SOP. Please go through my SOP and suggest any changes required.Thank you

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Can i add that i came from agricultural background and i want to learn plc programming and in future i want to adopt that into agriculture and grow crops and animal husbandry in more scientific way and get more yield. I wanna work for 5years return to my city and start agriculture. If so , how can i fit it in sop?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 A fascination for Science and Technology and a keen interest in the ever-growing world of technology motivated me to pursue engineering. I chose to major in Instrumentation Engineering with an intense urge to delve into the challenging field. During my undergraduation program I learned the various fundamentals of Instrumentation. Engineering which together with practical course work reinforced interest. Technology development from manual to automatic working inspired me to take up Instrumentation Engineering in my bachelor degree in BVB College of Engineering & Technology.

 

During the course of my undergraduate study I was exposed to various courses with applications like Control Systems, Power Electronic, Electrical measurements, Linear Integrated Circuits, Electronics, digital circuits, Digital Signal Processing and Micro Controllers. But I always had an interest in Programmable Logic Controllers and its programming. To acquire more knowledge in PLC programming, obtained CAE (Certified Automation Engineer) from Technocrat Automation Pvt Limited (IAO Accredited), Chennai. I received 2 months hands on practical experience in Industrial Automation Tools specializing in PLC, SCADA and VFD.

To further my knowledge, I developed two projects, both based on automation. One such project, in my fifth semester, a ”Soft technique toothbrush” for disabled persons with no hands can brush independently and it was  selected for project exhibition  at my college. In my final year planned to involve agricultural field since I come from an agricultural background with automation so I opted for a robot which can sow seeds and spray medicine and water which made sowing task easier, consumed less water and increased efficiency.  

I would like to pursue an MS in Automation and control engineering in your esteemed college. I realize the need for me to study at the center stage of activity in these fields at your college in USA. My earnest desire to continue my future studies at your graduate school stems from it being one of the top colleges having a fine record of academic excellence and is backed up by expert faculty and research facilities.

Your esteemed college is that it provides the kind of exposure needed to broaden my thinking and. Your college is a confluence of people from every nationality, religion and race. Overall development of the personality can be done and it helps me to broaden my concept from the narrower confines of nationalism to internationalism. 

I am fully aware about yours curriculum and I aver that I have the necessary commitment, intelligence and stamina to look forward to do it all. I am convinced that my study at your department would be meaningful and rewarding experience. I look forward to have a long and profitable association with your esteemed college.

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As a potential international student, you should write your SOP always from an academic standpoint. Your reasons for wanting to study at this particular university in the USA should really only focus on the academic culture that is available there that you believe cannot be found at a local university. This can include the types of professors, courses, and resources that are available at your target university. So remove all the references you have to the USA being a great country(which it is) and the other verbage. This makes you seem as though you only want a visa. This may turn some admissions officers off. You also need to flush out more your experiences and research positions. Also, you need to talk about a proposed plan. What will you do once you have this degree? Why are you really seeking an advanced degree at this time. You have most of the elements of a great SOP, I will help you make it perfect. - Admissions Advice Online

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 A fascination for Science and Technology and a keen interest in the ever-growing world of technology motivated me to pursue engineering. I chose to major in Instrumentation Engineering with an intense urge to delve into the challenging field. During my undergraduation program I learned the various fundamentals of Instrumentation. Engineering which together with practical course work reinforced interest. Technology development from manual to automatic working inspired me to take up Instrumentation Engineering in my bachelor degree in BVB College of Engineering & Technology.

 

Coming from an agricultural family, somewhere at bottom of my heart I always wanted to do agriculture and animal husbandry. When I was in Engineering, I have decided to do agricultural but scientifically and including automation wherever necessary. My plan is to acquire more knowledge in automation, work for some time to gain experience and get back to agriculture.

 

During the course of my undergraduate study I was exposed to various courses with applications like Control Systems, Power Electronic, Electrical measurements, Linear Integrated Circuits, Electronics, digital circuits, Digital Signal Processing and Micro Controllers. But I always had an interest in Programmable Logic Controllers and its programming. To acquire more knowledge in PLC programming, obtained CAE (Certified Automation Engineer) from Technocrat Automation Pvt Limited (IAO Accredited), Chennai. I received 2 months hands on practical experience in Industrial Automation Tools specializing in PLC, SCADA and VFD.

To further my knowledge, I developed two projects, both based on automation. One such project, in my fifth semester, a”Soft technique toothbrush” for disabled persons with no hands can brush independently and it was selected for project exhibition at my college. In my final year planned to involve agricultural field since I come from an agricultural background with automation so I opted for a robot which can sow seeds and spray medicine and water which made sowing task easier, consumed less water and increased efficiency.  

I would like to pursue an MS in Automation and control engineering in your esteemed college. I realize the need for me to study at the center stage of activity in these fields at your college in USA. My earnest desire to continue my future studies at your graduate school stems from it being one of the top colleges having a fine record of academic excellence and is backed up by expert faculty and research facilities.

Your esteemed college is that it provides the kind of exposure needed to broaden my thinking and. Your college is a confluence of people from every nationality, religion and race. Overall development of the personality can be done and it helps me to broaden my concept from the narrower confines of nationalism to internationalism. 

I am fully aware about yours curriculum and I aver that I have the necessary commitment, intelligence and stamina to look forward to do it all. I am convinced that my study at your department would be meaningful and rewarding experience. I look forward to have a long and profitable association with your esteemed college.