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[dagkoc]

Please could you look as i am not native speaker ?

 

“The only source of knowledge is experience.” Albert Einstein

My long term goal is to study how neuroendocrinological changes may affect behaviour and cognition. As a child I felt in love in “small thingy that changes everything” - endocrinology as my mother and I often visited clinical endocrinologist due to her illness- Addisson's Disease. Over the year I begun to observe psychological and cognition changes developing in patients with endocrinological diseases. In search for responses I decided to studying Medicine first, but as my interest in research grow, I transferred to Biomedical Sciences. Seeking Additional experiences and elucidation to some of my childhood questions I stumbled upon studies of Professor m and it pounded me that neuroendocrinology is what I have been looking for. My driving motivation in pursuing career is passion for science amd teaching, transition of “bench science” to clinical practice.

The words of Alfred Einstein, “If you can't explain it simply, you don't understand it well enough.” inspired me to challenge myself by teaching some lay- back audience neuroscientific concepts in Famelab competition, where I became a Scottish laureate. It was a great joy to fascinate public with neuroscience and possibly implant future passion. Althouht the road to Academia is often long and rocky I would like to become in future become a good professor with equal pleasure from teaching as from research. In order to pursue these long term goal I have decided to contact with professor M strengthen my lab skills and knowledge irreplaceable in pursuing PhD and later post-doc.

This research grant would allow me to gain essential experience in a lab setting among magnificent faculty, necessary to pursue future career in academia. This experience will teach me various scientific techniques in practice such as immunochemistry, western blotting, data collection and analysis, which will be substantially benefiting me in my future research career. 

[kimmibeans]

My long term goal is to study how neuroendocrinological changes may affect behaviour and cognition. As a child I felt fell in love in idea of a “small thingy thing that changes everything” - endocrinology as my mother and I often visited clinical endocrinologist due to her illness- Addisson's Disease.  when I would go with my mother to her endocrinologist to help with her Addisson's Disease. Over the year that I went with her to the doctor I begun began to observe the psychological and cognition changes developing in patients with endocrinological diseases. In search for responses of answers, I decided to try studying Medicine first, but as my interest in research grow, I transferred to studying Biomedical Sciences. Seeking Aadditional experiences and elucidation to some of my childhood questions, I stumbled upon the studies of Professor m and it pounded hit me that neuroendocrinology is what I have been looking for. My driving motivation in pursuing a career in research is passion for science amd and teaching, and the transition of “bench science” to clinical practice.

The words of Alfred Albert Einstein's famous words “If you can't explain it simply, you don't understand it well enough,” inspired me to challenge myself by teaching some lay- back audiences neuroscientific concepts in the Famelab competition, where I became a Scottish laureate (Ed Note: I'm not exactly sure what you mean by this. Did you win a prize?). It was a great joy to fascinate public with neuroscience and possibly implant future passion into some of them. Althouht Although the road to Aacademia is often long and rocky, I would like to eventually become in future become a good professor with who gains equal as much pleasure from teaching as from he/she does from research. In order to pursue these long term goals, I have decided to contact with professor M in order to strengthen my lab skills and knowledge irreplaceable gain irreplaceable knowledge in pursuing a PhD and later post-doc under his/her mentorship.

This research grant would allow me to gain essential experience in a lab setting among magnificent faculty, which is necessary to pursue a future career in academia. This experience will teach me various scientific techniques, in practice such as immunochemistry, wWestern blotting, data collection, and analysis, which will be substantially benefiting beneficial to me in my future research career. 

[kimmibeans]

I hope that helps. Everything in red is what I changed or added. I tried to keep as much of the original language as possible. If anybody else has anything to add, feel free.

Edited March 18, 2015 by kimmibeans

[dagkoc]

Dear Kimmibeans, i cannot praise enough for your help!