universities to apply.

My first choice is the University of Pittsburg (Joseph M. Katz Graduate School of Business), as I have intended to move to the area and it offers a distinguished faculty some of them with research connected with my proposed area of study. Additionally, the university is widely recognized as a top contributor to the research field.

I have included a summary of my academic and professional experience to help you decide whether to recommend me.

Should you decide to give me a recommendation letter, I will send you a draft of my statement of purpose, copies of my transcripts, my resume and any other materials you think would help you in the evaluation process.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you!

Sincerely,"

Thanks

[MCS_aspirant]

I would say make it a bit shorter; I wouldn't explain why XYZ university is my first choice. Include the earliest deadline for recommendation letter!

I think "I will send you a draft of my statement of purpose, copies of my transcripts, my resume and any other materials you think would help you in the evaluation process." is somewhat unnecessary. You may want to include instead that you are outside of the USA, and couldn't meet in person.

[Sury]

Thank you very much.

"Dear Professor XXX,

I hope this email finds you well.

By this e mail, I would like to ask if you would be kind enough, to write recommendation letter for my next application for a PhD program in Strategic Management, focusing my future studies in global strategy in developing economies, as well as, technology and innovation. Currently I am living and working outside US, reason why I am not able to meet you in person.

While studying at XXX University, I enjoyed attending Competition & Strategy classes (Spring 2011). I strongly believe that this class contributed to my development and growth as well as it helped to increase my interest in this field.

I believe that as my teacher you noticed my approach and dedication to academics and that is the reason why I take the liberty to ask for such a recommendation letter.

I am currently applying for admission for fall 2013 and I have selected a universe of six universities to apply, with the earliest deadline for the applications being in early January.

I have included a summary of my academic and professional experience to help you decide whether to recommend me.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you!

Sincerely,"

I changed a bit do you think it looks better or should I make it shorter?

[MCS_aspirant]

Looks fine to me, may be someone else can give you some more suggestions.

[Sury]

Thank you.

I sent already and got a positive feedback