The first thing that caught my eye is the fact that you have written paragraphs that flow. And as a writer at https://www.freelancer.com/ and https://dissertationwriter.org I'd say that's actually not that quite simple and many do make mistake in following correct structure and writing unambiguous paragraphs but you did it from the first try. That's a huge plus. Still, make sure you proofread your essays since I found a couple of grammar mistakes. Repeat the rules of when you are supposed to use definite and indefinite articles and also when to omit them.
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