Kindly help critique my essay

[Cwidis]

Hello everyone,

I have my essay practices in this Google docs. Can anyone provide a critique?. Thanks.

Issue Topics: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VPlp13n1bb5t_pL4GrTOM3LuFq_auWvnVUX19APHIDA/edit?usp=sharing
Argument Topics: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mLBvnCzsystM0nVUiyVNByhKuRPZ0a7KTlYE3wUoNl0/edit?usp=sharing

Edited November 12, 2017 by Cwidis

[CoreyM]

Hey Cwidis,

Here's a link to an ETS website where they have sample Issue and Argument essays, along with scores and critiques for them. I've found these very helpful in estimating essay scores.

https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/argument/sample_responses

https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/issue/sample_responses

Some brief pointers I'd suggest are, for Argument essays, always focus on and analyze the logic. This includes finding flaws in the logic. Try to avoid just stating that you agree or disagree with statements. Answers like that tend to be vague and invite low scores from the graders. Also, only focus on the major points. If you get caught up in small details, your essay won't flow and won't be convincing. Finally, only use information found in the argument. Don't assume what's not stated. Also, try to find unstated assumptions. Following these pieces of advice should help you in crafting a well-focused, high-scoring essay. It's about writing smart with a purpose, not filling up the prompt with a slew of words.

Corey