Help for my personal statement:give your remark

[doslearner]

 Please your remarks and suggestions will help me improve. i am applying for Msc management and accounting. they asked for personal statement. here is my mine.tell me about it and make suggestion please 

 

 

 

      In my opinion, Accounting is part of human’s everyday life. All over the globe disregard of languages or cultures, people use Accounting techniques to solve their money problems. It can be things they do in their daily life. For example: checking how much money they have in their pocket or in their bank account, or again how much they have spent in purchasing a product or service; or they use it in businesses and large–scale transactions where it is commonly know.

 

As for me, my interest for Accounting truly started when I took the Bachelor of Business Management course in India after completed a Baccalaureate degree in Literature in my country. Being new to this course and department, Accountancy was the first subject I found truly fascinated and intriguing at same time. Fascinated by the various processes, methods and techniques used to express a real life business transaction into a money language and intrigued by the rational logic behind each demarche.

 

The course of business management changed my goals in life as a whole. But the subject of Management Accounting alone has pushed me to dream big and helped me set to myself all new objectives. It truly helped me to understand how the world of business operates and how companies run their business in everyday life and how they can forecast their future success or failure. More, it has truly driven me to be more interested in all money related subjects and excelled in them at college.

My project on “Working Capital Management at HMT LIMITED (India)” in the last year of my degree has really convinced me that Accountancy is the field in which I would like to perform later in my life. The 3 months I spent working on the project and the two weeks I took to collect data and analyzed them with the company’s accountancy officer truly shaped in me the sense of responsibility, dedication and communication with others.

 

After my Bachelor’s degree I’ve got an internship in an immigration company in India. My responsibilities are to teach French, guide and advise worker wishing to settle in Quebec. Even though that the internship is not truly links to the Accountancy field, it has helped me improved my skills in communication, sense of responsibility, and developed others skills like collaboration and sense of integration which I think are truly necessary to be good at Accountancy and do good in the field of management as a whole.

My goal today is to establish my own Business Company or work as a senior manager in a business company after my master’s degree and in order to achieve that goal, a good understanding of Accounting is crucial and important. I am hoping that University will provide me with more insight of the Accounting world as well as offering me a wide range of choices and connections after my course.

My social life involve going out with my friends, watching movies, playing basket ball and making websites. My love for web designing help me developed with my friends a database-driven website like EBay for my country.

 

To conclude, I assure you that if given the opportunity, I will prove myself a capable, responsible and dedicated student. I know I have the right amount of interest in Accountancy as a subject and have the right skills to do well in order to achieve my set dream. Lastly, I believe that I have the require commitment and determination to complete this course successfully.     

[Tuck]

There is a subforum on statements of purpose that has lots of info you may find helpful.

 

For starters, I would talk more specifically about experiences and accomplishments that will show you are prepared for this program, and omit other material. You should find a native English speaker with proven writing abilities to work with you on proofreading, as there are some grammatical issues. Good luck!