Purpose in SOP

[Saman]

Hi People,

 

I have been writing my SOP for the last 15 days or so and finally sent it to some folks for review. Some of them replied and said that I didn't mention my purpose properly for pursuing 'I/O Psychology in Doctoral Program'. I didn't understand exactly what they meant ?

 

Though in the last paragraph, I have mentioned that I want to work in applied settings as a Consultant and wants to explore my research interest further. 

 

My question is that: isn't it enough as far as purpose is concerned in SOP ? if it's not enough then what else I should add to make it seem like I have a solid purpose of pursuing PhD in the same subject. Do I have to add a story which can make it a bit flowery ? 

 

Please let me know your thoughts as I am in the last phase of my SOP.

 

Thank you very much for your time.

[BeingThere]

You may want to ask them what they meant.  Having not read your SOP, I also have no idea what they meant.

 

I will say that if what you wrote above is all wrote in the SOP, then it is not nearly detailed enough.  It's a two-part (or more) question.  Why I/O psych?  And why a PhD?  And, thirdly, why the particular program (school)?  Answer those three clearly and in enough detail so that they know you  a)have spent considerable time thinking about your career path/goals; b.) have spent considerable time working toward that path/goal (e.g. undergrad research and presentations; reading on the research topics you are interested in); and c) have chosen to apply to the particular program because it aligns with a and b. 

 

But, bottom line, you will have to ask your reviewers what they meant by their comments.

Edited October 15, 2014 by Bren2014