Can anyone critique my personal statement? Urgent! MS in Marine Bio.

[BattlePope]

Hi guys,

 

I'm going to be submitting my applications tomorrow and was wondering if anyone would be willing to look over my personal statement. It's for a master's program in biology with an emphasis on marine biology. I would really, really appreciate it. 

 

Thank you so much.

[Marina CM]

Yes I am willing, send it to me!