Critique Needed: GRE Issue Essay

[Bwilso94]

Hey all,

I Have been using Magoosh for a while now in preparation for my GRE in a couple weeks.  I am pretty confident in both my quant & verbal performance so far, but feel less certain about my AWA skills.  I am attatching my first practice essay if anyone could please review it for me.  Thanks!

 

Prompt: 

A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

GRE Rubric:

6 - Insightful analysis and superior language

5 - Generally thoughtful analysis, focused and organized

4 - Competent analysis and reasonable clarity

3 - Limited analysis or weak organization

2 - Lack of analysis or organization and problems with language

1 - Confusing or irrelevant content

Practice Issue Topic 1 National Curriculum.docx

[Brent@GreenlightGRE]

As you can see, A LOT of people are posting their AW essays on this forum, but those essays seldom get reviewed. If you'd like to useful feedback, you might want to use ETS's ScoreItNow service (https://www.dxrgroup.com/cgi-bin/scoreitnow/index.pl) and get two essays scored by the official scoring system ($20 fee)

Cheers,

Brent